Talk:1927–28 Cardiff City F.C. season/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 14:09, 29 October 2020 (UTC)

Shall be reviewing for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 14:09, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
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Lead

 * Wikilink previous season in the first paragraph to 1926–27 Cardiff City F.C. season
 * Done. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "and were considered title contenders until late into the campaign." - considered by whom?
 * This is more in reference to the fact that they were talked about as being "in the mix" so to speak. Tried to expand on this. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink South Wales
 * Done. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "attending a match against Derby County in November 1927." - what type of match was this?
 * Added. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)

Background

 * Wikilink South Wales
 * Done. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "The gate receipts for the final had generated the club more than £23,000 in revenue, while unusual forms of income such as £40 from Columbia Records for the rights to sell recordings of the singing at the final further boosted the club." - repetition of "final" and "club"
 * Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "The club also undertook a tour of Wales during the summer to display the FA Cup around the country." - avoid using seasons per MOS:SEASONS
 * Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "who had been on the books of South Wales rivals Swansea Town," - think the text in bold can be replaced by a more formal phrase
 * Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "Club captain Fred Keenor received offers from several English sides having led his side to FA Cup victory," - repetition of "side"
 * Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)

August–December

 * "Ferguson added a brace during a 3–1 victory over Birmingham City on 17 September and was among the scorers a week later during another 3–1 victory over league leaders and reigning First Division champions Newcastle United," - repetition of "victory"
 * Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "The defeat was the first Newcastle had suffered during the season" - the word in bold is not needed
 * I'm not sure here, that would leave the sentence as "the first Newcastle had during the season" which doesn't read right to me? Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "The defeat was the first Newcastle had suffered during the season and moved Cardiff into second place, with The Times picking Keenor out for praise in restricting the play of Newcastle's leading forward Hughie Gallacher." - repetition of "Newcastle"
 * Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "as they "somewhat easily" overcame the initial deficit." - according to whom?
 * Added. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "and even confined to a sanatorium.[12][3][20]" - refs in numerical order please
 * Done. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "He scored his side's third goal to give his side a 3–0 lead" - repetition of "side"
 * Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "Crowd numbers had initially remained high at the start of the season as the team's FA Cup success peaked interest, but numbers dropped as the season progressed" - repetition of "season"
 * Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "as Cardiff ended October with a 4–3 win over Sheffield United." - think you mean November?
 * Fixed. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "to give Cardiff a 2–1 victory to move up to third in the table." - move into third place
 * Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "The latter match was played in driving snow as Everton dominated the match with Dixie Dean scoring both of the opposition goals." - repetition of "match"
 * *: Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)

January–May

 * "Thirlaway and Ferguson each scored one each to secure a victory" - scored one goal each without the repeated word "each"
 * Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "and move Cardiff up to fourth position." - progress Cardiff to fourth
 * Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "but returned to help their side to a 4–0 win over Huddersfield a week later," - side win 4–0 over Huddersfield
 * Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "the club's lacklustre form in away matches continued as they fell to a 3–0 defeat against 21st place Portsmouth on 3 March." - lost 3–0 to 21st
 * Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "Their worst home loss of the season, 5–1 against West Ham, was a followed a week later by a 7–1 loss to Derby County." - repetition of "loss"
 * Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "despite being under pressure for long spells in the game, held out until conceding the only goal of the game shortly before the final whistle." - repetition of "game"
 * Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "Stewart made several signings from non-league sides to compensate for the sales, with Matt Robinson, Tom Helsby, William Roberts and Francis Harris all arriving by the end of the season, although none featured for the senior side during the campaign." - repetition of "side"
 * Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "nine points behind winners Everton," - behind league winners
 * Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "The club's strong home form was cited as a reason for the success," - cited by whom?
 * Added. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)

FA Cup

 * Wikilink handball to the relevant article and free kick to the correct entry
 * I'm not sure we have a relevant link for handbag, even Fouls and misconduct (association football) only has one mention of it. Linked free kick. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink penalty to Penalty kick on the first mention
 * Done. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "but Cardiff progressed with a 2–1 win." - clarify that it was the fifth round Cardiff progressed to
 * Done. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Add a wikilink to goal kick
 * Done. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)

Welsh Cup

 * Wikilink Welsh Cup on the first mention
 * Done. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)

FA Charity Shield

 * Wikilink cross and corner kick to the relevant articles
 * Done. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)

Friendly

 * "The Cardiff squad were described as "weary" heading into the game," - described by whom?
 * Added. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)

Aftermath

 * "Although the sixth-place finish during the campaign was the club's highest finish in the First Division since the 1923–24 season, the 1927–28 season is generally regarded as the start of the club's downfall" - repetition of "club" and "season"
 * Reworded. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "In his 1999 book chronicling the history of the club," - maybe add the name of the book?
 * Added. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink relegated to Promotion and relegation
 * Done. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * "The failure to replace first team players with sufficient quality and an ageing core of the squad are both cited as factors in the club's eventual downturn." - cited by whom?
 * Added. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink free transfer to Free transfer (association football)
 * Added. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * The wikilink of Ministry of Labour should be directed to Ministry of Labour (United Kingdom)
 * Fixed. Kosack (talk) 19:42, 29 October 2020 (UTC)