Talk:2009 International Bowl/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 20:01, 25 June 2010 (UTC) I will review this tonight; my apologies for the delay. I may split it between tonight and tomorrow since this is a long article. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 20:01, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

Lead

 * "led by running back Donald Brown's 208 yards rushing, dominated the first half statistically," 208 yards in the half? Just making sure that's right, very impressive if true. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear
 * That is indeed correct; here is another source for verification: . –Grondemar 07:07, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

Team selection

 * "The International Bowl contracted with the Big East and Mid-American Conferences to select teams to participate in their annual game." Contracted sounds a bit odd; reword.
 * I changed it to "The International Bowl had contracts with the Big East and Mid-American Conferences that allowed them to select one team from each conference to participate in their annual game." How does that sound? –Grondemar 02:12, 27 June 2010 (UTC)
 * "The two teams played each other for six consecutive seasons" in six.. sounds better I think.
 * Agreed, corrected. –Grondemar 02:14, 27 June 2010 (UTC)
 * Any of the "# yards" stuff needs a non breaking space, i.e. 27 yards . Why I'm not positive, but that's what it says to do.
 * I believe I have added non-breaking spaces wherever required; please let me know if I missed any. –Grondemar 02:55, 27 June 2010 (UTC)
 * "The Huskies easily won their first game 35–3 against FCS opponent Hofstra." Link FCS. I know it means Division I-AA, but others may not.
 * I had a note I was planning to add to the Notes section explaining FBS / FCS, but I keep getting Cite.php errors (see the linked revision). If you have any idea how to fix this error please let me know. –Grondemar 03:14, 27 June 2010 (UTC)
 * Strike the above, I see that they added an explanation to WP:FOOT of the bug; apparently the #tag workaround only works once with list-defined references. When I moved the note out of the LDRs, it worked fine.  Hopefully they will fix that bug eventually. –Grondemar 03:31, 27 June 2010 (UTC)
 * Link Temple in the following sentence, as well as other schools whose football programs weren't linked.
 * I didn't link Temple because they were previously linked in the Buffalo section; the Big East teams weren't linked because they were linked when I explained the bowl selection process above. Let me know if you still think they should be linked; I was trying to avoid WP:OVERLINKing. –Grondemar 03:14, 27 June 2010 (UTC)
 * That's fine; probably forgot they were linked by the time I got to reading that section. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 01:15, 29 June 2010 (UTC)

Pregame buildup

 * "The turnaround of the Buffalo program brought kudos to Bulls head coach Turner Gill," kudos seems a bit informal.
 * I changed "kudos" to "acclaim"; that should be more formal. –Grondemar 12:41, 29 June 2010 (UTC)
 * "The Huskies allowed the 10th-fewest yards per game in the nation with 281 yards allowed" Any specific rankings for run and pass defense?
 * I'll work on pulling together those numbers and expanding the defense sections in general tonight. –Grondemar 12:45, 29 June 2010 (UTC)
 * I haven't found anything on run defense yet but I added a couple of sentences on the pass defense; let me know if that works. –Grondemar 02:36, 30 June 2010 (UTC)

Game summary

 * "and punted the ball to Connecticut" link punt, and other terms that non-football fans may not get (i.e. sacked)
 * I believe I got them all; let me know if I missed any. –Grondemar 04:53, 4 July 2010 (UTC)
 * "and settled for a 38-yard Field goal" field goal doesn't need to be capitalized.
 * Agreed, fixed. –Grondemar 04:23, 4 July 2010 (UTC)
 * "UConn's turnover woes continued on their next possession, when on their second play from scrimmage after receiving Buffalo's kickoff Tyler Lorenzen was sacked," 'next possession when, on their...kickoff, Tyler'
 * Fixed. –Grondemar 04:25, 4 July 2010 (UTC)
 * "punting the ball back to UConn after three plays. The Huskies drove to within the Buffalo 10-yard line;" where'd the Huskies start from?
 * I added "Starting from their own 44-yard line,". –Grondemar 04:53, 4 July 2010 (UTC)

Final stats/Aftermath

 * "with 2,083 rushing yards, best in the nation that year." 'Which led the nation' sounds better.
 * Changed as requested. –Grondemar 04:58, 4 July 2010 (UTC)
 * What position was Anthony Sherman?
 * Fullback. I didn't mention it initially in the passing section as his position is listed a couple of sentences before in the running section; I added the position for consistency. –Grondemar 04:58, 4 July 2010 (UTC)

Misc.

 * I'm a bit confused as to the point of the group=" " in your references. It could probably be removed without harm unless there's something I'm not seeing. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 19:26, 30 June 2010 (UTC)
 * Originally I placed the group=" " in the references to segregate them from the endnotes which had group="Note". After removing all the group=" " attributes the page rendered the same, so it turned out as you said that they were not needed. They have been removed. –Grondemar 14:16, 2 July 2010 (UTC)


 * The review is finally done. I'll place this on hold, and will pass it when the final issues are fixed. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 04:48, 3 July 2010 (UTC)
 * I believe I have addressed all the issues above, let me know if there are any other changes desired. –Grondemar 05:00, 4 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 15:53, 4 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much for the thorough review! –Grondemar 17:09, 4 July 2010 (UTC)