Talk:1st Missouri Field Battery/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 11:34, 5 August 2020 (UTC)

You really are getting through these Missouri ACW units! A few comments: More to come. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:26, 6 August 2020 (UTC) Nice work, placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 11:10, 6 August 2020 (UTC)
 * Lead and infobox
 * suggest "The 1st Missouri Field Battery was a field artillery battery" note the piped links.
 * Done
 * do we know Roberts' rank?
 * suggest "the battery was formed by Captain Westley F. Roberts in Arkansas in September as Roberts' Missouri Battery"
 * Done
 * Lieutenant Samuel T. Ruffner
 * Done
 * "by the Union Army of Arkansas under by Major General Frederick Steele"
 * Done
 * "A Union counterattack captured multiple several of"
 * Done
 * mention the Confederate surrender before the paroling
 * Added to the lead and the end of the body.
 * added the main template for Missouri in the American Civil War at the top of the Background and formation section
 * Done
 * what sort of riot was it? pro-secession?
 * Yes, done
 * "as the Guard's its commander"
 * Done
 * "However, Sigel's force was routed"
 * Done. I have a tendency to personify units by their commanders
 * "Around September 7, Captain Westley F. Roberts formed a field artillery battery that would bear his name."
 * Done
 * suggest inserting File:6 Pounder Smoothbore Gun image 3.jpg above the last para of the Background and formation section, on the right side, good to see a photo of a gun in an article about an artillery unit, alternatively put it in the infobox
 * Put it in the infobox
 * how is it that Marmaduke was giving orders to the battery when they belonged to Shaver? Was he Shaver's superior? What formation was he commanding?
 * McGhee doesn't make this clear, but Shea has a different story. In Shea's narrative, Thomas C. Hindman, the Confederate overall commander, ordered Shaver from the left to the right.  I've put this into the text, removing Marmaduke and citing Shea.  McGhee is usually very reliable, but his statement just makes no sense here: Marmaduke commanded a cavalry division, and Shaver was part of Daniel M. Frost's infantry division.  Marmaduke should not have been issuing orders to Shaver's brigade.  I've gone with the clearer and more sensible interpretation of the battery's deployment.
 * " Roberts' Battery's The James rifles"
 * Done
 * "back up the elevation hill"
 * Done
 * "and the batterymen gunners abandoned the cannons"
 * Went with pieces, instead of cannons here
 * "The battery had participated in the fighting at Prairie Grove for two hours"
 * Done
 * "Ruffner became commander of the battery, which adopted his name."
 * Done
 * "of interfering with Union shipping"
 * Done
 * "as the city was threatened by the Union Army of Arkansas under Major General Frederick Steele"
 * Done
 * "5th Kansas and 1st Indiana Cavalry Regiments"
 * Done
 * don't forget to pipe Joseph Bledsoe's Missouri Battery as Collins' Missouri Battery, if that is what was decided?
 * Done
 * I think the link you are looking for is M1841 12-pounder howitzer
 * Done. Thanks.
 * "where Major General Richard Taylor's District of West Louisiana was"
 * Went with a similar phrasing
 * "Steele's supply line was tenuous, was defeated"
 * Went with something similar. I also rephrased the following sentence.
 * " As Clark's brigade, along with Colonel Lucien C. Gause's brigade of Brigadier General Thomas J. Churchill's division, and Ruffner's and Lesueur's Batteries, moved much closer to the Union line."
 * Done
 * "seven of the losses were in prisoners of war, some of whom were executed murdered by African American soldiers as revenge for African American troops who had been massacred by Confederates at Poison Spring"
 * This one's tricky. The source uses the word executed.  The Poison Spring/retaliation at Jenkins' Ferry saga is somewhat controversial, due to the racial nature of the killings, so this is a point where it's best to stick very close to the source.  Let's just say that the war in the Trans-Mississippi west did not follow the Geneva Conventions on Warfare, see Centralia Massacre (Missouri), Battle of Poison Spring,  Lawrence massacre, and the Sacking of Osceola
 * mention the Confederate surrender before the paroling
 * Shea 2009 isn't defined
 * Fixed
 * no pics available of the two battery commanders?
 * Not that I can find. This isn't surprising, as photography wasn't super common in Missouri/Arkansas at this point.  Searching for Roberts is particularly difficult as even "Westley Roberts Civil War" brings up images related to a character with a similar name from The Princess Bride (film)
 * - All replied to, although one not done. Hog Farm Bacon 02:48, 7 August 2020 (UTC)
 * This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by acceptably licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:05, 7 August 2020 (UTC)