Talk:1977 Atocha massacre/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tayi Arajakate (talk · contribs) 10:51, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Meta-discussion

 * Hello Goldsztajn, I'll take up the review for this nomination and will be presenting my assessment within the next few days. I hope I can learn something new from this and that my feedback will be helpful. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 10:51, 18 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I apologise for being this late, some real life issues had cropped up. I will review the nomination within the next 24 hours. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 22:40, 29 October 2020 (UTC)
 * , apologies again for the delayed review. I have now completed the review and have left some comments in the two sections below. For the most part the article meets the required criteria and hence I've passed the nomination but there is otherwise quite a bit of scope for improvement. If you have any questions, objections or requests for clarifications or elaboration, feel free to communicate them to me. Tayi Arajakate  Talk 19:06, 31 October 2020 (UTC)

Assessment
 Comprehension: The comprehension of the article is adequate.

Verifiability: The article is verifiable.

Comprehensiveness: The comprehensiveness of the article is adequate.

Neutrality: The article is complaint with the policy on neutral point of view.

Stability: The article is stable.  Illustration: The article is well illustrated with images. 



Overall: The article meets the good article criteria. 

Comments

 * Issues with prose:
 * One of the survivors, Miguel Ángel Sarabia, commented in 2005: "Although now it may seem a small thing, the 1980 trial of the Atocha murderers – despite the arrogance of the accused ... – it was the first time that the extreme right was sitting on the bench, tried and condemned." The quote is a bit confusing. I'd suggest re-wording it to "it was the first time that the extreme right was made to sit on the beach, tried and then condemned."


 * Issues with comprehensiveness or prose:
 * Although many celebrate the success of Spain's transition to democracy, debates over the human cost – especially the Pact of Forgetting (Pacto del olvido) – have grown. That debate was echoed in the words of Atocha massacre survivor Lola González Ruiz, who passed away in 2015: "In the course of my life, my dreams broke me." This can be confusing since there is no explaination on the nature of the debate. A brief description could be included.
 * There seems to be some space for expansion on the political effect of the massacre, as in a more detailed account of how it aided in the democratization process. The section called "Political context and response" might also be better worded as "Political context and aftermath".


 * Other minor issues:
 * The gallery pictures can perhaps be incorporated under the section on legacy.
 * The article relies more on quotations than summarisations to explain the effects of the massacre which could perhaps be reworked.
 * The choice of primarily using spanish names of organisations over their english variants may be detrimental for readability to english speakers.