Talk:2008 Georgia Imperial Sugar refinery explosion/GA1

GA Review
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 * Either expand the paragraphs in the lead or merge them so there are two paragraphs, because they are very short right now.
 * ✅ Blood Red Sandman  (Talk)   (Contribs) 10:37, 28 June 2008 (UTC)


 * "The sugar refinery in question was" &rarr; "The sugar refinery was"
 * ✅ Blood Red Sandman  (Talk)   (Contribs) 10:42, 28 June 2008 (UTC)


 * "it was the town of 3,500's main employer prior to the disaster." – really needs to be reworded, as it isn't immediately obvious that "town of 3,500" is a phrase on its own
 * ✅ Blood Red Sandman  (Talk)   (Contribs) 10:42, 28 June 2008 (UTC)


 * When you use measurements, like in "160 acre site and was spread across 872,000 square feet", use the convert template so that alt. measurements are shown.
 * ✅ Except for hundredweight, two reasons: 1) I don't know if the source meant short or long cwt, and 2) in any event, the template doesn't seem to support it properly, as Template:Convert/list of units/mass lists them, but doesn't suggest anything that it can be converted to. Blood Red Sandman  (Talk)   (Contribs) 11:13, 28 June 2008 (UTC)


 * "Explosion and emergency response" is made up of far too many small paragraphs; I recommend improving the flow and expanding or merging paragraphs appropriately.
 * ✅ I think, I have tried to restructure but let me know if more is needed. Blood Red Sandman  (Talk)   (Contribs) 10:48, 28 June 2008 (UTC)

Gary King ( talk ) 06:49, 28 June 2008 (UTC)

There are some short paragraphs in " Aftermath". Perhaps they can be merged? For instance, "Port Wentworth saw an" and "In the first quarter of 2008" both discuss economics issues; they could be merged, perhaps. Gary King ( talk ) 19:05, 28 June 2008 (UTC)


 * Again, I have restructured the section. I tried to group like topics together - demolition/reconstruction, economics and legal work. The exception was the emergency shutdown and fine; I stuck that with the first lot. Look OK? Blood Red Sandman  (Talk)   (Contribs) 21:19, 28 June 2008 (UTC)

This article reaches GA criteria and has therefore been passed. Gary King ( talk ) 21:21, 28 June 2008 (UTC)


 * Thank you for the review. Blood Red Sandman  (Talk)   (Contribs) 21:26, 28 June 2008 (UTC)