Talk:2010 Bank of America 500/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Dom497 (talk · contribs) 23:25, 28 January 2018 (UTC)

I will start this review shortly.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 23:25, 28 January 2018 (UTC)

Lead

 * "...stock car race that was held on October 16, 2010" - "...stock car race held on October 16, 2010"
 * ✅ --Bcschneider53 (talk) 13:44, 29 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "Soon after, Busch became the leader of the race; he would maintain the lead most of the race to lead the most laps (218)" - Maybe something like "Soon after, Busch became the leader of the race and would maintain a total of 218 laps in first place"
 * ✅ --Bcschneider53 (talk) 13:44, 29 January 2018 (UTC)

Background

 * "The back stretch, opposite of the front, also had a five degree banking" - "Opposite of the front" isn't need as it was already established the course is an oval.
 * ✅ --Bcschneider53 (talk) 13:44, 29 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "...in fourth and fifth." - "...in fourth and fifth, respectively".
 * ✅ --Bcschneider53 (talk) 13:44, 29 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "Kurt Busch with 5,533 was twenty-two points ahead of..." - I know you mean "5,533 points" but the current sentence doesn't provide any "units"
 * ✅ --Bcschneider53 (talk) 13:44, 29 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "Kurt Busch with 5,533 was twenty-two points ahead of Carl Edwards, as Jeff Burton with 5,496 points, was thirteen ahead of Kyle Busch, and forty-one in front of Greg Biffle." - What is the point of the sentence? Which position were these racers in? I'm assuming they were in positions six and below. But then again, why are these positions relevant?
 * ✅? --Bcschneider53 (talk) 13:44, 29 January 2018 (UTC)


 * Same goes with the next sentence. What is the significance of being in 11th and 12th?
 * The top twelve drivers qualified for the Chase for the Sprint Cup, known today as the NASCAR playoffs. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 13:44, 29 January 2018 (UTC)

Practice and Qualifying

 * "Three practice sessions was held before the Saturday race..." - "Three practice sessions were held before the Saturday race..."
 * ✅. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 00:27, 30 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "The third and final session lasted 65 minutes" - "The final session lasted 65 minutes"
 * ✅. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 00:27, 30 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "During the first practice session, Ryan Newman of the Stewart-Haas Racing team was quickest ahead of..." - To be honest I don't have any good suggestions but "quickest ahead" breaks the flow of the sentence when I read it. I think this entire sentence needs to be reworded.
 * ✅. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 00:27, 30 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "Mark Martin was scored fourth..." - "Mark Martin placed fourth".
 * ✅. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 00:27, 30 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "...and David Reutimann managed fifth" - "...and David Reutimann finished fifth"
 * ✅. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 00:27, 30 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "...with a time of 28.192" - What units is the time in?
 * Seconds, ✅. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 00:27, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

Race

 * "Gordon maintained the lead during the caution to lead on the restart" - Correct me if I'm wrong but I thought cars could not pass each other during a caution/yellow flag. Maybe I'm just confusing this with F1?
 * Clarified. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 00:27, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

Post-Race

 * What's the significance of the quote in the box?
 * That's usually just something we've included in past race reports; 2010 Sylvania 300 and 2006 UAW-Ford 500 are both FAs and have them as well. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 00:27, 30 January 2018 (UTC)
 * Fair enough.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 02:47, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

Good work! On hold until these last issues are addressed.-- Dom497 ( talk ) 21:43, 29 January 2018 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I have addressed the issues. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 00:27, 30 January 2018 (UTC)
 * Pass!-- Dom497 ( talk ) 02:47, 30 January 2018 (UTC)