Talk:1989 South Florida television affiliation switch/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 04:15, 10 August 2023 (UTC)

Looks short enough for my standards. I'll get to this by 17 August (give or take a few days).  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 04:15, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Please ping me when the review is completed as only Nathan will get ChristieBot automated messages. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 04:43, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Noted!  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 04:44, 10 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Nice work on the changes! I am happy now to pass this article for GA status. Congrats!  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 06:20, 24 August 2023 (UTC)

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Prose
Should be done here. This review is so long (by my standards ) it needs credits.  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 15:47, 21 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Overview
 * Wikilink Miami and Fort Lauderdale in Miami–Fort Lauderdale television market.
 * No need to wikilink movie theatre.
 * I would specify "originally known as WCKT".
 * This one I'm leaving alone—there's a little more there than a call sign change.
 * Can I be a pedant and recommend "president of Sunbeam" instead?
 * I would wikilink call sign.
 * This could just be me but "providing a brief moment of hope for a struggling WITV" reads a bit too emotive. However about something like "aspiration" or "optimism" instead?
 * "as the FCC already" – recommend "as the FCC had already" since this is the wording generally used elsewhere.
 * "Channel 6 in Miami" – no need to specify Miami here as it is inferred by prior context.
 * Not changing this as an emphasis. Channel 6 could be anywhere. This is about the Miami channel 6 allocation.
 * "in order to meet minimum spacing" – I think this needs a the.
 * KKR takes over Wometco and Storer
 * Are any of the "several measures" perhaps noteworthy or not really?
 * Reading the article, they would be too much of a digression in this page.
 * I may be wrong as I suck at commas but I believe "split into two entities" needs to end on a semicolon or dash. This would help improve the flow of the sentence a bit which otherwise has quite a lot of commas.
 * I would rephrase "unhappy" to "dissatisfied" or "displeased" etc.
 * Is "then-existing" necessary? I do not see this brought up again in the article.
 * I suppose it could be removed.
 * Attempted sale of WTVJ to Lorimar
 * IMO "a revision to the Herald story" should be its own sentence as otherwise the current one is quite long.
 * "itself and rejected a $350 million" – suggest "itself and had rejected a $350 million".
 * "production and syndication company" (without the slash) should work fine.
 * "could be able to do more things with the stations than they would" reads awkwardly to me.
 * Reworded
 * I would specify "in the Bloomington–Indianapolis market", otherwise, Bloomington–Indianapolis low-key sounds like a place.
 * Reworded
 * The first CBS–WCIX courtship
 * "to purchase a "Sun Belt" station" – the quotation marks are not needed here since this was already used when the term was first introduced.
 * "but rumblings of interest in WTVJ" – I would rephrase rumbling.
 * Changes to this point done. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 03:54, 20 August 2023 (UTC)
 * NBC purchases WTVJ
 * "Even though a GE holding company" – Should note note that GE is for General Electric.
 * Already done in the preceding paragraph.
 * "an affiliates' conference" – what is an affiliates' conference? Or perhaps this should be "conference of affiliates"?
 * The networks used to hold annual conferences for their affiliates' general managers. All the networks had, and still have, affiliate associations. In this case it seems to have been a meeting with the CBS affiliate board.
 * "were tasked by Bob Wright" – you can use just Wright here.
 * I would wikilink memo.
 * Sunbeam formally protests
 * "talking to (Taft) for some time" – if Taft was not present in the original quotation use square brackets [ ] instead.
 * Do we have a policy on using honourifics and titles in articles? Otherwise I would recommend we write out instances of Rep. and Sen. in full.
 * Wikilink lobbying.
 * "Ansin's petition to deny alleged NBC" – awkward wording IMO.
 * "for lower-rated syndicated fare" – what does fare mean?
 * "One Wall Street analyst" – Wall Street?
 * Honestly the use of Wall Street as metonymy for stock market analysts is common enough I didn't think it needed a wikilink, but...
 * Ah, I had never heard of Wall Street. I think it being a megonym is an American (or at least North American) thing.
 * Preemptions and scheduling chaos
 * May be personal taste but I would rephrase "came to pass".
 * The WSVN–CBS impasse
 * "was compounded by negotiations with Ed Ansin" – any reason his full name is used here?
 * "football games thanks to the network's AFC" – recommend "because of the network's AFC" for formality.
 * "with their Miami news bureau" – already wikilinked.
 * Recommend "viewing the distinction as "a sign of privilege", calling it "like a badge"" or something like that; the current wording does not match the quotation.
 * Changes to here done. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 08:02, 20 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Turmoil at TVX
 * "independents proved too much for a company" – how about "were too challenging for a company" for improved formality?
 * Recommend "before the Black Monday stock market crash" so the reader will have enough context not to click on the link.
 * "while Ed Ansin conceded" – full name.
 * CBS acquires WCIX
 * "the network also announced WPEC would also" – recommend finding a synonym to avoid using also in such close succession.
 * A West Palm affiliation shuffle
 * Compared to the other quotations used in this article, I really do not think the one from Bob Morford adds much. It would be better summarised IMO.
 * "with its established operation" – definitely pedantry but I would find a synonym for this as established was used in the same paragraph not too long ago. Also:
 * Said sentence is really long; I do not think ; is needed twice in a row.
 * "it had selected WPBF, which had offered" – recommend avoiding had twice here.
 * "with a thud at WTVX" – I would rephrase thud.
 * "network stared independence straight in the face" – recommend rephrasing for formality.
 * "The decision also was received" – should it not be was also?
 * WSVN's news and Fox gamble
 * Do we really use 7+1⁄2 like that in non-mathematical articles? (I genuinely do not know but I do not recall seeing this format used before)
 * "largely operating on autopilot" – meaning?
 * Wikilink prime time.
 * Initiating the switches
 * I would spell out EEOC in full for easier reader context.
 * "The network, however, did invest" – how about "The network did however invest" for better flow?
 * IMO we can remove the quotation marks from "irrelevant".
 * "the date Ed Ansin" – full name again.
 * "affiliate with (Ansin)" – brackets (as above).
 * I feel like "in one instance" should be the start of a new sentence.
 * "all in lame-duck status" – recommend rephrasing to be less colloquial.
 * "when it launched in August 1988" – the year is not needed here since it is mentioned earlier in the paragraph.
 * Done to here. Left the fraction in place (I've seen it before). Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 21:48, 20 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Ramifications
 * No need for the quotation marks on halo effect.
 * "in both the Nielsen and Arbitron books" – wikilink both.
 * Done, but Arbitron was bought by Nielsen (years after they exited TV ratings).
 * I would wikilink tabloid (also present in the lead).
 * "if it (the purchase)" – brackets.
 * Wikilink Sacramento.
 * "transmitter; and promotion expenses." – the semicolon feels out of place here, and I would generally avoid using and after one in most cases.
 * Good catch. The list itself does not have comma elements.
 * I wonder if "multiple technical issues" and "problems establishing viewer loyalty" could be elaborated upon at all; it seems fairly noteworthy/significant IMO for it to have caused a near-30 percent downsizing (unless this was mainly due to the recession). The subsection is also fairly short in comparison with the other stations.
 * Definitely the financial situation. I have added a few words here to explain the other items.
 * What does "eleventh hour of a deal" mean?
 * Reworded
 * The 1995 WTVJ–WCIX channel "trade"
 * Is there a reason moving and moved have quotation marks?
 * The deal is complicated. The way it was structured legally and the way it was structured for all other intents and purposes are different. See, say, WFOR-TV, which carries the footnote The deal was structured in such a way that WFOR-TV operates on the former WTVJ license and WTVJ operates on the former WCIX license..
 * Thanks for slogging through this one. It's a bad boy alright. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 16:41, 21 August 2023 (UTC)

Refs
Passes spotcheck on refs 1, 3, 20, 37, 47, 53, 88, 94, 102, 111, 126, 134, 148, 166, 177, 209 and 234.


 * Is there a reason ref 62 is a cite bundle?
 * Article was revised in a later edition of the Miami Herald that same day.
 * Ref 126 has a CS1 maint: multiple names: authors list issue.
 * Fixed. Wasn't aware this triggered a maint error. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 21:36, 22 August 2023 (UTC)