Talk:2011 Vancouver Stanley Cup riot/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 02:44, 28 February 2024 (UTC)

Review
, this is a preliminary review of the small issues I have identified. I will soon delve into references etc. but these are some quick fixes that can be done in the meantime. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 03:09, 28 February 2024 (UTC)


 * Thanks for picking up this review! I updated the article in response to the notes and responded below. Brindille1 (talk) 03:47, 29 February 2024 (UTC)
 * Appreciate the feedback on citations- clearly I need to be more attentive to the formatting in the future since I missed a lot. Corrected the ones you pointed out, plus a few more that were incorrectly `cite web` or missing dates. Brindille1 (talk) 04:03, 14 March 2024 (UTC)
 * , passing! Well done. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 04:59, 17 March 2024 (UTC)

Previous riots

 * Not a major issue and I am fine if it's not fixed, but I was confused originally when you wrote since the 1980s and then mentioned 2006. I see it's because of Montreal (boo Habs!) but I had to re-read to make sense of it. Maybe say: Since the 1980s, Edmonton Oilers and Montreal Canadiens fans have both rioted following Stanley Cup loses. In 2006.....
 * I agree with the concern. I reworded the paragraph and (hopefully) made it read a bit better. - Brindille1 (talk) 03:45, 29 February 2024 (UTC)

Game

 * Per MOS:DATESNO, please re-write June 13th, 2011 to June 13, 2011.
 * Somebody beat me to it. If it was you, thanks! - Brindille1 (talk) 03:39, 29 February 2024 (UTC)

Riot

 * at which point the police department decides to remove them is in the wrong tense. It should be decided.
 * Fixed - Brindille1 (talk) 03:37, 29 February 2024 (UTC)
 * Per MOS:DATESNO, please re-write On June 20th to June 20.
 * You also forgot to add said after Chu
 * Fixed both - Brindille1 (talk) 03:37, 29 February 2024 (UTC)
 * caught committing on video to turn is missing a word
 * Fixed - Brindille1 (talk) 03:37, 29 February 2024 (UTC)
 * This report labelled alcohol as a primary cause of the riot, stating simply: "Alcohol fuelled the riot." I don't know if the quote is needed here. It doesn't add anything that wasn't already written and seems redundant.
 * Agreed, removed the quote - Brindille1 (talk) 03:37, 29 February 2024 (UTC)