Talk:1920 Columbus Panhandles season/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 03:11, 20 April 2012 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this article. Here are the issues I found: —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 04:25, 20 April 2012 (UTC) —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 04:25, 20 April 2012 (UTC) —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 04:25, 20 April 2012 (UTC) —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 04:25, 20 April 2012 (UTC) —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 04:25, 20 April 2012 (UTC) —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 04:25, 20 April 2012 (UTC) —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 04:25, 20 April 2012 (UTC)
 * "season was the franchises inaugural season" was the franchise's
 * Fixed.
 * "lost 5 straight until a" lost five straight
 * Fixed.
 * "Triangles to have to ball" having the ball on the 5-yard line sounds better here.
 * Fixed.
 * "due to the clock to halftime ran out." due to the clock running out sounds better.
 * Fixed.
 * "Frank Bacon returned it for a 60-yard touchdown" returned what? A kickoff, pass, something else?
 * Fixed.
 * Frank McCormick links to the wrong guy; fix so it links to Frank McCormick (American football).
 * Re-linked.
 * "Even though the Nesser brothers "stared on several occasions", " that sounds odd to me; can you double-check the quote?
 * Ah, you're right. Fixed.

I'll put the article on hold for five days. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 03:11, 20 April 2012 (UTC)

Thank you for reviewing this article, Wizardman. If there are any other issues, let me know, and I will try and fix them as soon as possible. —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 04:25, 20 April 2012 (UTC)
 * Everything looks good now so I'll pass the article. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 05:36, 20 April 2012 (UTC)