Talk:Álmos/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 18:53, 31 October 2013 (UTC)

I'll be glad to take this one. I hope to have comments posted in the next few hours. Thanks as always for your work, Borsoka. -- Khazar2 (talk) 18:53, 31 October 2013 (UTC)
 * As a side note, this may be the first time I've had a chance to review an article with actual Khazars in it, which I'm quite excited about. (My own username comes not from ethnic heritage but a previous obsession with Pavic's Dictionary of the Khazars.) -- Khazar2 (talk) 19:58, 31 October 2013 (UTC)
 * Dear Khazar2, thank you for your review. Please find my comments below. Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 1 November 2013 (UTC)

Okay, this looks good so far. I've posted some initial comments below.
 * " sacred ruler or kende of the Hungarians, their military leader or gyula" -- this is a little confusing. Do you mean that these are the four possibilities for what he could have been? Or that ruler/kende are synonyms, as are military leader/gyula?
 * Thanks. Fixed (?). Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 1 November 2013 (UTC)
 * can it be clarified what the origin of the infobox image is File:Almos2.jpg?
 * Thanks. Deleted (Sorry, I cannot answer the question. Furthermore, it is not the best quality picture.) Borsoka (talk) 02:43, 1 November 2013 (UTC)
 * " Gyula Kristó[11] and Victor Spinei" -- it would help to give a word of context on these two. Could you add something like "Historians Gyula..."
 * Thanks. Fixed. Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 1 November 2013 (UTC)
 * "as it is proposed by Kristó" -- do you mean that the preceding sentence is Kristo's theory? Or that he also proposed the name?
 * Thanks. Fixed. Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 1 November 2013 (UTC)
 * "Early life" -- seems like a bit of a misnomer for this section, which entirely deals with events before his birth
 * Thanks. Modiefied. Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 1 November 2013 (UTC)
 * " that his election was initiated by the Khazar khagan." -- is the "his" here Arpad or Almos?
 * Thanks. Fixed. Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 1 November 2013 (UTC)
 * "Gyula Kristó and many other historians" -- only Kristo appears to be cited here. Does she/he mention the other historians, too?
 * Thanks. A reference to an enncyclopedia is added. Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 1 November 2013 (UTC)
 * "our word an our command." -- should this be "and"?
 * Thanks. Fixed. Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 1 November 2013 (UTC)
 * File:HetVezer-ChroniconPictum.jpg needs a tag for its US copyright status. -- Khazar2 (talk) 19:58, 31 October 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks. Deleted (Sorry, I cannot answer the question. Furthermore, it is not the best quality picture.) Borsoka (talk) 03:00, 1 November 2013 (UTC)

Checklist
I've removed another image from the article; since Ukraine doesn't have freedom of panorama, it's not clear that a picture of a sculpture is uncopyrighted until we have more information about the sculpture's origins, which wasn't readily available. With this image cut, the article is ready to pass. -- Khazar2 (talk) 14:17, 1 November 2013 (UTC)