Talk:2011 WPA World Nine-ball Championship/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:50, 11 May 2020 (UTC)

Shall take on this review as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 19:50, 11 May 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

General

 * The hyphens in the prose should be replaced by en dashes where appropriate
 * Whoops, forgot to run the script before nom. Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:57, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Ronnie Alcano and Antonio Lining are overlinked twice
 * Done a sweep. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:57, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

Lead

 * "The tournament was the 2011 edition" - how about competition for variety?
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:05, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
 * "of the WPA World Nine-ball Championship, first held in 1990." - which was first held in 1990.
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:05, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

Overview

 * "and matches were a races-to-nine racks." - race
 * done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:27, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
 * "The 128 players were split into 16 groups of 8 players," - repetition of the word "players"
 * done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:27, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
 * "The defending champion for the event" - of
 * done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:27, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

Prize fund

 * "The event featured a prize fund of $250,000, with the winner of the event receiving $36,000," - repetition of the word "event"
 * done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:27, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
 * "the same as that of the previous years event." - how about the 2010 tournament?
 * done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:27, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

Double-elimination round

 * "The previous year's runner-up Kuo Po-cheng" - how about 2010 runner-up instead?
 * "The 1995 champion Oliver Ortmann lost his opening match" - Gulf Times doesn't mention the fact that Ortmann is the 1995 champion
 * I have cited that to another source. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:32, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
 * The book looks awfully like it was self-published because it has Lulu.com has the publisher and much of the content is taken from this site. MWright96 (talk) 12:03, 14 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Oh, I'm not familiar with that. I've changed to a source from WPA. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:29, 14 May 2020 (UTC)
 * "Shane Van Boening, one of only two Americans on the tournament" - a second comma is missing at the end of this portion of text
 * Also the text in bold of the above sentence should be in the tournament
 * Radosław Babica is overlinked
 * "Winners in the winners' bracket advance" - advanced
 * "while those in the losers' bracket winners will play the winners' bracket losers" - played
 * "on the next day." - the following day.
 * "Wu lead 2–0," - led
 * I have done all of the above Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:32, 12 May 2020 (UTC)

Early rounds (last 64-last 16)

 * "The tournament changed to a single elimination tournament from June 29 to July 1." - a reliable source is needed to verify this sentence
 * Francisco Bustamante and Tōru Kuribayashi are overlinked
 * "The Round of 64 was played on the 29th." - June 29 per MOS:DATES
 * "Antonio Gabica led Mika Immonen 4–1 and 10–6 when he scratched in rack 17, when Immonen won the next four racks to go hill-hill." - allowing Immonen to win
 * "In the last 32 played on the 30th," - June 30
 * "with Biado winning the remaining racks to win 11–9." - taking
 * "Also played on the 30th, - same issue as the fourth point
 * Daryl Peach and Shane Van Boening is overlinked
 * "Defending champion Francisco Bustamante had only five minutes between matches," - Bustamante, who had
 * I have made the above changes (working on the source). Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:40, 12 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Now sourced. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:46, 13 May 2020 (UTC)

Later rounds(quarter-finals–final)

 * The subsection should have a space between "rounds" and the opening bracket
 * "and later won he match 11–2." - typo; the
 * removed "he match" entirely to avoid repetition. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:59, 13 May 2020 (UTC)
 * "The two took their time on studying the nine-ball when van Boening made an errant safety" - think there is a word missing here
 * poor wording throughout, changed. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:59, 13 May 2020 (UTC)
 * "Akakariyama took over ten minutes" - more than
 * done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:59, 13 May 2020 (UTC)
 * "The first semi-final Orcullo faced Alcano." - semi-final saw Orcullo face
 * done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:59, 13 May 2020 (UTC)
 * "I just have to win one more match."." - the second full stop is redundant
 * done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:59, 13 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink bank shot to the appropriate article
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:59, 13 May 2020 (UTC)
 * "The final was played at 7p.m. local time (GMT+3 hours)" - the text in bold is not needed
 * done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:59, 13 May 2020 (UTC)
 * "with an alternating break between Yukio and Alcano. Alcano won the lag," - Try not to have the last word of a sentence start the next one like this.
 * done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:59, 13 May 2020 (UTC)