Talk:1920 Muncie Flyers season/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 03:05, 25 November 2012 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman 03:05, 25 November 2012 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found: —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 17:49, 25 November 2012 (UTC) —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 17:49, 25 November 2012 (UTC) —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 17:49, 25 November 2012 (UTC) —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 17:49, 25 November 2012 (UTC) —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 17:49, 25 November 2012 (UTC) —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 17:49, 25 November 2012 (UTC) —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 17:49, 25 November 2012 (UTC) —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 17:49, 25 November 2012 (UTC) —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 22:30, 25 November 2012 (UTC) —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 22:30, 25 November 2012 (UTC) —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 17:49, 25 November 2012 (UTC) —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 22:30, 25 November 2012 (UTC)
 * "the Flyers had to play the rest of the season's game versus local, Indianian teams" I'd just say local teams, sounds a bit better.
 * Okay, fixed.
 * "No player from the 1920 Muncie Flyers were listed" no players or was listed
 * Fixed.
 * " Since there was no rules" were no
 * Fixed.
 * "This was the first match between two APFA teams." both in the lead and later on, this is stated as one of the first. This sentence can probably be removed anyway since it ended up a bit repetitive.
 * Alright, I removed it.
 * "Ursella scored kicked a 25-yard field goal, " huh? reword.
 * Oops. Removed
 * "Waddy Kuehl scored 7-yard " scored a
 * Added
 * Use Cooney Checkaye's full name and link on first mention. It's linked at the second Gas City game when it should be in the first. Also rename all the Checkeyes to Checkaye.
 * Fixed.
 * "both Mucnie teams" Muncie
 * Fixed.
 * "Weaver of the Tigers" Full name? Double check all single-names and make sure a full name is listed in the article where possible.
 * The source doesn't say the full name, and there are no rosters for non-APFA teams. How should I go about this?
 * "could not content for the" contend
 * Fixed.
 * "but no single player from the Flyers were on" was
 * Fixed.
 * Do a copyedit as well, prose is a bit on the sloppy side.
 * Did a little bit of c/e'ing.

I'll put the article on hold and will pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman 04:09, 25 November 2012 (UTC)

I appreciate all the comments and thank you for the review of this article! —Michael Jester (talk &#183; contribs) 22:30, 25 November 2012 (UTC)
 * Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman  02:20, 26 November 2012 (UTC)