Talk:Fortifications of Troy

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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): ElizabethAcors.

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Hello!

Hi Elizabeth, You are doing a great job! I know who I am going to follow this semester! 🤗 Ed Golden Ejgold (talk) 17:11, 8 September 2017 (UTC)

Hi Elizabeth! Im Gwyneth from Greek Art Class and I am going to do a tiny review on your article!! I think you are doing a great job. I love how you have a couple pictures and a few reliable sources. There are a few smaller grammar errors. I also love how you liked to other wiki pages so that the reader can learn even more about the aspects of your topic. Your article is relatively encyclopedic but I think you could do a little more. Also your article and topic are very relevant to the group topic of warfare! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Gbjordammen (talk • contribs) 18:36, 1 November 2017 (UTC)

This page is really very good. If I were you to make it better, I would add an overview at the top of the walls of troy before going right into it. Also, I would change the section from being called purpose because it femmes vague to me. Also, consider moving the pictures to fit within each section. Also, it might help to talk more about its relation to warfare. - by Tommy Roback — Preceding unsigned comment added by Tdroback (talk • contribs) 22:37, 6 November 2017 (UTC)

Hi Elizabeth! Good job on the article! I really like how much detail you were able to find on the walls. The main thing I would be careful about is switching between the walls' mythological history and their actual history, because there are a couple of sentences there that seem to imply that the mythological history is just as true as the archaeological evidence. I think the best way to fix this would be to just add in a section and talk abut the mythological history separate from what is actually there. Keep up the good work! -Robert Yancey Rob6820 (talk) 21:23, 15 November 2017 (UTC)

Comments from Prof. Paga

Hi Elizabeth - this is a good start! I have a couple suggestions for improving your article, plus you've got some good feedback already from the peer-reviewers and your TF, Robert.

• Make sure to differentiate between different phases of the walls. They were not all built at once. You refer to Troy II as being a specific phase -- it might be helpful to go through each phase, one by one, and describe the differences. For instance, when were the towers added? Did the circuit (overall extent) of the walls expand over time?
  
• As mentioned by Robert, it might be useful to have a section on the mythical history of the walls (association with the Trojan War, built by Poseidon and Apollo), and then another section on the actual archaeological remains.
  
• This sentence is confusing: "Therefore, the defense was no the prime use..." What exactly do you mean by this? Were the walls not supposed to be defensive?
  

Jpaga (talk) 15:37, 27 November 2017 (UTC)