Talk:1920 Hammond Pros season/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Secret (talk · contribs) 21:04, 24 February 2013 (UTC)

I will review this one, being familiar with Michael work here. Secret account 21:04, 24 February 2013 (UTC)

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 * "The Hammond Pros, who were named the Hammond All-Stars, finished 4–2–3 in their 1919 season as an independent team." Why the rename?
 * Added why.
 * Why they were a "traveling team", it should be at least mentioned somewhere in the text.
 * Added that they were. Couldn't find out why.
 * One thing I never really understood, why were teams like the Pros were allowed to play "non-APFA" teams, any background information on this, and why the few games. I mentioned it with another GA review of yours regarding the schedule, but never with non-APFA teams. I guess I never figured it out because I reviewed some of the bigger squads of the season and not smaller teams like this.
 * In the league's bylaws, there was no rules on who a team could play. So, if a team wanted to play all APFA teams (something like the 1920 Akron Pros season did), or play a bunch of non-APFA teams (something like the 1920 Rochester Jeffersons season did), they could.
 * "Back Fred Chicken scored a 1-yard rushing touchdown; back Ray Kuehl scored two touchdowns: a 5-yard rushing touchdown and a 35-yard receiving touchdown from back Pudge Wyman; and back Gerald Mansfield caught a 20-yard receiving touchdown from Wyman." Trim some redudancy, and clarify the "back" with those players. I presume Wyman was the quarterback, was the rest halfbacks or ends?
 * Fixed some of it.
 * "Hammond started to purposely injure their opponents during the game." Why?
 * Added why.
 * "The Dayton Triangles were the Pros' next opponent. Once again, the Pros did not score a point."
 * Huh?
 * Grammar, but I guess it got deleted somewhere as "once again" isn't really encyclopedic prose. Combine or reword Secret account 03:26, 25 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Reworded. Is that better?
 * "After two losses, the Pros decided to not schedule a game in week five and challenge a non-APFA team in week six." Why they didn't schedule a game, I guess it is a teams choice in the league whether to play a complete schedule or not?
 * Yep. The league's bylaws did not have a set schedule and let the team's create their own.
 * Their next opponent, the Logan Squares, were on a two-game winning streak.[15] At least a link to where Logan is located is appropriate.
 * Added where they were from.
 * Nothing more from that Logan game?
 * Not that I can find. The only source cites the Hammond Times, and I can't get a free copy. I also searched Google Books and similar places, but nothing turned up.
 * "The score would stay 6–0 Smeltzer of the Elks caught a pass from Leverette in the fourth quarter." Missing word here
 * Added.
 * "This touchdown was Lanum's only score of the entire 1920 season." Sounds like trivia, considering he was a member of the Stanleys remove.
 * Kk.
 * "have the game 14–0 going into halftime" You mean 21-0.
 * Fixed.
 * Any numbers less than 10, unless it's part of the score should be alphabetized per MOS, like "These 7 points from the Pros"..
 * "the team would fold two years after that." Grammar
 * Believe I fixed it.
 * Did any players at least reached second or third team?
 * No, they did not.
 * Combine references and notes, same thing, MOS violation in having two different footnotes section unless there is a need, which I don't see.
 * Woah. Someone messed it up. I fixed it.

Sourcing is reliable, see Talk:1920 Akron Pros season/GA1 for more explanation, no close paraphrasing concerns that I note, any images?

on hold Secret account 02:42, 25 February 2013 (UTC)

Ok passed. Secret account 22:29, 6 March 2013 (UTC)