Talk:2009 World Cup of Pool/GA1

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 08:12, 22 April 2020 (UTC)

Shall be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 08:12, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
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Infobox

 * The tournament name should be mentioned in the name= field of the infobox
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:33, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Lead

 * "was a professional pool tournament played in the discipline of nine-ball. The event was the fourth World Cup of Pool, a scotch doubles knockout championship representing 32 national teams." - how about merging these two sentences together and making them more concise?
 * It's actually already quite a long sentence. My only suggestion would be to change it to:
 * The 2009 World Cup of Pool (also known as the 2009 PartyPoker World Cup of Pool due to sponsorship) was a professional nine-ball pool, and the fourth World Cup of Pool, a scotch doubles knockout championship representing 32 national teams.
 * I'd say that it's an improvement MWright96 (talk) 15:14, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * But, I find that to be quite long. I do prefer to state we are talking about pool, and then that it's nine-ball, as they aren't the same thing. Let me know your thoughts Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:37, 27 April 2020 (UTC).
 * "The Korean team of Ga Young Kim and Yun Mi Lim were the first all-female team" - repetition of the word "team"
 * Changed to pair. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:37, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Delink the dollar sign
 * Yeah, I didn't know this was a thing. I get confused as to why we do this, considering the symbol is used for many different currencies, yet the £ which we should link isn't used for very much. Unlinked. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:37, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "The USA team were defeated in the quarter-finals by the Chinese pair Fu Jian-bo and Li He-wen 5–9." - Chinese pair of
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:37, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "The event was won by the Filipino team of Francisco Bustamante and Efren Reyes, who defeated the German team" - repetition of the word "team"
 * reworded. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:37, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Tournament format

 * "The 2009 World Cup of Pool was a pairs nine-ball tournament played at the the Annex of SM City North EDSA in Quezon City," - stray "the" is unneeded
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:06, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "in the final of the previous year's event." - how about 2008 event.
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:06, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "The tournament was broadcast as 31 one-hour episodes also produced by Matchroom.[8] Locally, the event was broadcast live on Solar Sports and CS9.[9]" - how about The tournament was broadcast live locally on Solar Sports and CS9, and 31 one-hour episode were produced by Matchroom Sport.[8][9]
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:06, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Prize fund

 * "This was similar to that of the previous year's event." - the text in bold is overlinked
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:06, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Money earned was shared between the players." - Money earned by the team was shared between their players.
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:06, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Teams

 * "with 31 countries participating, two teams representing the host nation Philippines." - and two teams
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:07, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "An all female team," - all-female
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:07, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Early rounds

 * "The opening match of the tournament featured" - saw
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "featured the French team of Stephan Cohen and Vincent Facquet win 8–1 over the Canadian team." - French pair of Stephan Cohen and Vincent Facquet take a 8–1 victory over the Canadian team.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "allowed USA to win 8–7." - allowed the USA
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "The defending champion USA team of Rodney Morris and Shane Van Boening met the Maltese team of Alex Borg and Tony Drago in the opening match." - more repetition of the word "team"
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "The unseeded Indonesian team won their opening round match over the Indian team" - repetition of the word "team"
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "An all-female team competed for the first time at the event, with the Korean team of Ga Young Kim and Yun Mi Lim." - repetition of the word "team"
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "The pair lead 3–0 before being defeated 5–8" - led
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "who won six racks in-a-row.[19][15]" - refs in numerical order please
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Japan were trailing at 3–6 behind in their match against Croatia," - remove the word in bold
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "The team defeated the Hong Kong team" - more close repetition of the word "team"
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "The finish team won 8–3 over" - typo; should be Finnish
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Also, for the above sentence, it would be benefical to mention the Finnish players by name
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "Kenny Kwok and Lee Chenman in a whitewash 8–0." - the words in bold should be the other way round
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "when referee Cielo Lopez deemed Bruno Muratore's arm had struck the cue ball." - how about expand that it was Muratore's left arm that was deemed to have struck the cue ball
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "The Philippine A side of Orcollo and Alcano won eight straight racks after trailing 0–3 to the Russian side to win 8–3." - repetition of the word "side"
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "but missed some "crucial shots" during the match." - according to whom?
 * Hmm, the only info I have is that Matchroom Sport published the report. I'll see if I can dig up an author of the original piece Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)

Later rounds (quarter-final—final)

 * "The quarter-finals were all played on 5 September and as a race-to-nine racks." - the word in bold is unneeded
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:12, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "defeating the Netherlands team Niels Feijen and Nick van den Berg 9–7." - duo of
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:12, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "the Chinese and Filipino teams were at hill-hill 8—8." - the em dash should be replaced by an en dash (–) per MOS:DASH
 * My AWB sweep beat me to this one. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:12, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * "The Philipino team won the next rack to win the tournament winning 11–9." - win the match 11–9 and the tournament.
 * done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:12, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Images

 * The image of Reyes should be made upright per MOS:UPRIGHT
 * Made 0.6 - I'm never sure on correct sizes for these. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:58, 27 April 2020 (UTC)