Talk:1988 Bangladesh cyclone/GA1

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 19:07, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * First, this lists $13 million in damage for West Bengal from the storm. I couldn't find one for Bangladesh, but at least we have a monetary estimate for somewhere
 * Thanks! I have added a reference and included the estimate.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 02:21, 13 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Possibly more info here.
 * I checked that article and didn't find anything new.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 02:21, 13 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Link "severe cyclonic storm" and "West Bengal" in the lead. Also, like monsoon earlier in the MH
 * I had already linked West Bengal, but I linked the other suggestions.


 * "this was 04B's peak intensity" - this is the only time you use a shorthand nickname for the storm, and it stands out. As JTWC was unofficial, I'd use a different descriptor
 * Changed to a regular noun.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 02:21, 13 June 2015 (UTC)


 * "The 1988 Bangladesh cyclone struck Bangladesh" - really?
 * Indeed. Changed the sentence syntax to be less "d'uh"."  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 02:21, 13 June 2015 (UTC)


 * "as the country was recovering from what had been considered the worst flood in Bangladeshi history earlier in the year that had affected three-fourths of the country" - very wonky. Try simplifying
 * Cut out a few things.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 02:21, 13 June 2015 (UTC)


 * "As a result, the cyclone's arrival and resulting impacts were greatly exacerbated." - that's... not correct. You saying "were greatly exacerbated" would usually be followed with "by floods", or whatever, but the storm exacerbated the preceding floods. Not the other way around.
 * Whoops. Flipped the terms around.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 02:21, 13 June 2015 (UTC)


 * "Bangladesh state radio and television continuously broadcast warning signals urging the evacuation of endangered residents along coastal Bangladesh" - no need to say country twice
 * Removed the latter instance.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 02:21, 13 June 2015 (UTC)


 * "Twenty vessels and barges and hundreds of small fishing boats sunk" - use "sank" for simple past tense
 * Done.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 02:21, 13 June 2015 (UTC)


 * "Telecommunications and electrical supplies were disrupted by the storms" - plural?
 * Fixed.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 02:21, 13 June 2015 (UTC)

All in all a good read! It'd be nice if the floods had their own distinct article, but for now, the cyclone does a good job filling a gap on Wikipedia. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 19:07, 12 June 2015 (UTC)