Talk:2013 Boston Marathon/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:33, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

Am reviewing for the GAN March 2021 Backlog Drive MWright96 (talk) 18:33, 6 March 2021 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "The 2013 Boston Marathon was the 117th running of the annual marathon race in Boston, Unites States" - typo; should be United
 * Also, a comma after the word "States" is missing
 * "Lelisa Desisa won the elite men's race with a time of 2:10:22, and Rita Jeptoo won the women's race with a time of 2:26:25." - repetition of "race"
 * "Hiroyuki Yamamoto won the men's wheelchair race in 1:25:32 and Tatyana McFadden won the women's race in 1:45:25." - same issue as above
 * "The competition became suspended and many participants were unable to participate in the remainder of the competition." - repetition of "participate"
 * ✅ all of the above.

Course

 * "the runners enter the town of Natick, and enter the 'Scream Tunnel' at mile 12 once they have left the town." - repetition of both "enter" and "town"
 * Reworded


 * "that has been in place for over 100 years." - more than
 * Done


 * "followed by a 0.75 miles (1.21 km) climb at mile 16" - the adj=on field in the template is missing here
 * Done


 * "The first hill is a steep 1,200 yards (1,100 m) climb," - same issue as above
 * Done


 * "At half a mile long and with a 3.3% incline," - writing out the percent symbol is prefered per MOS:PERCENT
 * Done


 * "it isn't especially difficult," - no contractions please per MOS:CONTRACTIONS
 * Done


 * "but due to the hill being 20 miles (32 km) into the race, it is still feared." - why specially is the hill feared?
 * Added a little more explanation using the source.

Field

 * "The fastest competitor in the women's race was Meseret Hailu who had run 2:21:09 to win the 2012 Amsterdam Marathon and 1:08:55 to win the 2012 IAAF World Half Marathon Championships." - repetition of "to win"
 * I'm not sure how to reword this and avoid confusion for the reader because it mentions two different distances so treating them separately adds clarification. I'll take a look later with fresh eyes.


 * 2012 Chicago Marathon is linked twice
 * Removed


 * "The wheelchair race began at 9:17 EDT (UTC-4), the women's race at 9:32 EDT" - repetition of "race"
 * Done

Race summary

 * Hopkinton and Markos Geneti are overlinked
 * Done


 * "and climbed to 54 °F (12 °C) at the finish." - can be either rose or increased to avoid close paraphrasing of the USA Today source
 * Reworded. I didn't write this so I didn't know it was so closely paraphrased.


 * "Hiroyuki Yamamoto of Japan aimed to make a move at the 5 kilometres (3.1 mi) mark," - the adj=on field in the template is missing
 * Done


 * "In the men's race, Jason Hartmann and Fernando Cabada led the race" - repetition of "race"
 * Done

Bombing

 * "At 2:49 EDT, race clock time 4:09.43, almost two hours after the winners had completed the race," - repetition of "race"
 * Removed


 * Boston Athletic Association's acronyms should be in parentheses after the full name is mentioned for the first time
 * Added


 * Bronze shouldn't really be linked
 * Removed link

Results

 * Sources for the result should be with the results, rather than underneath the references section
 * The sources for the results should be with the results, rather than underneath the references section
 * Moved


 * All tables should be MOS:DTABTUT compliant with the addition of "scope="col"s
 * Added


 * The athletes names in all the tables should be sorted by surname with the template
 * Placed names in the template.