Talk:195 Broadway/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 19:51, 4 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments That's it, another cracking article, just a few notes to make it super-smart. On hold. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 18:42, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "occupies almost an entire city block, occupying the entirety" occupy, entire, occupy, entire...
 * Fixed. I did not realize that. This is why it's good to have a second look. epicgenius (talk) 19:48, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * We have an article on First transcontinental telephone call.
 * Linked.
 * "195 Broadway remains in use as" probably could use an "as of 2020" here.
 * Done.
 * "195-207 " en-dash.
 * Done.
 * "who had taken the role at AT&T in " no need to repeat "at AT&T"
 * Removed.
 * " in 1911–1914" never keen on "in" and then a range. Why not "between 1911 and 1914"?  A few of these...
 * Fixed.
 * "The Western Union Telegraph Building was.." caption needs a period.
 * Done.
 * "14-18 Dey" en-dash.
 * "172-174 Fulton Street" likewise.
 * Done both.
 * "195 Broadway is..." image caption needs a period.
 * Done.
 * " indicating changes in its " I would suggest "reflecting" rather than "indicating" here?
 * Done.
 * "1927[26] and of the first transatlantic telephone call, made to London, England, also in 1927.[10][2] " move all refs to the end and order.
 * Done.
 * "to Peter Kalikow" who? context?
 * Added.
 * "the western part of the block back to a hotel.[39] The western part of the block " repetitive.
 * Done.
 * "75 by 77 feet (23 by 23 m)" looks odd when feet are different and metres are same.
 * Fixed - I rounded the meters to the nearest 10 cm. epicgenius (talk) 19:48, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "three sets of 4 bays" four.
 * Done.
 * " by Greek Ionic " all previous mentions of Ionic have just be Ionic, is Greek Ionic in this case somehow special?
 * Nope, removed. epicgenius (talk) 19:48, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "1,000,000 square feet " I'd be tempted (as it's not precise) to say "a million".
 * Done.
 * "There were formerly 28 elevators serving the office floors.[24] As of 2020, there are " I would merge.
 * Done.
 * "The Millennium Hilton blocks ..." caption needs a period.
 * Done.
 * You also previously used the full title, i.e. Millennium Hilton New York Downtown, so I'd do that here too to avoid any ambiguity.
 * Done.
 * "f loading docks[53] 35 feet (11 m) deep.[65]" horrible ref placement.
 * Moved.
 * "The most famous" touch of POV here, according to whom?
 * Well, I didn't add it. So I removed it. epicgenius (talk) 19:48, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * " of bronze.[78][71]" order.
 * Done.
 * "notable tenants include:" just drop "notable".
 * Done.
 * Ref 26 spaced hyphen - en-dash please!
 * Fixed.
 * Thanks for another review. I appreciate it. I think we have improved a lot of articles together over the past few days. epicgenius (talk) 19:48, 5 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Good work again. And yes, I think we're getting through some of your backlog!  Promoting this now.  Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 20:43, 5 April 2020 (UTC)