Talk:1st Iowa Infantry Regiment/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 16:30, 17 July 2023 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 16:30, 17 July 2023 (UTC)

Prelim

 * No duplicated links
 * No edit wars
 * Image is correctly licensed
 * Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Lede and infobox

 * "and was officially mustered" doesn't currently make grammatical sense. Suggest starting "the regiment was officially..." as a new sentence
 * Have changed this around a bit
 * Link Boonville, Missouri
 * done
 * Link companies
 * done
 * Add ACW to infobox as a treelist heading, and Battle of Dug Springs
 * done
 * "May 14, 1861, to August 20 or 23, 1861" > "May 14 – August 20/23 1861"?
 * Done
 * It should be role=Infantry and branch=Union Army
 * Done
 * Could could also add size=c.780 and notable_commanders = William H. Merritt
 * have linked Merritt, and was finally able to trace a claim of a strength of 959 total enrollment that had been in the article earlier to an obscure 1908 government report, and have added that

Service

 * I think the two sentences beginning "The American Civil War began on April 12, 1861..." are a little too detailed and off topic for the regiment. It would be appropriate to move much more quickly into the call for volunteers and forming of the regiment
 * On the contrary, I think it's a bit useful as context for why these Iowa and Missouri and Arkansas farm boys decided all of a sudden to start shooting at each other. See, for instance, the background that wound up getting hashed out at the FAC for 8th Missouri Infantry Regiment (Confederate).
 * It would be useful to mention somewhere in the formation section that the regiment being raised is an infantry regiment
 * Added
 * Link companies
 * Done
 * Link militia
 * Done
 * " after the men had"
 * Oops, fixed
 * Do we have any descriptions of the uniforms?
 * Have added a little bit on this; it was an absolute mess of different colors and styles
 * "On June 13," try not to begin paragraphs with dates
 * Rephrased
 * Give Lyon his rank
 * done
 * "where it guarded the Hannibal and St. Joseph Railroad." from what?
 * Clarified
 * "Lyon's advance from Boonville" a word or two on what the plan was?
 * Added a sentence each in a couple different place to explain this
 * Give Sturgis his rank
 * Done
 * Give Sigel his rank
 * Done
 * "bits and pieces over the next several days"
 * Done
 * Give Sweeny his rank
 * Done, although this took more digging to find than it was probably worth
 * Give Price and McCulloch their ranks
 * Added; it's surprisingly hard to track down good explicit page number references to ranks; thankfully both Price and McCulloch appear in the orbat at the end of Brooksher
 * I think it could be made clearer if/when the regiment decides/is made to fight instead of stay in Springfield
 * As to when, I had to follow down some rabbit holes in Piston & Hatcher's footnotes, but was able to track down a date in a book published in 1907 by a veteran of the regiment. The sources don't give much info as to decides/is made to fight, as it appears to have been moot; it's not like the regiment actually attempted to back out on the battle.
 * Give Dietzler his rank
 * Done
 * "While the 1st Missouri Infantry Regiment, an artillery unit," this reads as if the 1st Missouri is an artillery unit
 * Rephrased
 * What part of the battle is the image caption actually referring to?
 * Had to track down the original magazine article it was published in, but have provided some more detail here