Talk:2010 New Year's Eve tornado outbreak/GA1

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 16:22, 27 March 2015 (UTC)

It was either reviewing this or Vera, so...


 * "as high as 80 mph (130 km/h) in eight locations" - in or at?
 * – At.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:13, 5 April 2015 (UTC)


 * "In the meanwhile" - first two words are redundant. Try finding a new way to start the paragraph
 * – Made a reference to the other storms.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:13, 5 April 2015 (UTC)


 * What happened to the storm system after the tornado outbreak?
 * The storms gradually fizzled out as they moved eastward.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:13, 5 April 2015 (UTC)
 * Why doesn't the $90 million in damage tornado have its own section?
 * Although it has the highest damage toll, the majority of the damage occurred on a military facility and there isn't much usable information other than numbers of structures destroyed.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works)
 * How did the four people die in Missouri?
 * There were five, and these were tornadic deaths (homes destroyed).  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:13, 5 April 2015 (UTC)
 * It seems unusual you list the damage total as "$0" for the tornado "WNW of Mozier". Not a problem necessarily, just that it seems out of place. Surely the uprooted trees had some monetary value.
 * Perhaps it did, though in the Storm Events Archive that tornado is explicitly mentioned as having caused $0 in damage.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:13, 5 April 2015 (UTC)


 * I feel like the tornado that caused $12,000,000 in damage could use some more info. What happened to the nursing home?
 * There's not too much to add, as the tornado was relatively short-tracked and the available data simply numbers the damage toll. Not much can be said about the nursing home.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:13, 5 April 2015 (UTC)


 * For the tornado "N of Terry to ESE of Luckney", don't begin two consecutive sentences with "Numerous"
 * – Changed to several.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:13, 5 April 2015 (UTC)


 * "On a church conference center, the main church's roof was heavily damaged and several camp buildings were destroyed." - so was the roof damage on the main church or the conference center? I'm kinda confused what a conference center is, too. Seems like this could be written more simply.
 * – I changed 'conference center' to 'complex'.


 * "suffered shingle of fascia damage" - I don't understand this at all
 * – meant to say 'or'. Linked fascia.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:13, 5 April 2015 (UTC)


 * "powerlines" - two words
 * –  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:13, 5 April 2015 (UTC)


 * "One person was critically injured after their mobile home was destroyed; she died of her injuries at a hospital four days later." - don't use "their" for a singular pronoun. Use "One woman was critically injured after her mobile..."
 * –  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:13, 5 April 2015 (UTC)


 * " following the destruction of a mobile home in within the Ozark National Forest " - grammar?
 * – Removed the 'in'  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:13, 5 April 2015 (UTC)


 * Link Interstate 270 to Interstate 270 (Illinois–Missouri)
 * –  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:13, 5 April 2015 (UTC)


 * Aren't there any news stories on this tornado outbreak? Seems kinda odd that it almost only relies on NWS sources, which isn't a bad thing, just seems odd.
 * There are, but the information they convey has already been covered by the sources that have been used in the article.  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:13, 5 April 2015 (UTC)

The article is decent, just needs a bit more work. ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk ) 16:22, 27 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review!  TheAustinMan (Talk·Works) 18:13, 5 April 2015 (UTC)