Talk:1985 Puerto Rico floods/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mark Arsten (talk · contribs) 19:45, 1 June 2012 (UTC)

Mark Arsten (talk) 18:06, 2 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Will review, hopefully comments will be posted this weekend. Mark Arsten (talk) 19:45, 1 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Comments: I made some copyedits when I went through, hope I didn't damage anything. Unsurprisingly, the article is in pretty good shape, only a few small issues I can point out:
 * "In addition to the deadly landslide in Mameyes, the floods killed several people due to a washed bridge near Coamo." This reads a little awkwardly to me, I'd suggest something like, "In addition to the deadly landslide in Mameyes, the floods washed out a bridge near Coama, killing several people."
 * "These totals broke the 24 hour rainfall records set during the 1899 San Ciriaco hurricane,[1] and represented nearly half of the annual precipitation totals." I was a little confused by this sentence, do you mean that totals were about half of the average annual rainfall for the area?
 * Yea. Is the wording clearer now? ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 19:06, 2 June 2012 (UTC)
 * "24 hour rainfall records" Should "24 hour" be hyphenated here?
 * Yea. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 19:06, 2 June 2012 (UTC)
 * "there was a block slide at around 3:00 am local time on October 7" Might want to link to the UTC time zone here.
 * Added. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 19:06, 2 June 2012 (UTC)
 * "The landslide destroyed about 90 houses, killing 130 people;[6] however, the death toll could have been as high as 300." I'm a bit confused here, do you mean that it could have killed a lot more people (had they not evacuated), or that the death toll is uncertain?
 * Mostly that it was uncertain. The landslide covered a certain number of houses, but a lot of the bodies weren't found, so the death toll wasn't 100% certain. The same thing happened with Katrina, as it was uncertain whether people were washed away or just moved. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 19:06, 2 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Just a suggestion, but the last paragraph of "Aftermath" maybe be better suited as the middle paragraph.
 * OK. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 19:06, 2 June 2012 (UTC)
 * "However, in 2011, residents of Ponce successfully petitioned to change the name from a park to a memorial site." Might want to note the proposed new name.
 * Actually, the new name only changed the official title from "Park of the Recollection of the Neighborhood Mameys" to "Memorial of the Recollection of the Neighborhood Mameys". I didn't see the need to rewrite that whole thing, when the only thing changed was the status from a park to a memorial. How should I make that clearer? ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 19:06, 2 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Yeah, I guess it's fine as it is. Mark Arsten (talk) 19:21, 2 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review! ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 19:06, 2 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Ok, Images, Links etc. look fine to me. I'll pass this now, good work. Mark Arsten (talk) 19:21, 2 June 2012 (UTC)