Talk:1906 Atlantic hurricane season/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)

I hate to do this, but the problems above are high in number, though Ill admit I was being piky here, I am failing GAN, sorry HF25. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The season was fairly active, with eleven storms, of which six became hurricanes and three became major hurricanes" wtf is a major hurricane? YE  Pacific   Hurricane
 * Linked to SSHS section. 00:33, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * " July saw a period of activity, with no known storms." activity? do you mean inactivity? YE  Pacific   Hurricane
 * Good call! 00:33, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "However, in August, the streak of inactivity ended with two storms, including powerful hurricane." Do you mean "a powerful hurricane"? YE   Pacific   Hurricane
 * Fixed. 00:33, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * " November sent the final storm of the season, which impacted Cuba and dissipated on November 9." Slightly awkward, I suggest changing it to "The final storm of the season impacted Cuba in early November." YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Reworded. 00:33, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Merge the methodology and timeline sections into a season summary section. YE  Pacific   Hurricane
 * Absolutely not. 00:33, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "This is the manner in which all of the eleven known storms in the 1906 season were identified by hurricane expert José Fernández-Partagás's reanalysis of hurricane seasons between 1851 and 1910." wikilink Atlantic hurricane reanalysis in the sentence.
 * 'kay. 00:33, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The information Partagás and his colleague uncovered was largely adopted by the National Oceanic and Atmospheric Administration's Atlantic hurricane reanalysis in their updates to the Atlantic hurricane database (HURDAT), with some slight adjustments. HURDAT is the official source for such hurricane data as track and intensity, although due to a sparsity of available records at the time the storms existed, listings on some storms are incomplete.[2][3]" Assuming you do the above, delink ARS here.
 * Ding. 00:37, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The information Partagás and his colleague uncovered was largely adopted by the National Oceanic and Atmospheric Administration's Atlantic hurricane reanalysis in their updates to the Atlantic hurricane database (HURDAT), with some slight adjustments. HURDAT is the official source for such hurricane data as track and intensity, although due to a sparsity of available records at the time the storms existed, listings on some storms are incomplete.[2][3]" I feel you should mention or wikilink the Hurricane Research Division somewhere in here. YE  Pacific   Hurricane
 * Why?  HurricaneFan 25  00:37, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The information Partagás and his colleague uncovered was largely adopted by the National Oceanic and Atmospheric Administration's Atlantic hurricane reanalysis in their updates to the Atlantic hurricane database (HURDAT), with some slight adjustments. HURDAT is the official source for such hurricane data as track and intensity, although due to a sparsity of available records at the time the storms existed, listings on some storms are incomplete.[2][3]"" Changed National Oceanic and Atmospheric Administration to National Hurricane Center." YE   Pacific   Hurricane
 * HURDAT's data is analyzed by the NOAA, not the NHC. 00:37, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * In the timeline graph, instead of saying "Hurricane #2" just say "Hurricane 2". It's simpler that way. YE  Pacific   Hurricane
 * No, per other old-season GA/FA timelines. 00:37, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * On June 10, a weather station in Havana reported a minimum air pressure of 1002 mbar (hPa; 29.59 inHg);[5] however, the minimum pressure of the system itself is unknown.[2]"" delink basic units. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * They aren't basic units. 00:37, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Any damage from TS 1? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * None available. 00:37, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "On June 17, a minimum pressure of 979 mbar (hPa; 28.91 inHg) was recorded, as the hurricane passed over southern Florida.[2]" wikilink Florida as it is not a country. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * 'kay. 00:37, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The system turned toward the east-southeast on June 21, later recurving towards the east-northeast on June 22. The system weakened to a tropical depression by June 23, transitioning into an extratropical cyclone later that day.[2]" I'd change "recurving" to "re-curving". YE  Pacific   Hurricane
 * Eh, no, IMO. 00:39, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The system turned toward the east-southeast on June 21, later recurving towards the east-northeast on June 22. The system weakened to a tropical depression by June 23, transitioning into an extratropical cyclone later that day.[2]" Change one of "the system" to "the cyclone" or "two" or w/e. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Good catch! 00:39, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The system weakened to a tropical depression by June 23, transitioning into an extratropical cyclone later that day.[2]" Wikilink extratropical cyclone. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Great idea :) 00:39, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * " Impacts caused by the hurricane were minimal—a boat was partially dismantled at Key West, and a wharf at Coconut Grove was also damaged.[5]" Wikilink Key West. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Will do. 00:39, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The system further intensified into a powerful tropical storm on August 24, with winds of 70 mph (110 km/h). However, the system began to weaken, and the tropical storm transitioned into an extratropical storm, with winds of 60 mph (95 km/h).[2]" again, don't use "the system" in back to back sentences. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Done. 00:51, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "However, the system began to weaken, and the tropical storm transitioned into an extratropical storm, with winds of 60 mph (95 km/h).[2]" wikilink extratropical cyclone. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * No, that'd overlinking. 00:51, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The fourth storm of the season was believed to have originated as a tropical storm off the coast of Africa on August 25." which coast?
 * Just Africa...no country needed. 00:51, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The hurricane slowly intensified, eventually reaching hurricane status on August 28." why do you say "the hurricane" if you say it reached hurricane status in the same sentence? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Fixed. 00:55, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * " As the hurricane headed west-northwestward on August 31, the hurricane passed by the Lesser Antilles as a Category 2 hurricane."on what scale? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * I think it's obvious, SSHS, from the links; not necessary IMO. 00:55, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The hurricane became a Category 3 major hurricane on September 2 as it passed north of the Dominican Republic." "Category 3 major hurricane"? I'd suggest knocking out "Category 3" or "major hurricane". If you chose to knock out "major hurricane", explain/wikilink it. YE  Pacific   Hurricane
 * Ping. 00:55, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The hurricane slowly intensified, eventually reaching hurricane status on August 28. As the hurricane headed west-northwestward on August 31, the hurricane passed by the Lesser Antilles as a Category 2 hurricane. The hurricane became a Category 3 major hurricane on September 2 as it passed north of the Dominican Republic. The hurricane further intensified into a Category 4 hurricane on September 5, located east of the Bahamas. Throughout the day on September 6, the hurricane began to curve northward. During the evening, the hurricane weakened to Category 3 hurricane and began to travel northeastward on September 7.[2]" How many times do you have to say "the hurricane"? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Fixing... 00:55, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The hurricane slowly intensified, eventually reaching hurricane status on August 28. As the hurricane headed west-northwestward on August 31, the hurricane passed by the Lesser Antilles as a Category 2 hurricane. The hurricane became a Category 3 major hurricane on September 2 as it passed north of the Dominican Republic. The hurricane further intensified into a Category 4 hurricane on September 5, located east of the Bahamas. Throughout the day on September 6, the hurricane began to curve northward. During the evening, the hurricane weakened to Category 3 hurricane and began to travel northeastward on September 7.[2]" any exact times? Like 000 UTC September 5 or whatnot. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Although I chose to do that on Debra, I feel it's too technical now, so no; although they are available. 00:57, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The hurricane maintained its intensity and passed northwest of Bermuda on September 9, where winds reached 70 mph (110 km/h) and air pressures fell to 988 mbar (hPa; 29.18 inHg)." Finish talking about MH before you talk about impact. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * That really isn't impact... 00:58, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * " However, the tropical storm then changed course and began to head west-northwest on September 11, as it slowly intensified." no need for comma before "as" AFAIK. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Removed. 01:04, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * " As it maintained its intensity on September 15, the hurricane began to turn westward as it continued approached the coast of South Carolina on September 17." changed one of the "as". YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Fixed. 01:04, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * " As it maintained its intensity on September 15, the hurricane began to turn westward as it continued approached the coast of South Carolina on September 17." seems like a word is missing here, it should be changed to "continuted to approach" IMO. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Fixed. 01:04, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * " As it maintained its intensity on September 15, the hurricane began to turn westward as it continued approached the coast of South Carolina on September 17." wikilink South Carolina as it is not that common of a place from a non-US reader.
 * Done. 01:04, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The hurricane caused moderate impacts — two hundred people were stranded at Wrightsville Beach, North Carolina." why were they stranded? waves? flooding? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * tbh idk. 01:04, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "Overall damage to shipping and crops in the Carolinas was moderate.[5] A total of seven people were killed, and at least $2,016,000 in damage was recorded.[10]" Decent sentence, but IMO should be comined to form "Overall damage to shipping and crops in the Carolinas was moderate;[5] seven people were killed, and at least $2,016,000 in damage was recorded.[10]" YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Bum. 01:08, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * A total of seven people were killed, and at least $2,016,000 in damage was recorded. what year? YE  Pacific   Hurricane
 * Dum. 01:08, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "A total of seven people were killed, and at least $2,016,000 in damage was recorded." what currency? readers can be very bland sometimes? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Done. 01:08, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The sixth hurricane of the season originated as a tropical depression on September 19 in the southwestern Caribbean Sea. " wikilink Caribbean Sea
 * ...already in lede.  HurricaneFan 25  01:09, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The following day, the depression intensified into a tropical storm. The storm continued to steadily intensify, eventually reaching hurricane status on September 24 as it exited the Yucatán Channel." Change the second of "the storm"'s to "Six" because you mention "the storm" and "tropical storm" in back to back instances. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Absolutely not for "six," but I'll have to settle for "it".  HurricaneFan 25  01:09, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * " The hurricane continued to intensify as it moved north-northwest, attaining Category 2-strength-winds on September 25 in the Gulf of Mexico. During the afternoon, the storm intensified further into a major hurricane.[2]" explain/wikilink what a mjaor hurricane is please. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Reworded, though not that way.  HurricaneFan 25  01:12, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * " The hurricane continued to intensify as it moved north-northwest, attaining Category 2-strength-winds on September 25 in the Gulf of Mexico. During the afternoon, the storm intensified further into a major hurricane.[2]" suggest re-wording to "The hurricane continued to intensify as it moved north-northwest and it attained Category 2 intensity on the Saffir-Simpson Hurricane Scale on September 25 in the Gulf of Mexico. During the afternoon, the storm intensified further into a major hurricane.[2]" YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Reworded, though not that way.  HurricaneFan 25  01:12, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The storm became extratropical on September 29.[2]" wikilink extratropical cyclone. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Wikilinked earlier.  HurricaneFan 25  01:12, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The hurricane maintained intensity and continued to drift north-northwest,[2] and weakened to a Category 2 hurricane as it made landfall between Pensacola and Mobile on September 27.[6]" wikilink those two cities. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Must fix this, incorrect info  HurricaneFan 25  01:12, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "In Mississippi, over 300,000 cotton bales were ruined during the hurricane, amounting to $12,000,000 in damage.[12] " Wikilink Mississippi], most non-US people don't know where that is. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Done. 11:53, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "Damage in New Orleans was minimal; however, Lake Pontchartrain overflowed, flooding the city.[11]" Wikilink New Orleans. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Done. 11:53, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The hurricane killed a total 134 people.[1]" Don't you mean "The hurricane killed a total of 134 people.[1]"? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Good call! 11:53, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The transitioned to an extratropical system on October 1,[2] " wikilink extratropical cyclone. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * No, that'd be overlinking. 11:53, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "and reached the England on October 3.[15]" delink England, too common of country to be linked. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * It's not linked earlier, so I'm going to leave it. 11:53, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "and it was considered a tropical storm by October 8. As the storm headed west, it rapidly strengthened; the storm became a hurricane on October 9 and intensified into a major hurricane on October 10. As it began to curve northwestward, the hurricane made landfall in Nicaragua, and weakened to a tropical storm on October 11. It began to drift north-northwestward later that day, intensifying into a weak hurricane as it drifted into the Gulf of Honduras." source? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Added. 11:53, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "he hurricane passed over southern Florida on October 18. " wikilink Florida. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * No, as that'd be overlinking (linked earlier). 11:53, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The hurricane continued traveling north-northwest; however, it was forced to curve south-southwest,[2] as the result of a high-pressure area.[6]" "curve" to "re-curve". YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Done. 11:53, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The hurricane continued traveling north-northwest; however, it was forced to curve south-southwest,[2] as the result of a high-pressure area.[6]" wikilink high-pressure area. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Done. 11:53, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "A tropical storm was believed to have formed from a low-pressure area on the tail end of a cold front on October 14.[15] " jagron please. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Done - linked. 11:53, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The tenth storm of the season formed on October 15 as a tropical storm east of the Bahamas and north of Hispaniola." wikilink the Bahams as you do earlier in the article. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  23:39, 28 October 2011 (UTC)
 * No, linked earlier. 11:53, 29 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The final storm of the season started as a tropical depression on November 5, located in the Caribbean south of Cuba." wikilink Caribbean Sea.
 * No, linked earlier. 11:53, 29 October 2011 (UTC)