Talk:1989 Sukhumi riots/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: 3E1I5S8B9RF7 (talk · contribs) 09:56, 21 December 2017 (UTC)

Comments by 3E1I5S8B9RF7
Chapter "Background":
 * "On 17 June 1988, an 87-page document, known as the 'Abkhazian Letter'..." Reference number 5 is "Hewitt 1996, p. 202", but I cannot find any trace of "17 June 1988" in the book.
 * It's there, the full sentence reading "The Abkhazian letter is an 87-page document signed by 60 leading Abkhazians

completed on 17 June 1988 for transmission to Gorbachev."

Chapter "Aftermath" needs to be improved:
 * The text says: "The July events in Abkhazia left at least 18 dead and 448 injured, of whom, according to official accounts, 302 were Georgians". However, I could not find the figures for this claim in reference number 22, in the book The Making of the Georgian Nation.
 * Changed that to a more accurate reference


 * "Thus on 23 July, 1992, the Abkhaz Supreme Soviet re-instated the 1925 constitution, which had called Abkhazia a sovereign state, albeit one in treaty union with Georgia.[32]" Reference number 32 cites "Chervonnaya 1994, p. 112". However, the words "1925 constitution" are only mentioned on pages 46, 114, and 157 of the book.
 * Changed the reference to one that does


 * The final sentence says: "In the aftermath of the 1992–1993 war, the Sukhumi branch of Tbilisi State University, which had remained open, was relocated to Tbilisi as the city fell out of Georgian control. It was re-established in Tbilisi on 25 November, 1993, and remains there". The reference is just a generic link to the University, without any clear demarkation as to where to find this specific claim.--3E1I5S8B9RF7 (talk) 09:56, 21 December 2017 (UTC)
 * Found a different link on the site that is a little more clear, though has the date December, not November.


 * Thanks for reviewing the article. However I'm going to be on vacation until January 1, so won't be able to address it properly until then. Hope that isn't too much of an issue. Kaiser matias (talk) 10:53, 21 December 2017 (UTC)
 * ok, no problem.--3E1I5S8B9RF7 (talk) 11:02, 21 December 2017 (UTC)
 * Addressed everything. Kaiser matias (talk) 12:07, 3 January 2018 (UTC)


 * In the "Background" chapter, a sentence says: "The protests climaxed in the Georgian capital of Tbilisi and evolved into a major anti-Soviet and pro-independence rally on 9 April 1989, which was violently dispersed by Soviet Interior Ministry troops, resulting in the deaths of twenty, mostly young women, and the injury of hundreds of demonstrators." The source, though, says that 19 were killed, not 20. This needs to be accurate.
 * Changed it to "at least 19," as sources claim between 19 and 21 died (I added a note explaining this)


 * In the "Aftermath" chapter, a sentence says: "Georgia responded militarily on 14 August, starting a war that would last until September 1993, and further lead to the ongoing Abkhaz–Georgian conflict." This does not seem to be a neutral wording. I would suggest changing the sentence to something like "Georgia responded militarily on 14 August, starting an offensive. The ensuing war would last until September 1993".--3E1I5S8B9RF7 (talk) 10:59, 4 January 2018 (UTC)
 * Changed that. Kaiser matias (talk) 02:28, 5 January 2018 (UTC)

Conclusion
Overall, I think this article meets the GA criteria, and I'm giving it a pass, accordingly.--3E1I5S8B9RF7 (talk) 09:36, 5 January 2018 (UTC)