Talk:1921 Tampa Bay hurricane/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 04:02, 11 July 2017 (UTC)

Given I'll have eight GAN's up soon, I need to get reviews going to avoid the backlog other wikiprojects suffer from.
 * "The Tampa Bay hurricane of 1921 (also known as the 1921 Tarpon Springs hurricane) was the most recent major hurricane to strike the Tampa Bay Area. " why past tense? YE Pacific Hurricane  04:02, 11 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:32, 18 July 2017 (UTC)


 * "becoming the first major hurricane to hit the area since the hurricane of 1848." "since the" to "since a" as there was more than one hurricane in general in 1848. YE Pacific Hurricane  04:02, 11 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:32, 18 July 2017 (UTC)


 * "Four deaths occurred in Tampa, three from drowning and another after a man touched a live wire." why is "drowning" singular? YE Pacific Hurricane  04:02, 11 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:32, 18 July 2017 (UTC)


 * "and a minimum barometric pressure of 941 mbar (27.8 inHg).[2] " link to barometric pressure. YE Pacific Hurricane  04:02, 11 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:32, 18 July 2017 (UTC)


 * "Forecasters at the United States Weather Bureau issued advisories for ships and oceangoing vessels and hurricane warnings for areas in western Florida stretching from Key West to Apalachicola on October 24 and October 25" why is Florida linked? And you mention "and" three times in a sentence, which probably should be broken up. YE Pacific Hurricane  04:02, 11 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Better?--12george1 (talk) 03:32, 18 July 2017 (UTC)


 * " Most highways leading out of Fort Myers were left impassible due to high water." why the need for the word "left"? YE Pacific Hurricane  04:02, 11 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Not sure I quite agree, but I'll do that anyway--12george1 (talk) 03:32, 18 July 2017 (UTC)


 * "The hurricane brought a storm surge" any reason storm surge is linked below and not above. YE Pacific Hurricane  04:02, 11 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:32, 18 July 2017 (UTC)


 * " 10–12 ft (3 to 3.5 m)" why no endash for metric units and an endash for imperial units? YE Pacific Hurricane  04:02, 11 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:32, 18 July 2017 (UTC)


 * "cleanup of the area commenced quickly and the land boom in the Tampa Bay region and in southern Florida continued.[29] " again watch for overlinking. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  04:02, 11 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:32, 18 July 2017 (UTC)


 * " In 1925 a new pavilion was built.[14]" missing comma. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  04:02, 11 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:32, 18 July 2017 (UTC)


 * "The hurricane was the first major hurricane to strike the Tampa Bay region since 1848 hurricane" missing word here. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  04:02, 11 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:32, 18 July 2017 (UTC)


 * " Another property firm, Karen Clark & Co., estimated that storm surge could inflict as much as $175 billion in damage in a worst-case scenario.[40" year? given the note at the bottom I'm suppose to assume it's 1921 USD but that's clearly not the case here. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  04:02, 11 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:32, 18 July 2017 (UTC)

As usual, I can't find much to complain written wise, just a few minor missteps here and there. YE <sup style="color:#666660;">Pacific <sup style="color:#666660;">Hurricane  04:02, 11 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review! Sorry for waiting a week to do this--12george1 (talk) 03:32, 18 July 2017 (UTC)