Talk:1965 Burundian coup attempt/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 08:23, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments That's all I can see right now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 17:54, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Link "gendarmerie" appropriately.
 * Done.
 * "were angry frustrated" one or the other.
 * Fixed
 * "Burundi's monarch" is there a link for that?
 * I could ink that to List of kings of Burundi, but Mwami, the royal title, is already linked.
 * "prime minister " link?
 * Done.
 * "attempted putsch " putsch? link?
 * Putsch is simply another word for coup, as in Beer Hall Putsch.
 * Then link it to Coup d'état. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 20:11, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Done.
 * "militant Tutsi backlash" link Tutsi.
 * Done.
 * "states had traditionally had monarchies" delete first "had"
 * Revised
 * " 1959–61. " full year for 1961.
 * Done.
 * "Burundi seemed to have achieved" sounds like OR. Or is it according to someone?
 * This was interpretation of the source by a Wikipedia editor; removed.
 * "leader Louis Rwagasore, was assassinated" how?
 * Added in a plot devised by political rivals with the support of some Belgian officials. Beyond that the details aren't really relevant.
 * "Rwagasore's death derailed" His death...
 * Done
 * "the late prime minister's" don't do "late", just name him.
 * Done
 * " (pictured) angered" pictured when?
 * Date added.
 * "Hutu politicians.[9] Another Hutu politician" repetitive.
 * Excised "politician".
 * "Parti du Peuple." no link?
 * Not for the Burundian party.
 * "seven of the other 10" 7/10 or seven/ten.
 * I've never seen fractions recommend in place of prose outside of a mathematics article
 * I mean use seven and ten or 7 and 10, don't mix numerals and words for comparable items. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 20:11, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Per MOS:NUMERAL, this doesn't seem to be a problem. I understand your qualm but "10" is used elsewhere in the article and I'd prefer to keep it consistent by order of magnitude.
 * "arrêté-loi" what's that?
 * Literally a decree-law. As the name suggests, it was basically legislation by executive fiat in Belgian legal tradition. French Wikipedia has a stub article on it.
 * Link please. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 20:11, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Actually found the relevant en article. Linked
 * "number of communes in the country" link for communes?
 * Unfortunately, one does not exist that captures what a commune in Burundi is (basically a form of municipality).
 * "burgomasters" who are they?
 * Linked.
 * "locally elected" hyphenate.
 * Done.
 * "paracommandos" link?
 * Linked to Commando.
 * "putshcists" typo.
 * Fixed.
 * "his departure greatly tarnished" according to whom?
 * That's Lemarchand's analysis of the situation. The literal words he uses are "great discredit", presumably in the eyes of the Burundian public.
 * Say that then. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 20:11, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Done.
 * "10 were" 10 what?
 * Hutu politicians, the people mentioned in the preceding sentence.
 * "Assembly Paul Mirerekano" overlinked.
 * Fixed.
 * "to an easy life" maybe "to a better life"?
 * Changed to comfortable. Lemarchand says he was looking forward to his "European dolce vita".
 * "Though it was obvious" to whom?
 * Lemarchand doesn't really specify. I've removed this since it's not all that informative anyhow.
 * "1966 Ndizeye" comma after 1966.
 * MOS:DATECOMMA only stipulates that for month–day–year format. Commas are not needed to separate dates form the rest of the sentence in day-month-year formats (see ). This is a response to all of your comma concerns.
 * Well that's not the point I was making really, there's a natural pause after the 1966 which a comma would fill. But I'm not in the mood to argue over commas. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 20:11, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ISBNs could be formatted consistently.
 * Done.
 * I've responded to your comments. -Indy beetle (talk) 05:24, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I've responded to your response. -Indy beetle (talk) 02:09, 9 September 2021 (UTC)