Talk:2013 Midwestern U.S. floods/GA1

GA Review
The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.''

Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 02:52, 27 August 2023 (UTC)

Two of five spot checks failed. There are copy changes, but fixing the spot checks issue is priority one. The refs were useful elsewhere, so I suspect misplaced refs at play? Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 03:12, 27 August 2023 (UTC)


 * , yes, misplaced refs were somewhat at play, just forgot to place the correct references. :P Anyway, I've fixed everything now, except for the two injuries in Peoria, which I've given a response to. Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 04:04, 27 August 2023 (UTC)

Lead

 * This article might not need to recite the "2013 Midwestern United States floods" in the title directly; be more natural.
 * Reworded. Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:20, 27 August 2023 (UTC)


 * The Des Plaines river swelled to 10.92 feet (3,330 mm), where a local state of emergency was declared for the city of Des Plaines, Illinois. Reverse the order... "where" doesn't work with a distance
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:20, 27 August 2023 (UTC)


 * Five fatalities occurred, two each in Illinois and Indiana, and a fifth in Missouri. Try Five fatalities occurred: two each in Illinois and Indiana, with a fifth in Missouri.
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:20, 27 August 2023 (UTC)

Meteorological summary

 * A upper-level trough which was situated over the Great Lakes and Midwest regions moved into the Northeastern United States, before being replaced by a strong ridge of high pressure over the Southeastern United States. Remove comma (User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences, CinS)
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:20, 27 August 2023 (UTC)


 * conducted by the National Weather Service Lincoln, Illinois showed Needs a GEOCOMMA after Illinois
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:20, 27 August 2023 (UTC)


 * Trained thunderstorms along the stationary boundary produced heavy rainfall across the Midwest, before the storms headed eastward. Remove comma (CinS)
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:20, 27 August 2023 (UTC)

Preparations
This section seems just a little thin? maybe?
 * I've added a bit more information to the section. Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:56, 27 August 2023 (UTC)


 * GEOCOMMA after Morehead, Minnesota
 * ✅ Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:56, 27 August 2023 (UTC)


 * makeshaft should be makeshift
 * ✅ Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:20, 27 August 2023 (UTC)


 * In Solon, Iowa, sandbags were being set up and three pumps were delivered by the Department of Public Works Comma after "up" (CinS)
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:20, 27 August 2023 (UTC)

Impact

 * breaking the crest level record by 0.02 inches in 1986, Try breaking the 1986 crest level record by 0.02 inches and remove the comma (CinS)
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:20, 27 August 2023 (UTC)


 * infastructures "infrastructure"
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:20, 27 August 2023 (UTC)


 * Some of the sentences here get kinda choppy; maybe a few combinations?
 * I've combined a few sentences. Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:56, 27 August 2023 (UTC)


 * Two injuries occurred when their homes collapsed in Peoria Separate homes? Or two in the same home?
 * I'm honestly not sure. According to the source provided for the two injuries, the source states that two homes collapsed into the basement, but it does not specify if there were two people in the same home or one person in each house. I've at least clarified that two homes collapsed, but again, the source does not clarify or specify how many people were in each house when they collapsed. Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 04:04, 27 August 2023 (UTC)
 * That makes sense. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 04:10, 27 August 2023 (UTC)


 * forcing evacuations and flooded downtown Grand Rapids flooding, not flooded
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:20, 27 August 2023 (UTC)


 * The Grand River also flooded areas of Lowell and Ada Township, and prompted evacuations in Wyoming for 25 homes. Remove comma (CinS)
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:20, 27 August 2023 (UTC)


 * One fatality occurred after she was swept away by a swelled Joachim Creek Maybe rewrite? "A woman was killed"?
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:20, 27 August 2023 (UTC)


 * However, temporary levees prevented significant flood damage, though Fargo mayor Dennis Walaker recalled after the flood event "Four floods in the last five years. That's extremely unusual."
 * Split the sentence. Add a comma after "flood event".
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:20, 27 August 2023 (UTC)

Aftermath

 * Illinois governor Pat Quinn and Missouri governor Jay Nixon declared a state of emergency Combine this with the other state of emergency sentence.
 * ✅! Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:56, 27 August 2023 (UTC)

Spot checks

 * 7: This appears to be the wrong reference for Fargo. It's not here at all.
 * Added correct reference. Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:56, 27 August 2023 (UTC)
 * New references in these passages (Fargo and Grand Rapids) verify. Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 04:12, 27 August 2023 (UTC)


 * 17: Heavy rains have drenched the Windy City this month, leading to its soggiest April on record. Through yesterday, 8.54 inches had fallen at O’Hare International passing the 8.33 inches recorded in 1933. ✅
 * 27: The second sentence it's used in works. But it doesn't validate.
 * Changed reference, should validate now! Tails   Wx  (they/them) ⚧ 03:56, 27 August 2023 (UTC)


 * 31: Flooding in Lowell. ✅
 * 43: Residents in North Dakota are bracing for flooding, too, as the overflowing Red River flows toward Fargo. The city has begun a three-day push to truck sandbags into low-lying areas. Police cars are escorting the semi-trailer trucks as they head to the locations, CNN affiliate KVLY reported. Conditions could get worse: Additional rain could speed up the melting of snow, making the river rise even faster. ✅

Images
There are five images, all with good captions. Three are PD-USGov, and the other two are CC-licensed. Encouragement: Add alt text.