Talk:2010 Penang dragon boat tragedy/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 21:35, 11 August 2020 (UTC)

GA Review

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

General

 * Should be comprising of policemen... not comprising policemen
 * ✅ WPSamson (talk) 03:19, 14 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Should be or get clearance
 * ✅ WPSamson (talk) 03:19, 14 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Minor, okay if not changed: Don't have to mention parents name, can just say a parent of a deceased victim
 * ✅ WPSamson (talk) 03:19, 14 August 2020 (UTC)


 * As well, I don't think inquired is the right word and can probably be cut out. There are also some more wording changes needed. Therefore, the sentence can read On 4 November 2010, a parent of a deceased victim revealed that the dragon boat training was unscheduled and conducted due to student requests to a new teacher already interested in joining the training session.
 * ✅ Note that to be clear, it was revealed by the club to parent, not by parent. WPSamson (talk) 03:19, 14 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Teacher and student don't need to be linked.
 * ✅ WPSamson (talk) 03:19, 14 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Outdoor activities doesn't need to be linked.
 * ✅ WPSamson (talk) 03:19, 14 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Camping trip doesn't need to be linked.
 * ✅ WPSamson (talk) 03:19, 14 August 2020 (UTC)