Talk:11th Missouri Infantry Regiment (Confederate)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 00:35, 26 June 2020 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:35, 26 June 2020 (UTC)
 * - I've rewritten the lead to provide more context, tried to ensure that the contextual transition between battles is present, and made a few other minor corrections, such as clarify whether loss numbers are total casualties or just deaths. I'm ready for a full review whenever you want to read through this one closely. Hog Farm Bacon 04:15, 15 July 2020 (UTC)


 * No DABs
 * Hatted and removed the unecessary (Confederate) in the first sentence
 * Needs some maps.
 * Added two
 * although regimental positioning prevented it from taking part in a follow-up charge unneeded detail for the lede
 * Removed
 * Awful lot of "regiment" in the lede. Mix it up a bit.
 * Done
 * the defenses of Little Rock proximity alert for the city name. Perhaps, "outflanked the city's defenses"? and something similar in the 1863 section where there are 3 Little Rocks in consecutive sentences.
 * Done
 * Confederate charge at the Battle of Jenkins' Ferry, change to "attack" to avoid proximity with charge
 * Done
 * saw no more major action awkward
 * Is the new phrasing better?
 * Early in the fighting, Parsons' Brigade proximity alert, change to "the brigade" and the same for Burns' Brigade in the last section
 * Done
 * playing a role in participating in
 * Done
 * Trailing comma after Arkadelphia, Arkansas
 * Added
 * Why was the regiment redesignated?
 * Not specified in sources
 * driving Burns' brigade from the field capitalization
 * Done
 * Really gotta sensitize yourself to using names in close proximity. While understandable, it's doesn't flow well.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:52, 17 July 2020 (UTC)
 * All of these first round comments are addressed in some way or another. Hog Farm Bacon 03:57, 19 July 2020 (UTC)
 * - Have you had a chance to look over this one again? Hog Farm Bacon 14:47, 28 July 2020 (UTC)