Talk:2014 White House intrusion/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 15:03, 17 October 2015 (UTC)

I remember this happening. I'll finish this review very soon. JAG UAR   15:03, 17 October 2015 (UTC)

Initial comments

 * "when Omar J. Gonzalez, an Iraq War veteran" - does his name have to be in bold? Unless he's an actual part of the article (his bio being included), I don't see how this meets the criteria of MOS:BOLD
 * Done. Freikorp (talk) 05:33, 19 October 2015 (UTC)


 * "As a result of the incident and other security breaches at the White House, then Director of the Secret Service" - might be worth linking Director of the United States Secret Service here
 * Done. Freikorp (talk) 05:33, 19 October 2015 (UTC)


 * "He married Samantha Bell in 2006; they separated in 2010 and were divorced in July 2014" - I would put a however in between "2006" and "they", but it's up to you
 * Done. Freikorp (talk) 05:33, 19 October 2015 (UTC)


 * "Gonzalez was arrested for eluding police and possessing a sawed-off shotgun" - I don't want to sound naive, but how did he get arrested for carrying a sawed-off shotgun but not four handguns?
 * Firearms including handguns typically aren't illegal in the US, however, sawing off the end of a shotgun is an illegal modification. Freikorp (talk) 05:33, 19 October 2015 (UTC)


 * "he was tackled by an off-duty agent who was in the process of leaving for the night. He was arrested and taken to George Washington University Hospital after complaining of chest pains" - replace this with Gonzalez, as at first I thought this was referring to the agent who tackled him!
 * Done. Freikorp (talk) 05:33, 19 October 2015 (UTC)


 * "Gonzalez was ordered to be held without bond" - is this the same thing as being held without bail?
 * I assume it would have to, but 'bond' is what the source says. It could be referring to a surety bond, and denying him the option of such a bond would effectively keep him in prison. Freikorp (talk) 05:33, 19 October 2015 (UTC)

On hold
Nice work on this article. It's well written, comprehensive, and the references all check out fine. I also found no issues with paraphrasing etc. Once all of the (minor) issues are clarified, this should be good to go. JAG UAR   18:18, 18 October 2015 (UTC)
 * . Thanks for the review. Let me know if I need to do anything else. Freikorp (talk) 05:33, 19 October 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for addressing them! This should be good to go now.  JAG  UAR   12:15, 19 October 2015 (UTC)