Talk:1999 Odisha cyclone/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contribs) 04:30, 5 January 2017 (UTC)

Hey-o,


 * "The cyclone stalled just inland and steadily weakened due to persistent land interaction and dry air, remaining quasi-stationary for two days before slowly drifting offshore as a much weaker system; the storm dissipated on 1 November over the Bay of Bengal." – You already told us it stalled, don't need to tell us it remained quasi-stationary.
 * Removed the first mention of being stationary.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 04:39, 5 January 2017 (UTC)
 * "The storm was the severest to strike Odisha in the 20th century" - Severest --> most severe?
 * Change made, though we do find severest in the Wiktionary.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 04:39, 5 January 2017 (UTC)
 * "The storm's impacts exacerbated the damage caused by a very severe cyclone that had struck the same region less than two weeks earlier." - Link?
 * Linked to the relevant section on the season page.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 04:39, 5 January 2017 (UTC)
 * "Although estimates of the death toll varied significantly—at times suggesting 30,000 fatalities—the Government of India enumerated 9,887 fatalities" - Yet the infobox says 9889.
 * Changed infobox figure to 9,899. The infobox figure includes deaths in Myanmar and Bangladesh; the snippet in prose is just talking about India, though I have since clarified this remark.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 04:39, 5 January 2017 (UTC)
 * "Rather than moving inland as forecast, the tropical cyclone became quasi-stationary over the coastal Jajpur area as it lay within a weak steering region between two upper-level anticyclones." - Lay --> laid
 * Change made.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 04:39, 5 January 2017 (UTC)
 * "Remaining situated over land, the storm steadily weakened as began to advect dry air into its circulation" - Missing a word.
 * Change made.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 04:39, 5 January 2017 (UTC)
 * No more impact information for Myanmar?
 * After looking quite extensively for it, I have not found anything.
 * "The state of Odisha sustained the most catastrophic damage associated with Cyclone BOB 03, which was considered the state's severest cyclone of the 20th century." - Severest --> most severe (severest is much less commonly used)
 * Change made.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 04:39, 5 January 2017 (UTC)
 * "The damage was compounded by the earlier impact of a very severe cyclonic storm that had struck nearby areas just 11 days earlier." - Axe had, and avoid using it when you can.
 * "...estimates for the storm's death toll vary significantly, though the India Meteorological Department indicated that around 9,887 were killed" - See earlier comment
 * All uses of the passive word axed.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 04:39, 5 January 2017 (UTC)
 * "Total damage caused by the destructive cyclone amounted to US$4.4444 billion." - ILLUMINATI. That is all.
 * "One visually estimated storm surge of 9 m (30 ft) was reported; however, this estimate was determined to have been too high;[1] regardless, no in-situ measurement of the peak storm surge exists as all potential instruments were destroyed by the storm. " - Split everything after the ref into a second sentence.
 * Sounds good to me.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 04:39, 5 January 2017 (UTC)
 * "11,000 schools were either significantly damaged or destroyed." - Can't start sentences with numbers. Add an approximately?
 * I figured I would run into this issue. Change made.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 04:39, 5 January 2017 (UTC)
 * You state over 20,000 flood embankment breaches in the lead but specify 20,005 breaches in the impact section. Not a major deal, but I like consistency.
 * As do I. Change made.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 04:39, 5 January 2017 (UTC)

That's about it. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 04:30, 5 January 2017 (UTC)
 * All necessary changes made above have been applied.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 04:39, 5 January 2017 (UTC)