Talk:2/14th Battalion (Australia)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Anotherclown (talk) 07:56, 29 April 2011 (UTC)

Progression

 * Version of the article when originally reviewed:
 * Version of the article when review was closed:

Technical review

 * Citations:: the citation check tool reveals no errors (no action required)
 * Disambiguations: 1 dab (to Battle of Jezzine) -
 * Fixed. AustralianRupert (talk) 17:49, 29 April 2011 (UTC)
 * Linkrot: Ext links all work - (no action required)
 * Alt text: Images lack alt text, so you might consider adding it (although its not a GA requirement) - (no action required)

Criteria

 * It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * Punctuation here: "was an infantry battalion of the Australian Army, which served during World War II." No expert but I think the comma isn't require here.
 * Hi, my understanding is that "which" is usually preceeded by a comma, but "that" isn't. AustralianRupert (talk) 17:49, 29 April 2011 (UTC)
 * No worries then. Anotherclown (talk) 02:04, 30 April 2011 (UTC)
 * This is a little repetitive: "The 2/14th Battalion was raised on 26 April 1940 at Puckapunyal, Victoria,[2] for service during World War II as part of the Second Australian Imperial Force (2nd AIF), which was established at the time from personnel that had volunteered to serve in combat overseas." Specifically "service" and "serve" in the same sentence. Maybe reword?
 * Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 17:49, 29 April 2011 (UTC)
 * Maybe consider linking the 2nd and 3rd paras?
 * Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 17:49, 29 April 2011 (UTC)
 * "Dimra in January 1941, before being sent in April 1941 to" perhaps remove 1941 after April? It seems unnecessarily repetetive.
 * Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 17:49, 29 April 2011 (UTC)
 * Can "battlefield clearance" be wikilinked?
 * Hi, I haven't found an appropriate link yet, although the term seems to be used on Wiki a lot. Do you think I should red link it? AustralianRupert (talk) 17:49, 29 April 2011 (UTC)
 * No worries, I wouldn't bother with a red link. Anotherclown (talk) 02:04, 30 April 2011 (UTC)
 * There seems to be a word missing here: "with 958 men being evacuated due to illness or injury during this time, four died and a further 546 were permanently removed from the theatre." Perhaps reword to something like: "with 958 men being evacuated due to illness or injury during this time, while four died and a further 546 were permanently removed from the theatre."
 * Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 17:49, 29 April 2011 (UTC)
 * Perhaps wikilink "counter-battery fire"?
 * Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 17:49, 29 April 2011 (UTC)
 * Can "Royal Netherlands Indies Army" be wikilinked?
 * The appropriate link seems to be: Royal Netherlands East Indies Army Nick-D (talk) 12:02, 29 April 2011 (UTC)
 * Done. Thanks, Nick. AustralianRupert (talk) 17:49, 29 April 2011 (UTC)


 * It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * No issues.


 * It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * All major aspects appear to have been covered.


 * It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * a (fair representation): b (all significant views):
 * No issues.


 * It is stable.
 * No edit wars etc.:
 * No issues.


 * It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
 * a (tagged and captioned): b (Is illustrated with appropriate images):  c (non-free images have fair use rationales):  d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain':
 * Images are appropriate for article and are correctly licenced where required.


 * Overall:
 * a Pass/Fail:
 * Looks very good to me. Only a few minor issues above to deal with/discuss. Anotherclown (talk) 11:40, 29 April 2011 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I think I've responded to everything. Cheers, AustralianRupert (talk) 17:49, 29 April 2011 (UTC)
 * Looks good, well done. Happy to pass for GA. Anotherclown (talk) 02:04, 30 April 2011 (UTC)