Talk:2002–03 Australian region cyclone season/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 05:18, 12 December 2013 (UTC)

Lot of pressure in this review. This could be the first Australian season GA!
 * "1 November 2002" - I think this needs a comma. Ditto with other full dates w/ year
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "The season's ten tropical depressions existed within these dates with the first entering the basin on" - add comma before "with"
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "Tropical cyclogenesis in the season began when Tropical Cyclone 07S entered the Australian region on 27 December. " - technically TC 07S didn't form in the basin, so it wasn't tropical cyclogenesis. Since you mention this storm in the previous paragraph, perhaps clarify the storm name there, and just start this paragraph with the first storm forming in the basin?
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "On 1 February, weakening Cyclone Beni entered the Australian region. It brought severe flooding to Queensland before dissipating on 5 February." - merge
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "Cyclone Graham developed offshore Western Australia on 24 February and made landfall in a rural area of that state on 28 February. Flooding was reported in Western Australia" - merge
 * You like merging stuff. Don't you? :P --12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * BTW, Inigo tied for strongest, so you should mention that
 * Done--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "Only two cyclones occurred between 125°E and 150°E" - is this east or west of Australia? Might be nice to mention
 * East--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "Port Hedlund " --> "Port Hedland"?
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * The season summary should go into less detail, since it's largely the same as the lede. Or get rid of it, IDC
 * I'm not gonna remove it. So what should I cut out?--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Well, you mention almost every TC in the lede, then mention them all again in the SS, then you give them all summaries. So cut down on mentioning every storm in the SS. Perhaps go monthly? --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 18:53, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * Some more info on the unnamed TC would be good, considering it apparently lasted a few weeks
 * Did you get any of this? --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 18:53, 13 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Since the unnamed storm remained over land for several weeks, wouldn't that produce a lot of rainfall?
 * 35 inches isn't a lot of rainfall?--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Indeed. Where is the corresponding impact? --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 18:53, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "In order to convert the value of 10 million AUD, the values of the currencies were taken from their respective values on 5 February 2003. For the value of 1 million USD, the values of the currencies were taken from their respective values on 30 January 2003." - I'm unclear about this note. Where does the $1 million USD come in? And somewhere you should say all damage totals are in 2003 versions of their respective values.
 * Better?--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "In an environment of weak to moderate wind shear, TCWC Perth" - Perth was in an environment of weak shear?
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "TCWC Perth upped the intensity to 185 km/h (115 mph) early on 8 February. Later that day, TCWC Perth reported a peak intensity of 190 km/h (120 mph) at 1000 UTC," - why mention both? Also, the 120 doesn't match the infobox
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)
 * No you didn't. The 120 mph doesn't match the peak in the infobox. How come? --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 18:53, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "as it neared the 90°E" - the 90E? Add a word, such as line, longitude, meridian, place, stuff, jazz
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "Rapidly weakening, JTWC" - JTWC rapidly weakened?!?!?!
 * Yes :P --12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "A tropical low eventually formed" - add date
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * " while the low was located several hundred miles" - you use km mostly in the rest of the article. Why use miles here?
 * Do I also need to change Eighty Mile Beach? :P --12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Hah, only if you petition the local government to change it too :P --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 18:53, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "Graham reached its peak intensity that day while nearing the coast" - which was?
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * Did Graham ever dissipate?
 * No, it's still out there :P --12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Like Kristy 06 and Ivan? --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 18:53, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "Torrential precipitation was observed, with 175 mm (6.9 in) at Telfer" - 6.9 in isn't that torrential.
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Now "with 175 mm (6.9 in) at Telfer" reads weird. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 18:53, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "Near that town, at Blue Bush Creek, while a group of people attempted to cross floodwaters, two men were swept away." - rewrite please :/
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "although deep convection diminished somewhat later on 2 March. Later that day" - they both can't be later
 * They can be, but for the sake of grammar, no. :P --12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * Link Carnarvon
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "Slowly moving southeastward and then northward" - why did it move this way?
 * Nobody cares :P Jk.--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * "Erica attained sustained winds of 150 km/h (90 mph)" - 1 or 10 min?
 * I explained in the notes section, but I guess I will say it again here.--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)
 * But usually you say which agency estimated the winds. Where you don't, you need to specify. --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 18:53, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * Add year for Cyclone Beti
 * 1996.--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)


 * You should clarify who estimated the pressure for Inigo
 * Fixed--12george1 (talk) 18:10, 13 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Is it? --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 18:53, 13 December 2013 (UTC)

All in all, pretty good! Should be easy to make this the first Australian season GA! --♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 05:18, 12 December 2013 (UTC)