Talk:2013 Hattiesburg tornado/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 01:13, 21 February 2013 (UTC)

Unfortunately, I am going to have to fail this article. Normally, with this few numbers of concerns, I'd leave this on hold, However, given my first and last two concerns, I am failing this. I am not trying to be mean or discoruage you, and this is not personal by any means, but there are just too many issues for me to be sorted out in a few weeks. However, I hope you continue to work on the article, and do get it to GA. Good luck to your future work on this article. I hope all my suggestions above or below are helpful. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  01:13, 21 February 2013 (UTC) In addition, I have three comments that are borderline GAN material.
 * Why was this article GAN'd so soon? The tornado just occurred 10 days ago. This months NCDC won't be out for several months probs, after all. YE   Pacific   Hurricane
 * Why is the state name in the title? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  01:13, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "The 2013 Hattiesburg, Mississippi tornado was a large and violent EF4 multiple-vortex wedge tornado that devastated portions of Hattiesburg, West Hattiesburg, and Petal, Mississippi, as well as smaller communities and rural areas in the same area, during the late afternoon and early evening of Sunday, February 10, 2013." lead is lengthy, I suggest splitting it up to something like "The 2013 Hattiesburg, Mississippi tornado was a large and violent EF4 multiple-vortex wedge tornado that devastated portions of Hattiesburg, West Hattiesburg, and Petal, Mississippi. In addition, the tornado affected smaller communities and rural areas in the same area, during the late afternoon and early evening of February 10, 2013."
 * I don't see any need to mention what day of the week the tornado was on. I suggest removing the "Sunday" in my above comment YE  Pacific   Hurricane  01:13, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "Hattiesburg area and reached estimated maximum sustained winds of 170 mph (270 km/h) in the Oak Grove community of West Hattiesburg." wikilink to maximum sustained winds as IIRC it has an article. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  01:13, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "To the northeast of Petal, the tornado began to weaken, causing EF1 to EF2 damage to numerous roofs and downing many trees." what does "EF1 and Ef2 damage mean. Yes, I know what it means, but to the average person may or may not know. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  01:13, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Why do you mention impact in the meteorological synopsis. I'd give impact its own section. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  01:13, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "82 people were injured" don't start a sentence with a number. YE  Pacific   Hurricane
 * "was rated as a low-end EF4, with winds up to 170 miles per hour (270 km/h)." abbreviate units as you do earlier in the article per the MOS. YE  Pacific   Hurricane
 * "since April 24, 1908," suggested revision to "since the 1908 Dixie tornado outbreak" YE  Pacific   Hurricane
 * " 64 deaths occurred in Lamar and Forrest Counties alone with that tornado.[1]" again, don't start a sentence with a number. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  01:13, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
 * " ten million dollar" don't spell out "ten" in this case. YE  Pacific   Hurricane  01:13, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "including the basketball gymnasium that had undergone renovations just a few weeks before.[9]" IMO just say "gym" as that is more common.
 * Can you merge the last two paragraphs in the aftermath as they are short? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  01:13, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
 * How is the other torandoes section relevant? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  01:13, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Why are there two infoboxes? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  01:13, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Wikilink NWS in Ref 1. YE   Pacific   Hurricane  01:13, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Do any of the refs have authors? YE  Pacific   Hurricane  01:13, 21 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Use cite news for news refs. YE  Pacific   Hurricane
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