Talk:1928 World Snooker Championship/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 08:14, 14 June 2021 (UTC)

Will review MWright96 (talk) 08:14, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
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 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
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Lead

 * "with three of the other matches played there, and one each played in Leamington Spa and Nottingham." - repetition of "played"
 * Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 15:25, 14 June 2021 (UTC)


 * "Davis had won the professional billiards title earlier in May, and became the first person to hold both the professional snooker titles consecutively," - repetition of "title(s)"
 * Amended - to "Davis had won the professional billiards championship earlier in May, and became the first person to hold the professional titles in billiards and snooker titles concurrently" BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 15:25, 14 June 2021 (UTC)


 * "compiled by Alec Mann in the third frame of his match against Albert Cope." - please state which round this was
 * Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 15:25, 14 June 2021 (UTC)


 * Wikilink the term frame to the relevant article
 * Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 15:25, 14 June 2021 (UTC)

Background

 * "Entry fees would be used to provide prize money for the finalists, with 60% going to the champion." - should be per cent per MOS:PERCENT
 * "The venue for the semi-finals and final was to be Camkin's Hall, Birmingham, with those matches supervised by the Midland Counties Billiard Association, and the players concerned would be left to arrange the venues for earlier rounds." - repetition of "venue(s)"
 * Both done. (Changed the second instance of "venue" to "location.") BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 15:29, 14 June 2021 (UTC)

Summary

 * The term interval will be better off wikilinked to the correct article
 * I'm a bit stuck for a target here. It doesn't appear in the Cue Sports Glossary (nor does "mid-session break"); none of the options at Interval seem right, and nor does Intermission (after looking at that article). BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 15:47, 14 June 2021 (UTC)


 * "and added the almost-50-minute-long 22nd frame." - the hyphens in bold are not needed
 * Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 15:47, 14 June 2021 (UTC)


 * "From 5-9," - dash should be replaced by an en dash per MOS:DASH
 * Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 15:47, 14 June 2021 (UTC)


 * "but Lawrence progressed by securing the first three frames on the final day"" - which round did Lawrence progress to?
 * Added "to the final against Davis"


 * Wikilink professional English billiards championship to the relevant article
 * Linked. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 15:47, 14 June 2021 (UTC)

Final

 * "Lawrence and Davis shared the frames in the afternoon session for 2–2," - the opening four frames
 * Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 16:12, 14 June 2021 (UTC)


 * Wikilink potting to the relevant article only on the first mention
 * Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 16:12, 14 June 2021 (UTC)


 * "termed a "woefully weak shot" allowed Davis a chance." - please clarify at the end of this sentence
 * Amended to "a 'woefully weak shot' when he was attempting to pot the blue ball failed. Directly after this, Davis made a break of 18."


 * "Lawrence was 26 behind after all the red balls had been potted," - 26 points
 * Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 16:12, 14 June 2021 (UTC)


 * "Davis became the first player to win the professional billiards and snooker titles" - claim both the
 * Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 16:12, 14 June 2021 (UTC)


 * "in the same season.[24]The highest break" - a space is missing between the reference and the word "The"
 * Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 16:12, 14 June 2021 (UTC)


 * "The highest break of the final was a 44 by Davis on the third evening." - in which frame was the break of 44 made?
 * Changed source to one that includes this info; amended text to "The highest break of the final was a 44 by Davis in the 24th frame, the last of the third evening." BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 16:12, 14 June 2021 (UTC)