Talk:2010 Honda Indy Edmonton/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MPJ-DK (talk · contribs) 23:56, 11 September 2016 (UTC)

- I am gong to start the GA review of this today, I usually add comments over a day or two while I look at all aspects of the GA criteria. If you have any questions etc. along the way feel free to let me know.  MPJ  -DK 23:56, 11 September 2016 (UTC)


 * External sources - the link to indycar.com is dead according to the tool ❌
 * ✅ MWright96 (talk) 12:36, 12 September 2016 (UTC)
 * Copyvio tool - No issues found ✅
 * Images check out with appropriate licenses etc. ✅
 * Meets the broad in coverage - it has what you'd expect for an article on a race, ensuring that it also covers the context of the race, not just the results ✅
 * Stability - Not detecting any issues on the talk page or the article history ✅


 * Lead
 * "(including its three years" - the word "its" should be removed.
 * ✅ MWright96 (talk) 20:34, 13 September 2016 (UTC)
 * "who started from third position" should that be "who started from the third position"?
 * Yes ✅ MWright96 (talk) 20:34, 13 September 2016 (UTC)
 * "most of the event, but was" does not need the comma
 * ✅ MWright96 (talk) 20:34, 13 September 2016 (UTC)
 * Background
 * "despite it occurring losses" I think you mean "incurring losses" here
 * That's correct. ✅ MWright96 (talk) 20:34, 13 September 2016 (UTC)
 * "It was to be the third" simplify to "it would be the third"
 * ✅ MWright96 (talk) 20:34, 13 September 2016 (UTC)
 * "CCWS" is used as an abbreviation - while it is spelled out in the lead the lead should be considered separate from the main body of the article so the first time an abbreviation is used it should be spelled out.
 * ✅ MWright96 (talk) 20:34, 13 September 2016 (UTC)
 * "$9.2 million for the previous two seasons." I would suggest "$9.2 million over the previous two seasons."
 * ✅ MWright96 (talk) 04:32, 15 September 2016 (UTC)
 * "seven races remaining in the season (two on road courses and four on oval tracks)" - 2 + 4 does not add up to 7??
 * Good catch. corrected and clarified. ✅ MWright96 (talk) 04:32, 15 September 2016 (UTC)
 * "An gearbox" = "a gearbox"
 * ✅. MWright96 (talk) 04:32, 15 September 2016 (UTC)
 * Practice and qualifying
 * "The session was twice stopped" should be "The session was stopped twice"
 * ✅. MWright96 (talk)
 * "and Bertrand Baguette" needs to be reworded "and then Bertrand Baguette" or something similar.
 * Changed to "and then Bertrand Baguette". MWright96 (talk) 04:32, 15 September 2016 (UTC)
 * What is an "advertising hoarding"? I have never heard that term
 * It's the British spelling of billboard. Have corrected. MWright96 (talk) 04:32, 15 September 2016 (UTC)
 * "claimed pole, with the" I would think that "claimed pole position, with the" makes it more clear, less racing jargony.
 * ✅ MWright96 (talk) 04:32, 15 September 2016 (UTC)
 * "three tenths" should be "three-tenths"
 * I believe this sentence "by teammate Castroneves and had the pole" should be worded slightly different, if I read it correctly you means "by teammate Castroneves who had the pole" otherwise the "and" refers back to Powers, which we've already established.
 * Reworded. MWright96 (talk) 04:32, 15 September 2016 (UTC)
 * Race
 * The time indicator "10:00 (UTC−6)" looks odd - is that 10:00 AM local time in whatever timezone it's in?
 * That's right. MWright96 (talk) 04:32, 15 September 2016 (UTC)
 * "The race, the eleventh out of seventeen, began at 4:00 p.m. local time," - the aside about 11th out of 17 seems unnecessary and distracting here.
 * Removed. MWright96 (talk) 04:32, 15 September 2016 (UTC)
 * Removed. MWright96 (talk) 04:32, 15 September 2016 (UTC)

"The move was immediately reviewed by the IndyCar chief steward and competition president Brian Barnhart, which led to Castroneves being shown a black-flag one minute later as he was deemed as having blocked Power."? the original sentence reads a little dense.
 * "After starting fifteenth, Tracy drove aggressively and moved up into tenth position by the 20th lap." either all spelled out or not, I don't have a preference for which way you go.
 * I will keep it the way it is. 16:02, 17 September 2016 (UTC)
 * Is there some sort of link for "Green-Flag" and what it means in racing?
 * Linked it to Racing flags#Green flag
 * "pit box to repair damage" I find the sentence "to repair damage" kinda odd, missing something?
 * Clarified. MWright96 (talk) 16:02, 17 September 2016 (UTC)
 * "The first full course caution was race" I am confused by the word "was"?
 * I removed the repetitive text in that sentence. MWright96 (talk) 16:02, 17 September 2016 (UTC)
 * "an drive-through penalty" should be "a" not "an"
 * ✅ MWright96 (talk) 16:02, 17 September 2016 (UTC)
 * "The move was immediately reviewed by the IndyCar chief steward and competition president Brian Barnhart and Castroneves was shown a black-flag one minute later after Barnhardt judged that he blocked Power." How about
 * Suggestion has been taken. MWright96 (talk) 16:02, 17 September 2016 (UTC)
 * Post Race
 * "that the series considered suspending Castroneves" - the term "the series" sounds odd to me? is that how they commonly refer to it in racing circles?
 * Yes. IndyCar is an auto racing "series" in the same manner that the NASCAR Sprint Cup Series is. MWright96 (talk) 15:36, 17 September 2016 (UTC)
 * Similarities were made between Castroneves'" - either "comparisons were made" or "similarities were noted or something like that" - cannot make a similarity.
 * ✅ MWright96 (talk) 16:02, 17 September 2016 (UTC)


 * Just a source review is all that remains and my review will be complete. Sorry it has taken so long, I have been suffering from bad allergies that made it hard to focus.


 * Source review
 * Flagworld.com - I am not famliar with it, is it considered a reliable source for racing?
 * Yes, I would say so. MWright96 (talk) 16:02, 17 September 2016 (UTC)
 * The rest look like they are reliable, well formatted etc.


 * - that's my completed review, I will put it on hold for up to 7 days to allow for you to address the minor issues I have found.  MPJ  -DK 15:26, 17 September 2016 (UTC)
 * Many thanks for the review. I have acted on all the points you've raised. MWright96 (talk) 16:02, 17 September 2016 (UTC)


 * - I am satisfied this is a Good Aricle. Contrats