Talk:2012 Bojangles' Southern 500/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: HawkAussie (talk · contribs) 03:17, 14 April 2020 (UTC)

Will be picking this one up and hopefully I can able to review this.

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


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Lead

 * ...it after a second pit stop cycle. - Maybe slighty change that to it after the second pit stop cycle.
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 16:55, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Johnson took the first position for the... - Should this be "took the lead" to keep it consist over the article.
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 16:55, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ...green–white–checker finish (extending the race to 368 laps), - Is the section is the bracket needed because you had already mentioned it earler in the sentence or is this a misspell because you had lap 367 in the race section
 * Reworded MWright96 (talk) 16:55, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ...field and he held the lead to win the race. - Maybe modify to "held it to..."
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 16:55, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
 * The race attracted 5.716 million television viewers. - I assume this is referencing to the infobox as it seems out of place otherwise.
 * It's the standard in NASCAR race report articles MWright96 (talk) 16:55, 17 April 2020 (UTC)

Background

 * was third in the Drivers' Championship with 369 poinits - You could probably remove the in the drivers championship in that section.
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 12:38, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
 * No. 73 car in a third car - Probably best to remove the "in a third car" section.
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 12:38, 20 April 2020 (UTC)

Practice and qualifying

 * ...120 minutes long, while the second lasted 45 minutes. - I assume you missed the "long" in the second session for consistency.
 * Reworded MWright96 (talk) 12:38, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Harvick was quickest with a time of 27.769 seconds in the first session,... - Maybe slighty change the sentence format so "in the first session" is at the start.
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 12:38, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ...a second of Harvick's time. Ryan Newman,... - Possibly of merging of those two short sentences.
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 12:38, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Adding to that section, you have said the time in the second session but not in the first session.
 * Only added the first of the fastest overall drivers in both practice sessions 12:38, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ...were entered in the qualifier on Friday evening, - Slighty change that 'into qualifying' on something along those lines as qualifier isn't really probably the best word to put in.
 * Reworded MWright96 (talk) 12:38, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ...the fifth and sixth positions. - Slight rewording there.
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 12:38, 20 April 2020 (UTC)

Race

 * ...(UTC−04:00) in the United States on Fox. Missing a reference that Fox was doing this race.
 * Added MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I will make it easier to say, do we really need to know what is happening outside of the top 10 drivers.
 * Removed MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Johnson got ahead of Biffle for the lead temporarily, but he did not hold it at the start/finish line. - Was this on the same lap as the Gordon contact with the wall?
 * Clarified MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ...began on the same lap. Biffle made his pit stop... - Possibly merge those sentences?
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ...took over the spot for lap 101. - I assume this means lead here.
 * Clarified MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ...for the lap-179... - space between lap and 179.
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ...moved up another position by overtaking Truex for third on - Possible rewording here?
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Kurt Busch was overtaken by Stewart on the 207th lap. Edwards slid sideways and was passed by Johnson three laps later. - Both of these sentences are missing the position that was gained here.
 * Clarified MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ...pit stops under the caution. Hamlin took the lead... - Possibly merge these two sentences.
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ...Biffle to claim fifth place. He got ahead of Stewart... - Another merge of sentences possibly?
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ...claim the eleventh position. and Harvick overtook Bowyer... - Remove the full stop if keeping the drivers out of the drivers in the top 10
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ...caution. It was caused by Labonte - Another one of possibly merging those two sentences.
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * ...he did not regain the first position - Maybe change it to regain the lead.
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)

Post-race

 * that no person involved in fracas punched each other - Fracas???
 * Clarified MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)

Final comments

 * Is their possibly an image for that race in general (maybe logo for that race or something else) to not have the infobox feel like something is missing.
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * What about the using image of Kyle Busch in 2012 instead of the picture in 2015 to make it more accurate.'
 * Done MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Other than that I think it is close to a Good Article.
 * All of the points raised above have been addressed. MWright96 (talk) 05:49, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Congrats on the GA. HawkAussie (talk) 12:19, 22 April 2020 (UTC)