Talk:¿Qué Creías?/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:36, 12 May 2022 (UTC)

This is the article before mine in the queue, making a review only appropriate! --K. Peake 07:36, 12 May 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * The A-side is not sourced anywhere in the body
 * Done
 * Only keep Mariachi under genre(s) in the infobox, as the other two are only sourced as influences
 * Done
 * Pipe EMI Latin to Capitol Latin
 * Done
 * Replace hlist with bullet points per Template:Infobox song
 * Done
 * "It was written by" → "The song was written by" removing the backup vocalist and brother/music producer introductions since them being solely in the body is sufficient
 * Done
 * Add a sentence after the above one mentioning that A.B. challenged Astudillo to write the song before they got to Las Vegas and what it was inspired by
 * Done
 * ""¿Qué Creías?" is a mariachi ballad, that Selena describes as" → "A mariachi ballad, the song was described by Selena as" with the pipe
 * Done
 * "It is the singer's torch song, the lyrics" → "It is the singer's torch song and the lyrics"
 * Done
 * "and feminist lyricism" → "and female style of lyricism." per the body, ending the sentence here because the other two parts aren't notable for reception
 * Done
 * The commercial performance sentence should be the first of the second para instead
 * Done
 * "often asks for a" → "often asked for a"
 * Done
 * "in the Netflix two-part limited drama" → "by Christian Serratos in the Netflix two-part limited drama" with the wikilink
 * Done
 * Mention the Alicia Villareal performance in the lead after the above sentence
 * Done

Background and production

 * Remove comma after brother and music producer
 * Done
 * "the tour bus broke down." → "the bus broke down." to avoid overusage of the full name
 * Done
 * "really let it roar."" → "really let it roar"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * Done
 * "Guitarist of the group, Chris Perez, recalled" → "The group's guitarist Chris Perez recalled"
 * Done

Music, theme and lyrics

 * Retitle to Music and lyrics, as the theme is to do with the lyrics
 * Done
 * Most of the direct quotes in this section should be in critical reception instead; you could start a reception section below with this and the other form of reception in the commercial success section
 * Done
 * ""¿Qué Creías?" is a" → "Musically, "¿Qué Creías?" is a"
 * Done
 * Pipe ballad to Sentimental ballad
 * Done
 * After ballad, you should write "and a", moving the refs also to the end of the sentence instead
 * Done
 * The conjunto influences are not sourced
 * It is sourced to Browne, 1995 (Entertainment Weekly)
 * Pipe culture of Latin America to Latin American culture
 * Done
 * The instrumentation sentences that are currently at the end of the section should come directly after the above one instead
 * Done
 * The part about Selena painting herself as a wronged women should be the first one of the lyrics sentences
 * Done
 * "she tells him that he" → "letting him know he"
 * Done
 * "confessing that she can live" → "confessing she can live"
 * Done
 * Remove comma after Tucson Citizen and it is quotes like this that definitely belong in reception instead
 * Done
 * ""with such aplomb."" → ""with such aplomb"." per MOS:QUOTE; fix multiple issues like this with the quotes
 * Done
 * "and lyrics echoing the" → "and lyrics echo the"
 * Done
 * "showcases her as" → "showcasing her as"
 * Done
 * "John Storm Robert, believed "¿Qué Creías?" lack" → "John Storm Robert believed "¿Qué Creías?" lacks"
 * Done
 * Lola Beltran → Lola Beltrán with the wikilink
 * Done
 * For any quotes that will be moved to reception, ensure that you attribute them
 * Done
 * "fire." and found the track" → "fire", finding the track"
 * Done
 * Pipe cumbia music to Cumbia
 * Done
 * "of the Lakeland Ledger, found that" → "of the Lakeland Ledger found that" with the pipe
 * Done
 * Wikilink song structure
 * Done

Commercial success

 * Create a Reception section instead here with the critical, radio and commercial reception; place critical commentary as the first para
 * Done
 * "it entered at number 38 on" → ""¿Qué Creías?" entered at number 38 on"
 * Done
 * I think the radio information should come before commercial performance
 * Done
 * "received extensive airplay in" → "received extensive airplay in various locations, including" only mentioning notable ones like Austin and Houston, so you avoid a supermarket list
 * Done
 * "rose to number 30,[23] though it fell to" → "rose to number 30 on the chart,[23] though fell to" to avoid overusage of it
 * Done
 * Remove the holiday season rise sentence, as the following one will still be succeeding a sentence about the song going up
 * Done
 * "to number 24 the following week," → "to number 24 for the week of January 16, 1993,"
 * Done
 * "on the chart for an additional four weeks before falling off, for" → "on the Hot Latin Songs chart for an additional four weeks before falling off, lasting for"
 * Done
 * The music video, press conference and live performances should be moved to a promotion section instead
 * Done
 * Wikilink music video
 * Done
 * Pipe EMI Latin to Capitol Latin
 * Done
 * "in Monterrey, Mexico, the record company aimed to" → "in Monterrey, Mexico, aiming to" with the pipe
 * Done
 * Remove "in the state" at the end of the report sentence because that is implied
 * Done
 * "at number ten on" → "at number 10 on" per MOS:NUM
 * Done
 * Add the date that the song received the certification and mention it was in the United States
 * Done
 * Add the before Del Rio News-Herald
 * I'm not sure what you're asking here.
 * "to convey that message" → "to convey the message"
 * Done
 * "independence from it."" → "independence from it"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * Done
 * "Selena performed "¿Qué Creías?" on" → "Selena's performance "¿Qué Creías?" on" but it is not sourced as being in 1994 anywhere
 * It is listed on the inlay of the DVD as well as in commentary from Johnny Canales.
 * Alicia Villareal → Alicia Villarreal with the wikilink
 * Done
 * The benefit concert and limited drama should come after the promotion info in the following section because they are not through Selena
 * Done
 * ""just so badass." because of the singer's" → ""just so badass" because of her heavy" per the source
 * Done

Promotion and media appearances

 * Make this the last section, with one para for Selena's promotion and another for the benefit concert and limited drama
 * Done

Weekly charts

 * Wikilink Hot Latin Songs
 * Done

Certification

 * Good

Credits and personnel

 * This should be the section before charts/certifications
 * Done
 * Pipe programming to Programming (music)
 * Done
 * Pipe arranger to Arrangement
 * Done

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; that didn't take too long! --K. Peake 09:21, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your review! I've left maybe one or two comments for issues that were not made too clear for me. Thanks – jona  ✉ 21:49, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Nice work, however I have two points left; the A-side should be surrounded by speech marks and source it in the body by mentioning the release, also you need to add "the" before Del Rio News Herald. --K. Peake 09:36, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ Thanks – jona  ✉ 11:41, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, did some brief copy editing but good job elsewise! --K. Peake 09:44, 14 May 2022 (UTC)