Talk:Álvaro Betancourt/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 21:10, 7 January 2020 (UTC)

Will spend some time looking at this review and leaving some comments. MWright96 (talk) 21:10, 7 January 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "He made his senior debut when he was just 15 years old," - more concise and neutral at 15 years old,
 * ✅, changed to your recommendation.


 * "He earned his senior debut for his nation" - the
 * ✅, changed to your recommendation.


 * Delink United States per MOS:OVERLINK
 * ✅, delinked.


 * "At international level, Betancourt captained the Puerto Rico U20s" - better: [[Puerto Rico national under-20 football team|Puerto Rico U20 side|undefined
 * ✅, changed to your recommendation.


 * "Betancourt appeared for the under-23 national team in 2015 CONCACAF Men's Olympic Qualifying Championship qualification." - in the 2015 CONCAFAF Men's Olympic Championship qualification stages.
 * ✅, changed to your recommendation.

Early life

 * Am not seeing the whole of the second sentence supported by the ValpoAthletics source but the NCSASports citation does contain that particular information
 * ✅, added the NCSA citation at the end of that sentence (and kept it linked at the end of the paragraph as well).

Early career in Puerto Rico

 * "While playing at the senior level for the club, he continued to play" - try to avoid the close repetition of a similar word such as "play" in a single sentence
 * ✅, changed the first instance from "playing" to "appearing".

College

 * "Betancourt found the field a bit more as a sophomore," - better and more formal As a sophomore, Betancourt was selected to play more for the club,
 * ✅, the sentence now reads "As a sophomore, Betancourt was selected to play more, making five appearances for the Crusaders." I didn't include the "for the club" part of your recommendation because Valparaiso is a university, not a club. I could add in "for the school" or "for the team" if you think it would make the sentence flow better?

Return from college

 * "He had debuted for the club in the preseason Copa Bayamón" - wikilink Copa Bayamón to 2017 Bayamon Cup
 * ✅, don't know how I didn't manage to find that article. Thanks for the catch.

International career

 * "Betancourt captained the Puerto Rico U20 national team in 2013 CONCACAF U-20 Championship qualifying," - in the 2013 CONCACAF U-20 Championship qualifying stage,
 * ✅, changed to your recommendation.


 * "playing all three matches in the first round of the Caribbean zone." - the The U-20 national team: picked the harvest source does not mention this, but the Soccerway and Betancourt Captaining Puerto Rico U-20 Team at CONCACAF Qualifiers sources do. I suggest citation bundling.
 * ✅, moved the Valpo source to the end of the sentence and added the Soccerway source here as well (while retaining it at the end of the paragraph).


 * "and played in both matches, but the side were defeated by" - and contested both matches; the side were defeated by
 * ✅, changed to your recommendation.


 * "Betancourt earned five caps during his eligibility for the U20s." - better to reword it as U20 side. for clarification reasons
 * ✅, changed to your recommendation.


 * "The last time Betancourt would represent Puerto Rico actually came at the U23 level," - more concise and formal was at the U23 level,
 * ✅, changed to your recommendation.


 * The whole first sentence of the second paragraph is unsupported by PrimeraHora. Soccerway does mention it though and will require its citation to be put at the end of the sentence
 * ✅, added the Soccerway citation and moved the PrimeraHora citation to the end of the sentence.


 * "He was called up for 2015 CONCACAF Men's Olympic Qualifying Championship qualification" - to participate in the 2015 CONCACAF Men's Olympic Qualifying Championship qualification stage
 * ✅, changed to your recommendation.

Senior career

 * "After three years without an appearance at senior level," - not mentioned by Primera Hora but the Caribbean Football Database does have this information
 * ✅, added the CFD citation at the end of the sentence.


 * "Betancourt was called back up in June 2015 for the first camp under new manager Garabet Avedissian." - the Primera Hora source doesn't mention anything about a camp but it does say it was a match. A minor rewording is required here
 * ✅, changed the wording to read "first matches" if that works.


 * " He would be named to the bench twice more during that international window, but did not appear" - that international window; he was not selected to play
 * ✅, changed to your recommendation.

Career statisics

 * "Sources:[30][26][19]" - the refs should be in numerical order
 * ✅, reordered.