Talk:2000 Atlantic hurricane season/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 15:46, 12 July 2012 (UTC)

That's it for now. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 15:46, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * First, has everything been addressed from the previous GAN?
 * Pretty much everything from the last GAN was fixed.--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * There needs to be a better source for the opening sentence, since there should be no HURDAT referencing for a record like that.
 * Debatable if Leslie "minimally effected land areas".
 * It did result in a tropical storm watch for Bermuda, but other than that, no effects were felt on land (while it was tropical, anyway). Should I change it to no impact at all?--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Well, you devote a lot of time to it in the 2nd lede paragraph, so it's just weird. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 18:47, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * You should make an indication somewhere via a note that all damage totals are in 2000 USD. It gets repetitive.
 * "However, the precursor to Tropical Storm Leslie" - how is that contradicting the previous statement? I'm not sure "however" is appropriate.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Were Beryl and Debby active at the same time? If not, you shouldn't use "while" as a connector.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * The table in "season summary" should indicate that it does not include the subtropical storm.
 * "However, La Niña was present it the Eastern Pacific, which was a factor in the activity in the season. " - again, not sure if "however" is appropriate.
 * "Tropical cyclogenesis began in the month of June" - sort of an awkward sentence. I think "first occurred" would be better than "began"
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * " Following an active October, no tropical cyclogenesis occurred in the final month of the season, which is November" - I'd swap "November" and "final month of the season"
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Was the ACE above normal like the season?
 * "However, it quickly re-strengthened" - the antecedent is unclear, since the subject of the previous sentence is the upper-level low (this is in Alberto's section)
 * Why don't you mention the final dissipation of Alberto? And is the date in the mini-infobox the actual dissipation date of the low or when it became extratropical?
 * Because it is right there in the sentence before. Also, June 23 is when it became extratropical.--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * You never say in prose when TD 4 was classified/developed.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Given that ref 9 is in Mexican pesos, you should probably list the initial damage total for Beryl in pesos followed by USD in parenthesis. Maybe also indicate the website where it was converted in a note?
 * "the system began Tropical Depression Six" - word-o?
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * You should mention that Chris was a TS for only six hours.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "As a result, the system likely became Tropical Depression Seven at 1800 UTC on that same day" - huh? TD 7 is the label that the NHC gave it, so "likely" is a poor choice of word.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * I think the bit about Debby potentially being a major hurricane hitting Florida should be mentioned, possible Andrew redux
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "Tropical Depression Nine developed on September 9 from an interaction between a low-level trough and a cluster of convection associated with a tropical wave in the Gulf of Mexico. A disorganized low-level center developed 185 miles (295 km) south of Lake Charles, Louisiana on September 8, forming a tropical depression." - you mention "tropical depression" developing/forming twice in two sentences. Try cutting down on the redundancy.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "It spawned a low pressure area that gradually developing" - grammar
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "325 miles (523 km)" - why no rounding for km? (Florence)
 * It was in a conversion template--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Two consecutive sentences mention "rapidly" in Florence's section. Try cutting down.
 * I fixed the one about it rapidly intensifying, as I doubt it would qualify as "rapid".--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "A combination of north-northwesterly shear and lower sea surface temperatures, it again weakened on September 13 and was downgraded back to a tropical storm." - missing verb in the first half
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "After moving erratically for almost five days, a short-wave trough caused" - did the trough move erratically for five days?
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "At least 65 homes and businesses were flooded, while numerous coastal roads, including Bayshore Boulevard and the Courtney Campbell Causeway, were caused due to water inundation" - should that be "were closed?"
 * Oops--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "damaged two condominiums and at least 24 houses" - you need number consistency whether you spell or not
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Damage total for Gordon?
 * $10.8 million--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "A somewhat organized tropical wave" - please fix :P
 * Better?--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * When did Isaac affect the UK? That'd be better than "eventually"
 * Between October 3 and October 4, 2000--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * What were Keith's peak winds? It's never said in prose.
 * "and at least 300 people were affected by flooding in that country" - what does it mean to be affected by flooding? Had to evacuate? Had their commute disrupted?
 * Is the exact rainfall total in Belize known?
 * There was a reported of 32.67 inches (830 mm) of rain in Belize City, which I added.--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "In Belize, a village reported that only 12 houses remained" - remained what? And what village?
 * It means that only 12 houses survived the storm, but as for the name of the village, the answer is: "Nope, Chuck Testa!".--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "At least 19 people were killed in Belize and damages totaled to $280 million (2000 USD)." - you don't need the "to" in "damaged to"
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Same as with Beryl, you should list the original damage source in pesos before the USD, and say how you converted it.
 * "In slowly organized" - fix?
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "with 40,000 acres (160 km²) of farmland inundated with water" - try to avoid two "with"s
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "Overall, the precursor system of Leslie resulted in about $950 million (2000 USD) in damage, slightly more than half of that figure was agriculture related." - there's a missing conjunction for the last clause
 * What?--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "The low pressure area slowly formed a circulation" - I thought a LPA was a circulation?
 * " satellite classifications using the Hebert-Poteat technique" - what is that?
 * "though initially it was erroneously classified as Tropical Depression Seventeen" - why erroneously?
 * Because when Michael became tropical, it was immediately a tropical storm, and not a depression.--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "In mid-October 2000" - we know the year
 * Hmm, do I replace it with Y2K?--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)