Talk:1941 Cabo San Lucas hurricane/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: ComputerJA (talk · contribs) 20:20, 5 July 2013 (UTC)


 * I'll gladly review this! Thanks for your work on the article. ComputerJA ( ☎  •  ✎  ) 20:20, 5 July 2013 (UTC)

Review
Really interesting article. It is well-written, cited accordingly, and very informative. Below are a few of my concerns that need to be addressed. This is the first part of the review. I'll be checking out the sources on the second part for accuracy and be posting if there are any concerns needed to be addressed. Thanks again. ComputerJA ( ☎  •  ✎  ) 20:59, 5 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Intro

All information is cited accordingly. My only concern is this source. Is it a reliable one?
 * The 1941 Cabo San Lucas hurricane is considered one of the worst tropical cyclones on record to affect Cabo San Lucas. – Given that Cabo San Lucas is mentioned twice, consider changing to 'affect the region of Baja California Sur' or something similar.
 * But it's not. It is the worst in Cosbo San Lucas. YE Pacific  Hurricane 23:12, 5 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Two villages were completely destroyed. Furthermore, Cabo San Lucas was virtually destroyed – Considering rephrasing so that destroyed is not used twice.
 * Changed. YE Pacific  Hurricane 23:12, 5 July 2013 (UTC)
 * In addition, the hurricane destroyed the tuna canning industry – The intro implies that the tuna cannding industry was destroyed in La Paz, while the sections below suggest that it actually happened in San José del Cabo. Consider adding the exact location in the intro.
 * Added. YE Pacific  Hurricane 23:12, 5 July 2013 (UTC)
 * The remnants of the storm later brought rains to California and Arizona. – Rains on California were already mentioned in the intro. Maybe you can add Arizona and its measurements together with California.
 * Removed the previous mention. YE Pacific  Hurricane
 * Meteorological history
 * A tropical storm was first reported on September 8 – Please add the year so it won't be necessary later on.
 * Disagreed, but added it anyway. YE Pacific  Hurricane 23:12, 5 July 2013 (UTC)
 * and entered the Gulf of California – Please link Gulf of California.
 * I do so in the lead. I chose to do one wikilink in the article, given how short it is. YE Pacific  Hurricane 23:12, 5 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Impact and aftermath
 * Throughout the peninsula, 15 people were killed, and many were injured. – It is not a necessity, but do you have the exact figures for those injured? It would be interesting to know.
 * No, sorry. YE Pacific  Hurricane 23:12, 5 July 2013 (UTC)
 * The port town of Cabo San Lucas was washed away and mostly destroyed due to flooding – Please link Cabo San Lucas.
 * See above. YE Pacific  Hurricane 23:12, 5 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Strong winds and heavy rain lashed the southern tip of the Baja California Peninsula for 48 hours – Please link Baja California Peninsula.
 * See above. YE Pacific  Hurricane 23:12, 5 July 2013 (UTC)
 * La Paz, Baja California Sur and nearby villages – Likewise.
 * It's not linked above, so okay. YE Pacific  Hurricane 23:12, 5 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Word War II – Likewise.
 * See above. YE Pacific  Hurricane 23:12, 5 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Four other stations record more than 2 in (51 mm) – What do you mean by stations? Should it be changed to recorded, too?
 * Clarified and your second concern is ✅. YE Pacific  Hurricane 23:12, 5 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Reviewing sources
 * Given the wording, I think it it okay. Thanks for the review. YE Pacific  Hurricane 23:12, 5 July 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for your replies. Article passes. Good job! ComputerJA ( ☎  •  ✎  ) 23:41, 5 July 2013 (UTC)