Talk:1994 Bangladesh cyclone/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 04:27, 12 July 2019 (UTC)

Hello, Hurricanehink. I will be reviewing this article tonight--12george1 (talk) 04:27, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
 * The first thing that stood out to me is that in most cases, you have several references clustered together. Is there a reason for that?
 * With some of the news articles, sometimes I used a citation just for a small bit. Sometimes they appeared in multiple sentences. I thought it would look best having the references listed at the end of the paragraph/thought. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 14:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)


 * "a powerful tropical cyclone in the Bay of Bengal that killed 285 people" - But the infobox says 350
 * Ack, that's what I get for writing the lead before finishing the article. Removed "285". ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 14:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)


 * "including at least 126 fishermen from Thailand who were sailing in the region; hundreds of fishermen were lost and presumed killed." - These two clauses look like they are saying the same thing
 * True, merged clauses. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 14:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)


 * I know I just asked you to potentially cut something from the lead, but I think the section overall is a bit on the short side. This wasn't the worst cyclone ever and a not terribly interesting meteorologically, but surely that opening could be expanded a bit
 * Added a bit more. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 14:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)


 * "That day at 06:00 UTC," - Too much space there
 * We need some sort of Space Force! ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 14:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)


 * "The cyclone moved ashore near the Bangladesh/Myanmar border," - I seem to remember you telling me not to use slashes. Say Bangladesh–Myanmar border instead
 * I'm not 100% sure if that's official policy. I changed it, but I've seen the slash for borders. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 14:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)


 * Cox's Bazar has only two 'a's, you put three in all four times that city is mentioned in the impact. Also, maybe wikilink it somewhere?
 * That's bizarre! Wikilinked. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:14, 12 July 2019 (UTC)


 * "and the gov[4][22][23][24][25][26]" - Please tell me more about what the government did!!! *adjusts tin foil hat*
 * Just helped replant trees. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:14, 12 July 2019 (UTC)


 * "M Alimullah Miya. Cyclone Disaster Mitigation in Banglades" - You left out an 'n' for the author's last name and forgot the 'h' on the end of Bangladesh
 * Good catch, damn. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk )


 * "United Nations Department of Humanitarian Affairs (Report). May 1994" - Why not write out the exact date (May 6, 1994) rather than just the month and year?
 * Because it's for UN DHA Information Reports 1–4. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:14, 12 July 2019 (UTC)


 * "With BC-Bangladesh-Cyclone Despite Cyclone, Burmese Refugees Unwilling to" - Are you sure this title is correct?
 * Sadly yes. The title might've gotten cut off, but LN doesn't show the complete title. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:14, 12 July 2019 (UTC)


 * References 23 and 24 look like duplicates
 * Oops, thanks. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:14, 12 July 2019 (UTC)

That should be it--12george1 (talk) 04:27, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
 * I believe I addressed all of your concerns - if not, please let me know what else I can do. Thanks for your review. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 22:14, 12 July 2019 (UTC)

Well, I am now satisfied with the condition of the article now. I will now pass it. Happy birthday!--12george1 (talk) 04:03, 13 July 2019 (UTC)
 * Thanks GC! :) ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 14:33, 13 July 2019 (UTC)