Talk:1906 Atlantic hurricane season/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contribs) 03:56, 12 November 2011 (UTC)

Lede Storms
 * "The season was fairly active, with eleven storms , of which six became hurricanes and three became major hurricanes." - Firstly, it would be a good idea to change the wording of "storms" to "named storms" or "tropical cyclones", considering the fact that all tropical cyclones intensified further into tropical systems. Secondly, link whatever you choose to change to Tropical cyclone. Lastly, you should probably change "fairly active" to "below average" or "above average" based on the average number of TCs in 1906.
 * No storms were named though. Naming didn't begin for more than 40 years. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 04:16, 12 November 2011 (UTC)
 * No.  HurricaneFan 25  15:08, 14 November 2011 (UTC)
 * " The season started on June 8 when a weak tropical storm formed in the northern Caribbean Sea; although it struck the United States, no major impacts were recorded. July saw a period of inactivity, with no known storms." - I'd change "the season started" to "The first named storm" because the current wording makes it sound like that is when the season officially started, which was not the case.
 * The term "season" did not refer to the period from June 1 to November 30 until much, much, later, but good point.  HurricaneFan 25  15:08, 14 November 2011 (UTC)
 * "However, in August, the streak of inactivity ended with two storms, including a powerful hurricane . September brought three storms, including a deadly hurricane caused catastrophic impacts in Pensacola and Mobile. October included three storms, with a powerful hurricane that killed over 200 people. The final storm of the season impacted Cuba in early November and dissipated on November 9." - Which hurricanes? You don't have to be so broad.
 * ...I linked them...?  HurricaneFan 25  15:08, 14 November 2011 (UTC)

Tropical Storm One -- More to come later, this is what I have so far. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 03:56, 12 November 2011 (UTC) Hurricane Two Hurricane Four Hurricane Five Hurricane Six Tropical Storm Seven Hurricane Eight Hurricane Eleven See Also
 * "The system continued traveling north-northwestward, making landfall near Panama City on June 13, quickly weakening to a tropical depression as the storm moved inland." - I'd change the underlined portion to "it".
 * Done.  HurricaneFan 25  15:08, 14 November 2011 (UTC)
 * "This first hurricane of the season was first noted in Santa Clara, Cuba, where rainy and windy conditions were observed on the afternoon of June 14, and many vessels sank during the storm" - Was the storm actually noted IN the city, as in, the cyclone was atop the location? If not, maybe you could find better wording? Also, do you have any idea of how many vessels sank, and any particular names?
 * Its effects were observed there; there's no specific number, just "numerous".  HurricaneFan 25  14:39, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * "During the early morning hours of June 15, the system was thought to have entered the Florida Straits during the evening."- In the first part of the sentence, you say "the early morning hours", but you then turn around to end the sentence with "during the evening." This sentence is confusing, mind changing the wording a bit?
 * Fixed.  HurricaneFan 25  14:39, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * "The system continued to travel towards the west-northwest, steadily strengthening into a hurricane by the afternoon." - All right, you say that the storm traveled west-northwest, but in the track image, it shows west with an abrupt turn towards the northeast?
 * Clarified.  HurricaneFan 25  14:39, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * "On June 17, a minimum pressure of 979 mbar (hPa; 28.91 inHg) was recorded, as the hurricane passed over southern Florida. - No need for the second comma.
 * I disagree; the comma makes it (more) crystal-clear.  HurricaneFan 25  14:39, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * "The hurricane slowly intensified as it traveled offshore, continuing to strengthen throughout the day on June 17, eventually intensifying into a Category 2 hurricane by June 18." - This sentence is just filled with how the storm strengthened...You only need to say it strengthened once. :-)
 * Reworded-ish.  HurricaneFan 25  14:39, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * " As the storm headed northwest, weakening began in the system, and the system became a tropical storm by June 21." - You mean northeast? Additionally, weakening occurred IN the system? How about the system began to weaken?
 * Fixed.  HurricaneFan 25  14:46, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * "Impacts caused by the hurricane were minimal—a boat was partially dismantled at Key West, and a wharf at Coconut Grove was also damaged." - What is a wharf? Is there a wikilink for it?
 * Linked.  HurricaneFan 25  14:46, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Just as an overview, you refer to the storm as "the system" a lot...Change it up to cyclone, hurricane, storm, etc.
 * Combined the sentences.  HurricaneFan 25  14:46, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * "By September 12, the tropical storm had intensified to a weak hurricane, and began to turn towards the north-northwest on September 13." - There is no such thing as a "weak" hurricane...Change it to "minimal"?
 * Done.  HurricaneFan 25  14:46, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * "The hurricane caused moderate impacts — two hundred people were stranded at Wrightsville Beach, North Carolina." - Change "at" to "in".
 * No; "at" seems to imply the meaning better than "in".  HurricaneFan 25  14:46, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Same for the following sentence, and the one after that.
 * See my comment above.  HurricaneFan 25  14:46, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * "Numerous wharfs were damaged or destroyed, many roofs were torn off buildings." - Add "and" between the comma and "many".
 * Done.  HurricaneFan 25  14:51, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * "The transitioned to an extratropical system on October 1,[2] and reached the England on October 3." - It reached the England? Remove "the"?
 * Nice catch!  HurricaneFan 25  14:51, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * "This hurricane originated on October 4 near Barbados as a "cyclonic perturbation"; however, no closed circulation was evident in the system." - Closed circulations aren't IN the system, they are PART of the system. Therefore, I'd change "in" to "associated with".
 * Reworded a different way.  HurricaneFan 25  14:51, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * "Barometric pressures began sinking in Panama as the system drifted,[15] and it was considered a tropical storm by October 8." - As it drifted? Where'd it drift?
 * Added.  HurricaneFan 25  14:51, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * " It began to drift north-northwestward later that day, intensifying into a weak hurricane as it drifted into the Gulf of Honduras." - As I recommended earlier, change "weak" to "minimal".
 * Changed.  HurricaneFan 25  14:51, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * "However, the hurricane weakened to a tropical storm again on October 14 as it moved overland, and began to curve north-northwest, restrengthening to a major hurricane by October 17." - Location for first part of sentence?
 * Location added.  HurricaneFan 25  14:51, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * " The hurricane continued traveling north-northwest; however, it was forced to re-curve south-southwest,[2] as the result of a high-pressure area." - As the result? Change to "as a result".
 * Fixed.  HurricaneFan 25  14:51, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * "The system traced into the Gulf of Mexico, and made a final landfall in Central America on October 23." - It traced into the Gulf of Mexico?
 * Changed, if you don't like "traced".  HurricaneFan 25  14:51, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * "The final storm of the season started as a tropical depression on November 5, located in the Caribbean south of Cuba." - Comma between "Caribbean" and "south".
 * Fixed.  HurricaneFan 25  14:51, 16 November 2011 (UTC)
 * Go to other seasons and find some more articles to link to.
 * IMO, that's all there's needed in the section. See other old-season FAs to compare with.  HurricaneFan 25  14:51, 16 November 2011 (UTC)

All in link, the article is a bit from Good Article status. However, most of these issues are minor, and will be able to be fixed relatively easy. For this reason, I am putting this article On Hold until the issues are addressed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 02:41, 16 November 2011 (UTC)


 * As all my concerns, for the most part, have been addressed, I am passing the article. I think I'm supposed to say "good work!", and encourage you to review an article (maybe mine :P) now. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 21:54, 16 November 2011 (UTC)