Talk:2004 Grand Prix (snooker)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 15:34, 28 July 2018 (UTC)


 * Fair warning, I know nothing about snooker, but this has been sitting around since May, so I'll give it a go. Courcelles (talk) 15:34, 28 July 2018 (UTC)


 * Lead should likely give the title plainly, and then say "known as the 2004 Totesport Grand Prix for sponsorship reasons", assuming Totesport was the naming sponsor?
 * " and the next event following last season's World Championship, which was won by Ronnie O'Sullivan, now a two-time world champion and the world number one." Unreferenced both that he won the WC and was number one.
 * "claimed the scalp" is very informal for an encycopaedia.
 * Same with "whitewashed"
 * "after which he expressed his surprise he was still in the tournament." Source?
 * "O'Sullivan overcame a chest infection to beat Joe Swail 5–1, but missed his post-match press conference. " Again.  Sorry if they're citedf later, but for these things BLP demands we repeat citations.
 * "Wattana beat Doherty 5–3 by fluking the final brown from a snooker, before potting blue and pink for the victory." TGhe first half of this sentence makes absolutely no sense to me.
 * "to get reveng" Again, kind of informal, and no source provided that he was seeking revenge.
 * More whitewashing in the QF section
 * "In the best-of-17" -> "best-of-17 frames"
 * "It was his 21st ranking final and 16th ranking title, which meant he was now third on the list ahead of Williams and Higgins." These statistics are going to need a direct inline citation, per the GA rules.
 * "The sixth frame had lasted 36 minutes, when O’Sullivan stroked in the pink to a distant balk pocket" We can lose the had.  b) are you sure balk is the word you meant? and c) "Stroked in the pink" can be reworded to be less of a sexual innuendo.
 * What is sourcing the section "Final" -- not the prose one, the table one.

And that's all from me. Courcelles (talk) 15:59, 28 July 2018 (UTC)
 * Have made the necessary edits. With regards to the whitewashed point, it's an term widely used in snooker and I have wikilinked it to the appropriate page.
 * Good, good. Promoting. Courcelles (talk) 17:30, 28 July 2018 (UTC)