Talk:2002 FIFA World Cup final/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 17:37, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Comments Takes me to "Route to the final", more to come. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 17:57, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "the United States in the quarter-final" so for me, when I'm talking about the round in general, I'll give it the "quarter-finals" and when I'm talking about "their specific" match, I'll give it the "quarter-final". If that makes sense?
 * "estimated 1.5 billion " non-breaking space.
 * "later, when" no comma required.
 * "passing towards Rivaldo. Rivaldo let" repetitive.
 * "record As of 2021" ->
 * "Japan and South Korea between 31 May and 30 June 2002.[1][2] Japan and South Korea" a little odd repeating that phrase and linking the sides the second time round, and I know exactly what you're doing. Maybe a gentle addition of "The national sides of" or something in the second sentence?
 * "at International Stadium" +the (could be my fault that one).
 * "attended matches in this stadium throughout" -> attended matches there throughout.
 * "was a new record" what sort of record?
 * I've removed, as the source doesn't appear to say it anyway. &mdash; Amakuru (talk) 19:01, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "final over radio and television" no need for those links.
 * "In totality" total?
 * "only later to be broken in 2006)" link the 2006 final here?
 * Some of this background might be better for post-match, the viewing figures etc are part of the post-match analysis after all.
 * "Germany-South Korea match" en-dash and link?
 * "a ball specifically" repeat of ball.
 * "The ball's design" ditto, "Its design..."?
 * "and color usage" which variant of ENG here?
 * "was entirely based" is "entirely" needed?
 * "refined syntactic foam layer" wut?
 * "superior performance characteristics" advert.
 * "more precise and predictable flight path" ditto.
 * "was notoriously criticised" notorious?
 * "some spectacular goals" according to whom?
 * "ball as being "too big" TOO BIG??! Wasn't it within the parameters of the rules governing "ball size"??
 * "stage, in which they" ->"stage where they"
 * I usually suggest the opposite when I'm reviewing your articles! I kind of think a stage is not a place so "in which" sounds better, although "where" isn't totally prohibited of course. &mdash; Amakuru (talk) 18:44, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Ha ha. To each, their own.  This is GAN after all.  I'm sure all foul language can be picked up later.  The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 18:48, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "prior to the 2002 World Cup including" do you mean the finals?
 * "The injury was sustained in a friendly match against Austria" weave that into the previous sentence.
 * "Between the 1998 loss and" Between that defeat.
 * "tournament, followed by" full stop after tournament, and "He was followed....
 * "winning just four" -just.
 * "who referred a more different style of football from his predecessors" wut?
 * "called "bullyboy soccer". " cite.
 * "In this style of play emphasis was placed on aggressive play ... finesse play" play play play (sounds decidedly USENG too)....
 * "several friendlies as " already linked.

That takes me to the "Match" section, more to come. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 18:17, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "they won 8–0." could note it was Germany's biggest ever World Cup win? source
 * "the Sapporo Dome against" where?
 * "team to score a goal" no need for "a goal".
 * "stoppage time at the end of the game" maybe "second-half stoppage time"?
 * "at Shizuoka Stadium one" the? and where?
 * "at Jeju World Cup Stadium" similar.
 * "There were no goals scored in the first half and well into the second half, until the 88th minute" The first half ended goalless ....
 * "the United States. The American team had more shots on goal than the Germans, by 11 to 6, but Germany nonetheless won the " -> "the United States who had more shots on goal, but Germany won..."
 * "the single goal scored" nope.
 * "South Korea Like the" wut?
 * "and once again it was Ballack" journalese.
 * "received a uellow card" really, a uellow? I hate that colour.
 * "Four minutes before the goal, Ballack had received a uellow card for a foul on Lee Chun-soo; as this was his second booking of the tournament, Ballack was suspended from the final" Four minutes before scoring, he had been shown the yellow card for a foul on Lee Chun-soo and was suspended for the final for receiving his second booking." or similar.
 * "Turkey, who went on to finish second in the group" not sure about this?
 * "scored, leaving Brazil down 1–0 at half-time" no need for that second clause really.
 * "levelled the scores at 1–1 in the" levelled the match at...
 * "50th minute. In the 86th minute" maybe "50th minute. Four minutes before the end of regular time..."?
 * "brought down" fouled? linked?
 * "the penalty area, prompting" link.
 * "prompting a red card for Alpay" sounds too passive for me, and link red card even though you've linked sent off.
 * "Rivaldo was later fined 11,670 Swiss francs by FIFA following a video review" this probably ought to be in the post-match (it's legendary after all).
 * "at Ulsan Munsu Football Stadium, Brazil" the, where?
 * "Belgium in Kobe." previously you name the stadiums?
 * "scoreless until he 67th minute, when Rivaldo scored" scoreless/scored repetitive.
 * "Ronaldo added on a second" no need for "on".
 * "England in the quarterfinals, with England taking" repetitive.
 * "in the first half's stoppage time" in first half stoppage time.
 * "forward Ronaldinho scored" you've mentioned him before, don't start describing his position here.
 * "with only 10 men" -> "with ten men"
 * "into the semi-finals to face Turkey.[16] In the semi-final, Brazil faced Turkey " repetitive ++.
 * "at Saitama Stadium" the? where?
 * "when Ronaldo scoring what" scored. And how?

That takes me to the "Second half" section. More incoming. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 18:35, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Germany's Ballack, who had scored the winning goals in both the quarter-final and semi-final, was suspended for the final and was replaced by Jens Jeremies" we know he scored those goals, and that he was suspended...
 * "the semi-final game against" no need for "game".
 * "having been a "poor replacement" for Ronaldinho having been" repetitive.
 * "remption" what is that?
 * "noted The Germans could" I love this Germanic capitalisation but no.
 * "one goal, to Robbie Keane of Ireland" no need for the Keane clause.
 * "final. Collina was described" He was...
 * "and As of 2021 he" lc=yes again.
 * "had an opportunity " +to score
 * "behind by Edmílson." overlinked.
 * "Germany crossed the ball into" the whole country? And overlinked.
 * "Brazilian penalty area four minutes" overlinked.
 * " and was retrieved by Oliver Neuville on the" overlinked.
 * "25 yards (23 m) out" no need for "out".
 * " bar from long range in the 44th minute" two minutes later?
 * "when a Roberto Carlos pass" overlinked.
 * "hit the shot well" POV.

That's my lot (refs not included). The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 19:00, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "when a corner found him in" sounds bizarrely passive.
 * "a free kick from" link.
 * "where Gilberto Silva met the" overlinked.
 * "Then Ronaldo hit" personal, but "Ronaldo then hit..."
 * "Frings at the other end with Fring's" gah.
 * "shot hit over the crossbar. A shot" shot shot.
 * "catch the shot, but he was unable to catch it " catch catch...
 * "Ronaldo, who had followed Rivaldo's shot took advantage" comma after shot.
 * "pitch 1 yard (1 m) outside" could we say "just" rather than this??
 * "pass through his legs, and the pace on Kléberson's pass " pass used twice in quick succession and meaning different things.
 * "tracked back well" (a) wut? and (b) well per whom?
 * " and shot the ball into" struck?
 * "their best chance of the game" according to whom?
 * " first time shot" shouldn't first-time be hyphenated in this usage?
 * "Germany were unable to threaten for the rest of the match" well no, they were fully able to do so, they just didn't. And I'd try a concluding sentence here too.
 * "which As of 2021 remains" c'mon....
 * "present, the Japanese emperor Akihito did not join the ceremony of presenting" present/presenting...
 * "winner Pelé handed the trophy" handed? gave?
 * " whole – As of 2021 the only" cmon.....
 * "Kahn also received the Golden Glove for best goalkeeper at the World Cup" He also... at the tournament.
 * "champions - that is" en-dash.
 * "their sole victory since" +tournament.
 * thanks for the detailed review, and apologies for the minor errors that I should have eliminated before! I think I've looked at everything so far. Cheers &mdash; Amakuru (talk) 23:13, 29 October 2021 (UTC)