Talk:1927 World Snooker Championship/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:09, 30 May 2021 (UTC)

Shall review MWright96 (talk) 18:09, 30 May 2021 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
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 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "but it is now recognised at the inaugural edition" - typo; should be as
 * "Ten players entered the competition, including most of the leading billiards players." - Try not to begin a sentence with a number
 * "The highest break of the tournament was 60, compiled by Albert Cope in his match against Davis." - in what frame was the highest break made?
 * "It remained the best in the Championship until Davis made a 61 in the 1929 final." - It remained the highest break
 * Wikilink 1929 final to the relevant article
 * All done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:30, 30 May 2021 (UTC)

Background

 * "in 1924 from professional Tom Dennis had been rebuffed by the BACC's Secretary A. Stanley Thorn," - how about rejected instead?
 * "Davis drafted the conditions under which a Championship could take place," - the word in bold doesn't need to begin with a capital letter
 * "The Stanley Thorn, wrote that the decision to promote a professional championship" - don't think that Thorn's actual correct full name
 * "Gate receipts for each match, after expenses, were to equally shared out between the players concerned." - were to be equally
 * "Snooker historian Clive Everton wrote that when the professional snooker championship was introduced, "billiards was still very much the premier game, with snooker a sideshow which few were convinced would ever come to much as a public entertainment," and that the early championships received "minimal publicity." - repetition of "championship(s)"
 * "Ten players entered the championship." - try not to begin a sentence with a number
 * "had declined to participate in the championship[8]" - a full stop is missing before the reference and after the word "championship"
 * All addressed. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:30, 30 May 2021 (UTC)

Schedule

 * The Reference column can be deleted and the references put into a table header called "|+1927 World Snooker Championship schedule" or something similiar
 * Hopefully I've implemented this as suggested - if not, I'll try again. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:21, 30 May 2021 (UTC)

Summary

 * "The snooker was played as an added extra to the main event, a billiards match." - snooker game
 * Wikilink table to billiards table for those unfamiliar with snooker and pockets to the relevant article only on the first mention
 * "The match started on Monday 29 November 1926 with two sessions per day until Saturday 11 December." - don't think the names of dates are needed
 * The terms frame and session should be wikilinked to the relevant article only on the first mention
 * "In the evening session Dennis won the first two frames to win 8–6." - repetition of "won"
 * "He two more frames in the afternoon to lead 14–5" - He took two
 * "Cope's 60 break was the highest made in the tournament," - Cope's break of 60
 * " and in recognition of this Cope later received a commemorative certificate from the BACC." - would receive
 * 1929 final can be linked to 1929 World Snooker Championship
 * "Like the Inman v Newman match it was played as an added extra to a billiards match." - As with the game between Inman and Newman
 * "but Dennis won the first two in the evening to win the match 12–10." - repetition of "won" and "match"
 * All addressed. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:39, 30 May 2021 (UTC)

Final

 * "Davis had taken a winning lead by taking frame 23 80–34"- little awkward; can be taking the 23rd frame 80–34
 * "Davis won four of the seven frames on the final day to win 20–11." - repetition of "won"
 * "Davis went on to win the World Championship each year until 1940," - every year
 * All done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:24, 30 May 2021 (UTC)

Main draw

 * "Match results are shown below. Winning players and scores are denoted in bold text.[18][20][22][25][28][33][36][44][51]" - an example of WP:OVERCITE. Think the last citation can be used on the text and the rest of the references be put in the correct places on the draw bracket
 * As match info and dates are already sourced earlier in the article, I thought it would be better to cut refs down here. The Snooker Scene source has all the results, but not countries, so I looked elsewhere for that and came up against a hiccup I've tried to deal with via efn. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:16, 30 May 2021 (UTC)