Talk:2008 American League Central tie-breaker game/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: KV5  ( Talk  •  Phils ) 16:10, 15 May 2010 (UTC)

OK, Stax, if you really want me to, here I go. KV5 ( Talk  •  Phils ) 16:10, 15 May 2010 (UTC)

Comments from KV5

 * "won the game 1–0" - commas around the score (, 1–0,)
 * "lowest scoring gam" - lowest-scoring
 * comma after ALDS
 * move "3 games to 1" to the end of the sentence, and precede with a comma; also MOS:NUM (three and one)
 * "In baseball statistics" - comma after
 * "start of the season" - comma after
 * "the top two finishers" - clarify, the division's top two finishers
 * "the previous season" - in the previous season
 * "last on May 17th" - MOS:DATE, May 17 (occurs twice)
 * "a share of the league" - I think you meant a share of the lead
 * "The Twins spent much of the season second to the White Sox" - reads a bit awkwardly, suggest re-word The Twins spent much of the season in second place behind the White Sox, and comma after
 * "Despite going 11–15 in September" - comma after
 * "September 25th" - MOS:DATE
 * "which capped" - that capped
 * "September 29th" - MOS:DATE (occurs twice)
 * "won, 8–2" - comma after
 * "Fans were encourage" - encouraged
 * "as their starter" - starting pitcher, link it, and comma after
 * "top of the 5th" - fifth
 * "Danks then induced"
 * comma after "Delmon Young"
 * "Brendan Harris then hit"
 * Remove double period ("Griffey, Jr..")
 * "7th inning" - seventh
 * "to ground out" - comma after
 * "but then allowed a double"
 * Where does A-Ram figure into this? He's played his whole career for the Bucs and Cubbies.
 * Wow. I'm fixing everything else, but this deserves a special comment. It's Alexei Ramirez, but I saw A. Ramirez in the game summary and didn't even think when I wrote Aramis. Apologies. Staxringold talkcontribs 16:41, 15 May 2010 (UTC)


 * Check your diacritics; there are some plain links redirecting to names of Latin players with accented letters (Mijares, Ramirez, etc).
 * "in the 9th" - ninth
 * "White Sox" - this is possessive ("White Sox'")
 * "Danks drew praise for his performance in the game." - ref?
 * "Twins' batters" - rm apostrophe
 * "Michael Cuddyer" - can remove his first name after first mention
 * "22–40" - should be 22-for-40 or, better yet, something written out for non-baseball readers, like Twins batters Joe Mauer, Justin Morneau, and Cuddyer had a combined 22 hits in 20 at bats
 * "against John Danks" - rm first name
 * "for their career" - careers, multiple subjects; comma after
 * "With the victory" - comma after
 * "pennant winning" - pennant-winning
 * comma after "Rays"
 * comma after "Statistically"
 * "4th most" - fourth-most
 * rm first names in "Legacy" section from Danks, Mauer, Morneau
 * "3.32 in the game" - comma after

That should do it. On hold. KV5 ( Talk  •  Phils ) 16:32, 15 May 2010 (UTC)
 * All done. Staxringold talkcontribs 16:45, 15 May 2010 (UTC)
 * Well done. Pass. KV5  ( Talk  •  Phils ) 16:47, 15 May 2010 (UTC)