Talk:"Heroes" (David Bowie song)/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:48, 14 June 2022 (UTC)

I am going to review this from today onwards, but it may take three days with my work schedule. --K. Peake 09:48, 14 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for reviewing Kyle. Appreciate it as always. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 13:55, 14 June 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Replace hlist with bullet points per Template:Infobox song
 * Done


 * You should mention what album the song is from in the first sentence
 * "It was recorded in" → "The song was recorded in"
 * The release sentence should be the last one of the para, as writing and recording info is earlier stuff
 * ""from his 12th studio album of the same name." → "from the album."
 * Regarding these four, I modeled the paragraph after Aftermath (Rolling Stones album) and to me it makes sense for flow. I'm also kind of struggling to envision exactly what you're saying for some reason. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:22, 18 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Writing/recording is what led to the creation of the song, so logically it should come before release. Also, I'm not too sure if you should be using an album article as the blueprint for this. --K. Peake 06:19, 19 June 2022 (UTC)
 * How's that look? – zmbro (talk) (cont) 19:14, 19 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Fantastic! --K. Peake 07:03, 20 June 2022 (UTC)


 * Pipe synthesiser to Synthesizer
 * That would make it a WP:SEAOFBLUE situation – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:22, 18 June 2022 (UTC)


 * "one from East and West Berlin." → "one from East Berlin and the other from the West."
 * "inspired by Bowie's witnessing of a" → "inspired by Bowie witnessing a" to be less wordy
 * Both done


 * I don't think the events in his own life are notable for the lead
 * Are you sure? I included that to solidify the "dark undertones" part (cuz the song really isn't all hopes and dreams like lots think it is), and there's also a whole paragraph in the body devoted to it. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:22, 18 June 2022 (UTC)
 * A lot of inspiration has been mentioned by this point, making the addition seem like overkill. --K. Peake 06:19, 19 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I see what you mean. Removed that.


 * Before going into live performances, shouldn't you add a part about the video synopsis?
 * I mean the video itself is just him against a light backdrop. Also, it's the single edit which I've always hated. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:22, 18 June 2022 (UTC)


 * "versions of the track, titled" → "versions of "'Heroes'", titled"
 * "the single only peaked at" → "the song only peaked at"
 * Why are the higher positions than the UK like Australia and Ireland not mentioned?
 * How would you work it? Like "charted well throughout Europe and Australia but only peaked at..."? – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:22, 18 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Maybe add after the Hot 100, "though reached numbers..." with the respective positions, or something like that. --K. Peake 06:19, 19 June 2022 (UTC)
 * So I put "but reached the top 20 in multiple European countries and Australia." Not sure if I like it but as it stands the third para is already longer than the others and it shouldn't get much longer. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 19:14, 19 June 2022 (UTC)


 * The reception sentence should be the first of the second para instead
 * Did you mean the third? And how it is now follows the flow of the article. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:22, 18 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Yes that is what I meant, as reception should come before promo info. --K. Peake 06:19, 19 June 2022 (UTC)
 * How about that? – zmbro (talk) (cont) 19:14, 19 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Definitely better; I take no issue with the release info being next to reception since it was for an edited version anyway. --K. Peake 07:03, 20 June 2022 (UTC)


 * "the song's reputation has grown substantially and is now seen" → "the song has grown substantially in reputation and been seen"
 * "a version by" → "a version of "'Heroes'" by" and you should mention the critical reception too; if so, split The X Factor part
 * Mention at least one series and/or film that it appears in
 * Above three done

Backing track

 * Img looks good!
 * "and heroic" and "I had" → "and heroic" and, "I had" per this being a full sentence quoted
 * "took place entirely at in" → "took place entirely in"
 * "a ballroom, and was" → "a ballroom and was"
 * "returning from Low," → "returning from Station to Station (1976)," with the wikilink, per the source
 * "lasting over eight minutes." → "lasting eight minutes."
 * Pipe synthesiser to Synthesizer
 * "towards the end."" → "towards the end"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * Pipe ARP Solina to ARP String Ensemble
 * A citation should be at the end of the first sentence of the fourth para per usage of a quote
 * Wikilink bassline
 * Pipe register to Register (music)
 * All done, easy peasy

Vocals

 * Img looks good!
 * "but he and Visconti departed." → "but he and Visconti had departed." or anything else that specifies clearly
 * "he requested Visconti leave" → "Bowie requested Visconti leave"
 * Both done

Music

 * Img looks good!
 * Wikilink chord progression
 * "The song in mainly in the" → "The song is mainly in the"
 * "from the parallel minor, D minor, back" → "from the parallel D minor back"
 * Pipe percussion to Percussion instrument
 * "finds it a" → "finds the song a"
 * "are both dastardly," turning into a" → "are both dastardly", turning into a" per MOS:QUOTE
 * Add the release year of "I'm Waiting for the Man"
 * All done

Lyrics

 * "of Berlin Bowie lived in" → "of Berlin that Bowie lived in"
 * "that separate the third verse," → "separating the third verse,"
 * Wikilink octave
 * "the sense that the narrator's love" → "the sense the narrator's love" to avoid overusage of that
 * "pleasure of being alive."" → "pleasure of being alive"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * "Likewise, Pegg contests that the song contains" → "Likewise, Pegg contests the song contains"
 * "the repeated announcement that" → "the repeated announcement of"
 * Add the release year of "The Bewlay Brothers" in brackets
 * "themes of his earlier works" → "themes of Bowie's earlier works"
 * "during World War II, also provided" → "during World War II, provided" to avoid using also twice in one sentence
 * Wikilink alcoholism
 * Pipe folk to Folk music
 * All done

Promotion and release

 * Pipe Granada Television to ITV Granada
 * Wikilink 7" per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * Remove the comma after television special
 * "On 19 October," → "On 19 October 1977,"
 * "using a new backing track by Bowie," → "using a new backing track by the artist," to avoid using his name twice in one sentence
 * Pipe 12" single to Twelve-inch single
 * "it was sequenced as" → "the song was sequenced as" or something similar, as this is about the song not necessarily that version
 * Remove overly obvious wikilink on Paris
 * Pipe wet dream to Nocturnal emission
 * "reaching a low 126" → "reaching a low number 126"
 * Remove comma after (9)
 * Above done


 * The Best of David Bowie 1974/1979 is not sourced as including the song
 * Wrong link, went to the 69/74 comp. Fixed the link – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:22, 18 June 2022 (UTC)


 * Remove comma after Nothing Has Changed
 * Done


 * Question for you: I think I need to add a picture in this section as it's kind of blank. Thinking a dual pic of Bolan and Crosby what do you think? – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:22, 18 June 2022 (UTC)
 * I never picked up on this until you said it, but the section is a bit too blank and yes a pic of them would be appropriate. --K. Peake 06:19, 19 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Thought so. Added. I thought about doing an NF image of the MV but I wouldn't have a rationale so this will suffice. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 19:35, 19 June 2022 (UTC)

Critical reception

 * "Several welcomed it as" → "Several welcomed the song as"
 * "also considered it a" → "also considered the song a"
 * "despite the dreariness of the album as" → "despite the dreariness of "Heroes" as"
 * All done

Retrospective appraisal

 * Quote box looks good!
 * Wikilink rock and roll
 * "described it as" → "described "'Heroes'" as"
 * "despite that fact."" → "despite that fact"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * Above three done


 * [4][5][10][11][15][59] is too many refs together; move some around to fix this, probably a few to after "as a classic"
 * Or make it similar to a page like The Empire Strikes Back? – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:22, 18 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Yes, the cast section of that article gives a proper model to follow here. --K. Peake 06:19, 19 June 2022 (UTC)


 * "wrote that it" → "wrote that the song"
 * Hopefully we're not saying "song" too much... – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:22, 18 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Ironically, this is to avoid overusage of "it", although you could use the track instead if you want? --K. Peake 06:19, 19 June 2022 (UTC)
 * More ironically, I use "it" so we're not saying "song" so much xP – zmbro (talk) (cont) 19:35, 19 June 2022 (UTC)


 * "spirit over adversity."" → "spirit over adversity"."
 * "for the spirit."" → "for the spirit"."
 * "they mostly pan the" → "the biographers mostly pan the"
 * Above three done


 * [4][5][10][15][59] is too many refs together again; move some around like I suggested on the previous instance
 * Made it like the above – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:22, 18 June 2022 (UTC)


 * Pipe Uncut to Uncut (magazine)
 * Add the release year of "Life on Mars?" in brackets
 * "He recognised it as a" → "He recognised the track as a"
 * Above three done

Accolades

 * [72][73][74][75][76] is too many refs together again; obviously, move them to being after the publications to fix this
 * Made it like the others – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:22, 18 June 2022 (UTC)


 * "the song has placed at" → "the song has been placed at"
 * A position of number 36 is listed for Q, not 34
 * "and later moved up to" → "later moving the song up to"
 * TIME should not be capitalised
 * The Radio X source gives a position of number 12, not number 24
 * Above five corrected


 * Are you sure Acclaimed Music is a reliable source?
 * I've used it for FAs and they've passed so yeah it should be fine. It's just an aggregate website like Rotten Tomatoes or Metacritic. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:22, 18 June 2022 (UTC)

Later chart success

 * "It spent two weeks on" → "The song spent two weeks on"
 * [92][93] shouldn't these be the other way round to correspond with the countries?
 * Remove comma after the Netherlands chart position
 * All fixed

Live performances

 * "the latter appear on that tour's" → "the latter appeared on its"
 * "made subsequently appearances during" → "made subsequent appearances during"
 * Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
 * "Also sang at his" → "The song was also sang at his"
 * All done

Cover versions and tributes

 * Img looks good!
 * Some of these covers still need significant info added; elsewise remove them per WP:SONGCOVER
 * They're all sourced by Pegg. He obviously lists a lot more but I picked out some of the more major ones, doing something similar for Life on Mars?. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:22, 18 June 2022 (UTC)
 * You missed my point; I wasn't disputing if they are sourced or not, but rather if they have the notability to pass the guideline. --K. Peake 06:19, 19 June 2022 (UTC)
 * They probably don't the more I think about it. Able to confirm a few but removed all the ones I couldn't. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 19:35, 19 June 2022 (UTC)


 * Pipe Modern Rock Tracks to Alternative Airplay
 * Pipe Hot 100 Airplay to Radio Songs (chart)
 * "Top 40 Mainstream chart." → "Mainstream Top 40 chart." with the wikilink
 * "but noting that lead singer" → "but noting the lead singer"
 * Wikilink CD single
 * "from planet earth."" → "from planet earth"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * Pipe German Foreign Office to Federal Foreign Office
 * "with Dave Gahan stating, "Bowie" → "with Gahan stating, "Bowie"
 * Above done


 * The song is not sourced as being added to King Crimson's set in 2000
 * That part is sourced by Pegg, which I fixed – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:22, 18 June 2022 (UTC)

Usage in media

 * The medal ceremonies part is not sourced
 * Removed as checking out this it might have been OR from before expansion – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:22, 18 June 2022 (UTC)


 * Remove excess space after The Parole Officer.
 * Oops, done


 * Make sure you add the years of any media appearances
 * Unfortunately don't have the years for TV shows as Pegg doesn't specify – zmbro (talk) (cont) 16:22, 18 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Apart from a where Wiki article leads to a show with the year listed, then you can. --K. Peake 06:19, 19 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Done


 * [5] should only be invoked at the end of the sentence
 * Pipe Praia do Futuro to Futuro Beach
 * Remove the release year in brackets for Jojo Rabbit because it is already introduced as five years later
 * Above three done

Personnel

 * Pipe ARP Solina String Ensemble to ARP String Ensemble
 * Done

Weekly charts

 * Place Record World in brackets for the US chart
 * Wikilink Euro Digital Song Sales per MOS:LINK2SECT

Certifications

 * Good

The Wallflowers version

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; that review went at my ideal pace! --K. Peake 08:34, 16 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for reviewing Kyle. I have some replies above I'd like you to check out but other than that I've responded to everything. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 18:24, 18 June 2022 (UTC)
 * Think that's everything. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 19:35, 19 June 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now and regarding the copyright, it appears that Radio X coincedentally uses book quotes, so there's no real violation! --K. Peake 07:03, 20 June 2022 (UTC)