Talk:1996 Atlantic hurricane season/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TheAustinMan (talk · contribs) 22:15, 22 August 2013 (UTC)

Hello, 12george1! I will be reviewing the article, 1996 Atlantic hurricane season. As is typical of my latest reviews, I will typically copy and paste a portion of the article in question, in italics, followed by my comments and qualms. By default the review is placed on hold for the week, and if problems cannot be fixed by then, the nomination will fail. Since this is a mid-importance season article of the tropical cyclones wikiproject, I will be spotchecking for consistency and precision. Good luck.

P.S. - Ignore the random non-spaces I have, my browser has a tendency to ignore spaces when I copy/paste the stuff from the article.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:15, 22 August 2013 (UTC)

General Reminders

 * Remember to add non-breaking spaces between numeric values and their identifiers. Peer reviewer has identified this as a problem in the article, and though I may point out a few cases, to keep this review short you should find these on your own as well.
 * Where applicable, link jargon and other uncommon terms.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:15, 22 August 2013 (UTC)

Lead

 * "The 1996 Atlantic hurricane season was the first Atlantic hurricane season since 1965 in which every tropical cyclone attained tropical storm intensity." → This should also be somewhere in the body of the article. As for now it is unsourced.
 * Couldn't source it, so I switched the opening sentence to something different.--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "Featuring a total of thirteen named storms, nine hurricanes, and six major hurricanes" → As is typical of WPTC's articles generally 'major hurricane' should be linked to tropical cyclone scales, or a note could be placed indicating what a major hurricane is.
 * The new lede sentence fixes this problem.--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "...while the final cyclone, Hurricane Marco dissipated on November 24." → HURDAT, and the storm's section and article, says November 26 as the dissipation date.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "The season featured four tropical cyclone landfalls,..." → What? Only four? I counted at least eight. (Bertha, Cesar, Dolly, Fran, just to name a few).
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "...the highest number produced in a single season since 1961." → I'd also like to see this sourced and in the article as well.
 * Actually, it was 1964. This was also fixed with the new lede sentence.--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "The four most notable tropical cyclone of the season were Hurricanes Bertha,..." → typically in plural form 'hurricanes' is not capitalized.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "...causing a total of 12 deaths and $335 million (1996 USD);..." → $335 million what? Bananas?
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "The system produced severe wind and flooding damage, leading to 113 deaths and $202.96 million in damage." → You repeat 'damage' twice, so you can axe out the first instance of 'damage' in my opinion.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "Collectively, the tropical cyclone of the 1996 Atlantic hurricane season caused $8.41 billion in damage and 256 deaths." → Make 'tropical cyclone' plural.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:15, 22 August 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)

Pre-season forecasts

 * According to the Reference #1 it would appear that the CSU forecasted 11 named storms, 7 hurricanes, and 3 major hurricanes, which goes against the table. Also, it never mentions 'December 1995' as the date or time of forecast. And where are you getting the other forecasts from that table? I only see one row for '1996'.
 * I'm not sure what you're talking about. It is all there in the reference.--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * What does 'WRC' stand for? It's never stated in the article. Sure, we get 'Weather Research Center' but where's the '(WRC)' that should follow?
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * Lately we've had a source column as well in the season forecast table – perhaps you can try moving the references there instead of in the forecasting consortiums' column.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 02:58, 29 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "A normal season as defined by the National Oceanic and Atmospheric Administration (NOAA), has eleven named storms, of these six reach hurricane strength, and two major hurricanes,..." → Two things. First, add a comma after 'season' if you're going to also place a comma after '(NOAA)'. Issue two – Reference #3 says 12.1 named storms and 2.7 major hurricanes, and these numbers contradict what is stated in the article. Also, these are averages for 1981–2010, so 48.2% of that sample size were of storms occurring after 1996. You might want to find a better source.
 * Should I use CSU's 1950-2000 average?--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)
 * I'm gonna use both if that's ok.--12george1 (talk) 19:09, 7 September 2013 (UTC)

Seasonal activity

 * "...which was well above the 1950–2005 average of two per season." → Reference #3 has since been updated so that average is now 1981–2010, not 1950–2005.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * I'm not sure if Reference #6 is the best source for relaying information that the year's waters were neither in an El Nino or La Nina state. After all, it is just a bunch of blue and red and black numbers, which only state 'warm' and 'cold' episodes for the Pacific. If possible find a better source, though I'm a bit lenient on this.
 * But isn't a season neutral if the numbers aren't red or blue?--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "Seven hurricanes and three tropical storms made landfall during the season..." → Lead says four, I said eight (I'm probably wrong, I just looked at maps), and this says ten total. One of them is wrong, :P
 * Six hurricanes and three tropical storms. So the total is 9.--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "Hurricane Edouard and Hurricane Marco also indirectly caused damage and fatalities, but neither storm made an official landfall." → The season effects table says Edouard caused two deaths and Marco caused 14, none of these were indirect according to that.
 * Didn't mean to throw that word "indirectly" in there.--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "Four tropical cyclones formed in October..." → Four? I count three. And if it was really four, then it should be included with August as the most active months of the season.
 * August? What month is right before October? :P --12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "I5 is only calculated for full advisories..." → What's I5? A new calculatory rating system?  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:15, 22 August 2013 (UTC)
 * I must have hit the 5 on my keyboard rather than a "t" :P --12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)

Storms

 * The '1)' in 'Marco (C1)' in the timeline is clipped off.
 * I added a section for December, even though there were no storms that month.--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * Category 4 is from 130-156 mph, and Category 3 is from 111-129 mph, both of these ranges disagree with the table.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)

Tropical Storm Arthur

 * "...Atlantic subtropical ridge." → I can assure you there are many subtropical ridges in the Atlantic, not only one. Also, link it.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "...North Carolina with winds of 45 mph (75 km)." → I never knew you could convert raw speed values into distance.
 * Oops :P --12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * Cape Lookout is ambiguous per peer reviewer. That's the only ambiguous linkage in the article, also per that bot.
 * I think that page is messed up. I have it linked to Cape Lookout (North Carolina).--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "As the center of Arthur passed 75 miles (120 km)..." → Be consistent with your conversions, it's either miles or mi. I understand you use miles in all cases, but then that would be you'd also have to use 'miles per hour' as well. One of these needs to be fixed. Also, since we're discussing this, you're missing non-breaking spaces here too.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "''Reference #14 is dead, I suggest finding the updated link again and web-archiving it.
 * TheAustinMan is dead :P --12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "In addition, Arthur also brought precipitation to Georgia and Virginia, though amounts rarely exceeded 3 in." → Reference #13 says nothing about this.
 * That should have been with the WPC source.--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * Link C-MAN to the Coastal-Marine Automated Network.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)

Hurricane Bertha

 * There's quite a few place names you can link to in the first paragraph of Bertha.
 * Did I get them all?--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "...while located about 500 mi east of Cape Verde." → More like 575 miles south of Cape Verde. And yeah, link Cape Verde.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "...the western periphery of the subtropical ridge..." → Again, what subtropical ridge?
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "...towards the north-northeast and re-strengthening." → 'North-northeast' brings it away from North America and towards Atlantic Canada and beyond. I think you mean north-northwest.
 * Nope. Look at which direction the track is moving when Bertha re-strengthened to a Category 2.--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "...moved up the Mid-Atlantic..." → Make sure you have 'states' after Mid-Atlantic. And yeah, link that too and all the place names in that first paragraph, I could list all of them if I wanted to but I don't want to.
 * Wikilinked already in the lede--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "...of which 43 lost their roofs. Many boats were destroyed." → Reference #16 says nothing about these factoids.
 * Oops, that belongs with the July 1996 Storm Data.--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "Reference #17 is dead. Again, web-archive these storm data links before they expire.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "The storm caused 3 deaths in Puerto Rico, 1 direct and 2 indirect." The problem with this is that Reference #16 doesn't explicitly state that they were indirect or direct deaths, just states broadly that there was an automobile incident, killing two, and a surfing incident, killing one. You never know, maybe the winds drove a 2x4 into the automobile and killed the occupants, which would be a direct death. Just saying.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "The storm caused numerous power outages and damage 10 homes in Antigua and Barbuda." → Past tense for damage please.
 * Fix :P--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * Again, Reference #17 is dead so I don't know how to confirm whether the information sourced by it is factually correct.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "...with at least 4 destroyed." → This factoid is not supported by Reference #16.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)

Hurricane Cesar

 * "...near Isla Margarita of Venezuela on July 24." → Not sourced by Reference #20.
 * Actually it does. "satellite images indicate that a tropical depression formed from the disturbed weather at 1800 UTC 24 July when the circulation center was moving just to the north of the island of Margarita along the north coast of Venezuela." --12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * Either you capitalize the 'the' in 'the Bahamas' or you don't. Be consistent.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "...2 of which were from a mudslide in Pueblo Bello." → That's up for grabs. The newspaper only says that it was an avalanche. It could also be a mudslide, landslide, or debris flow.
 * Actually, the terms are very similar, so I don't think it would make a big difference.--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "Strong winds and significant amounts of precipitation lashed the Archipelago of San Andrés, Providencia and Santa Catalina, unroofing 60 homes, resulting in 11 fatalities,..." → Reference #25 says nothing about the unroofing of 60 homes. Also the sentence structure makes it seem like the unroofings caused the deaths per se. You should use 'and' instead of a comma for those factoids.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "...and resulting in 800 million COP ($440,00 USD)." → We faced this issue earlier. Again, 800 million in what, bananas? (Hint: It's damage).
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * Reference #27 died.
 * Found archive URL on WayBack Machine--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "...and 40 km of road were destroyed." → What's with the sudden switch to metric first customary last? :P
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "Costa Rica, river flooding damaged 51 houses and washed away 213 more; 72 bridges were also destroyed. The road network was significantly damaged." → Nothing about 51 damaged houses, nothing about 213 washed away houses, nothing about 72 bridges, and nothing about road networks from Reference #28. Pretty much wrong place wrong ref.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * Connection timeout for Reference #29. Also, I'm not sure why you have  when the reference is using the  template. Sounds redundant.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "Additionally, 13 people drowned in El Salvador and 2 were killed in Mexico." → According to Reference #30 there's no entry for Cesar in Mexico and how do you know those in El Salvador drowned according to the source? Furthermore, the source states 12 dead in El Salvador, and not 13.
 * I guess I will remove the deaths from Mexico--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 22 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "Overall, Cesar caused 113 deaths and $202.96 million in damage." → Not a fan of the reference spam following this sentence. Perhaps you could do something similar to what you did with Reference #7.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 02:58, 29 August 2013 (UTC)

That'll be it for now.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:15, 22 August 2013 (UTC)

Hurricane Dolly

 * "...while located west-southwest of Jamaica." → Unsourced by Reference #31. That reference only specifies a "south to southwest" (SSW) location before it underwent cyclogenesis.
 * If you see the track for yourself, you can tell Dolly developed west-southwest of Jamaica--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 28 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "It strengthened into Tropical Storm Dolly about twelve hours later." → General rule of thumb – never use 'it'.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 28 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "Later that day or early on August 22,..." → There's only one time that Dolly exits the Yucatan Peninsula so there definitely shouldn't be an 'or'.
 * I think the latter day would be correct.--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 28 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "It deepened further and was upgraded to a hurricane again at 1200 UTC on August 23;" → Again, don't use 'it'.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 28 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "Around that time, it struck between Tuxpan, Veracruz and Tampico, Tamaulipas at the same intensity." → You already say that it was 'around that time' so 'at the same intensity' is redundant, after all, it was 'around that time'.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 28 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "The storm brought heavy rainfall to much of Mexico, peaking at 37.41 in." → Not sourced by Reference #31.
 * Oops, meant to add WPC as the source.--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 28 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "In Quintana Roo, flooding destroyed a large farm." → According to Dolly's TCR, a lot of farm land was lost. That does not mean it came from one farm.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 28 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "Throughout Mexico, there were fourteen fatalities reported, seven in Veracruz, three in Nuevo León, and one in Monterrey. " → Actually there were six in Veracruz, three in N.L., and one apiece in Monterrey and Pueblo Viejo.
 * Pueblo Viejo is a city in Veracruz.--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 28 August 2013 (UTC)

Hurricane Edouard

 * "The storm remained a major hurricane hurricane for nearly eight days, an unusual occurrence." → Sure, Reference #9 says it lasted for a major for eight days, but never says it was unusual.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 23:37, 28 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "It approached Nantucket, Massachusetts," → Again, do not use 'it'.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 02:58, 29 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "Strong waves in New Jersey drowned 2 surfers." → One was a surfer, the other was a boater. They were not both surfers.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 02:58, 29 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "In the latter, wind gusts up to 90 mph (145 km/h) left two-thirds of Nantucket..." → You just linked Nantucket earlier.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 02:58, 29 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "In Canada, the storm brought rainfall up to 5.5 in..." → The reference states 136mm, so you can always be more specific and say 5.35 in.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 02:58, 29 August 2013 (UTC)

Hurricane Fran

 * "...Tropical Storm Fran on August 27 while 1036 mi east of the Lesser Antilles." → Why the sudden specificity in distance here? You round to the nearest 100 in other conversion cases.
 * Actually it needs to be 1,035 miles, rounded to the nearest 5.--12george1 (talk) 02:58, 29 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "However, Fran became less organized due to Hurricane Edouard and weakened back to a tropical storm." → Here's where you can get more specific. You should say Edouard disrupted inflow into Fran.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 02:58, 29 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "After moving west-northwestward and then north-northwestward, the storm slowly strengthened." → Did Fran strengthen during this time or only after this time?
 * It was while moving west-northwestward and then north-northwestward.--12george1 (talk) 02:58, 29 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "At 0000 UTC, Fran peaked as a Category 3 hurricane..." → 0000 UTC on what date?
 * September 5--12george1 (talk) 02:58, 29 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "Early on the following day, the storm made landfall near Cape Fear, North Carolina at the same intensity." → With no indication of date in the last sentence, 'the following day' becomes meaningless.
 * My response to the previous issue fixed this.--12george1 (talk) 02:58, 29 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "In South Carolina, the outerbands..." → Space needed between 'outer' and 'bands'.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 02:58, 29 August 2013 (UTC)

Tropical Storm Gustav

 * "An area of disturbed weather, accompanied with a low-level cloud circulation,..." → Circulations and vorticities are the result of wind flow, not clouds. As such, 'low-level circulation', not 'low-level cloud circulation'.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 02:58, 29 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "...while located about 150 mi south of Cape Verde." → No distance is given in Reference #39.
 * Ok, but what would you like me to say regarding the location of where Gustav developed?--12george1 (talk) 02:58, 29 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "On August 28, the depression began a motion to its northwest due to an approaching trough." → That's one really strange way to say that a depression turned to the northwest. Find a simpler, more concise way to word a change in direction.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 02:58, 29 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "At 1200 UTC on August 29, Gustav reached its peak intensity as a 45 mph (75 km/h) and a minimum barometric pressure of 1005 mbar." → It held the same intensity twelve hours earlier.
 * At the bottom of the NHC best track table on the TCR, it says "29/1200". Must have been a typo.--12george1 (talk) 02:58, 29 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "Thereafter, the trough that had previously caused the storm's northwestward motion, transitioned into an upper-level low pressure, which increased shear across the region." → Allow me to suggest wording. 'Thereafter, the trough previously causing the storm's northwestward motion transitioned into an upper-level low, increasing shear across the region.']
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 02:58, 29 August 2013 (UTC)


 * "Gustav dissipated at 0600 UTC on the following day, while situated about 1015 mi east-northeast of the northernmost Lesser Antilles." → Again, no distance was given.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 02:38, 24 August 2013 (UTC)
 * See previous issue about distance.--12george1 (talk) 02:58, 29 August 2013 (UTC)

Hurricane Hortense

 * "On Guadeloupe, damage was most significant to crops, with over 90% of banana plantains destroyed." → It said 50% on the book listed at Reference 45. Couldn't find anything about '90%' on Reference 44 though.
 * Oops, I must have misread the number or something.--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 1 September 2013 (UTC)


 * "In Dominican Republic..." → Needs a 'the' before 'Dominican'.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 1 September 2013 (UTC)


 * "Flooding also forced the closure of several roads and impacted 90% of crops in Samaná Province." → Should be 80%, not 90%.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 1 September 2013 (UTC)


 * "Only minor impact was reported in the Bahamas,..." → The amount of damage on an island cannot be deduced from the recordings of a weather station over two days. Either find another source or change the sentence's desired meaning.
 * Better?--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 1 September 2013 (UTC)


 * "...and Turks and Caicos Islands." → Again, you cannot use wind speeds to judge the amount of impact that occurred.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:22, 30 August 2013 (UTC)
 * See comment to the issue directly above--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 1 September 2013 (UTC)

Hurricane Isidore

 * Change 'quasi-stationary well-defined mid- upper-level low pressure area' to 'quasi-stationary mid- to upper-level low pressure area'.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 1 September 2013 (UTC)


 * "...while located about 490 mi west-southwest of..." → Where did you find the distance? It's not in Isidore's TCR.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:22, 30 August 2013 (UTC)
 * Again, what should I say about the distance if it isn't in the TCR?--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 1 September 2013 (UTC)

Tropical Storm Josephine

 * "Tropical Depression Ten developed from the remnants of a cold front in the southwestern Gulf of Mexico on October 6." → Not necessarily. The cold front only stalled at a longitude positioned over the Gulf of Mexico; the TCR never states that the front had degenerated into remnants.
 * Reference 53 is a dead link.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 1 September 2013 (UTC)


 * "...and in Louisiana, high tides flooded roads and stranded residents on Grand Isle." → The source for this, so you should place this later, in the impact paragraph or something, since it is noted that tropical storm intensity was breached after this sentence.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 1 September 2013 (UTC)


 * I'd suggest adding subscription required to Reference #56.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:22, 30 August 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 1 September 2013 (UTC)

Tropical Storm Kyle

 * You should state the page number in Reference #60.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:22, 30 August 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 1 September 2013 (UTC)

Hurricane Lili

 * "...it was first hurricane to hit the country since Kate in 1985." → Not supported by the Tropical Cyclone Report.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:57, 7 September 2013 (UTC)


 * "...mostly due to the hurricane's heavy rainfall which totaled 29.41 inches (747 mm)." → It didn't just total, it peaked. Also, where?
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:57, 7 September 2013 (UTC)
 * Changed to "peaked". However, the source does not give the specific location.--12george1 (talk) 18:57, 7 September 2013 (UTC)


 * "After 269,995 people were evacuated in advance of Lili, there were no deaths in the country." → You should state the evacuations beforehand. Then state that no deaths occurred as thanks to evacuations.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:57, 7 September 2013 (UTC)


 * "...which contributed indirectly to a death when a man in Maine tried driving..." → 'tried driving' to 'tried to drive'.
 * Good thing I didn't try driving, or else more people would have died :P --12george1 (talk) 18:57, 7 September 2013 (UTC)


 * "Damage in the Bahamas was not severe, limited to some damaged roofs and downed trees." → Missing an 'and was'.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 21:59, 6 September 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:57, 7 September 2013 (UTC)

Tropical Storm Marco

 * "A cold front interacted with several tropical waves and developed into Tropical Depression Thirteen late on November 16," → This makes it sound like the cold front became a depression.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:57, 7 September 2013 (UTC)


 * "It re-curved eastward and continued to strengthen, briefly became a hurricane on November 20." → Became should be 'becoming'.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:57, 7 September 2013 (UTC)


 * "The storm turned northeastward toward Hispaniola, but later became nearly stationary and curve eastward, then doubled-back to the west." → 'The storm turned northeastward toward Hispanola, but later became stationary before curing eastward. Afterwards Marco doubled-back to the west.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 21:59, 6 September 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:57, 7 September 2013 (UTC)

Storm names

 * Standard boiler plate, no issues here.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:09, 6 September 2013 (UTC)

Season effects

 * " Damage and deaths include totals while the storm was extratropical or a wave or low." → 'Damage and death include totals while a tropical cyclone was in its pre-formative or post-formative stages.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 22:09, 6 September 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:57, 7 September 2013 (UTC)