Talk:2015 Japanese Grand Prix/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Z105space (talk · contribs) 18:21, 29 January 2016 (UTC)

I will review this one.  Z105space  (talk)  18:21, 29 January 2016 (UTC)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * The year is missing after the date as is the standard in other GA race reports. ✅ Eagleash (talk) 08:14, 31 January 2016 (UTC)

General

 * For Carlos Sainz Jr, you use Sainz, Jr. and Sainz throuhgout the article. Only Sainz should be used as the need to disambiguate is not necessary. ✅ Eagleash (talk) 11:48, 31 January 2016 (UTC)

Background

 * "Pirelli cites the nature of the track and the high lateral energy loads experienced in the corners, in particular 130R — typically taken at full throttle and top speed in dry weather racing — as reasons for the hardest tyres being used. The suppliers expect a performance difference of 0.6-0.8 seconds per lap between the compounds." - Change all the uses of present tense words to past tense words.
 * Spell out DRS and put the acronym in brackets.
 * "Mercedes were leading Ferrari by 153 points," - was?
 * ✅ apart from last point; discussion at nominator's talk-page. Eagleash (talk) 11:50, 31 January 2016 (UTC)

Free practice

 * "there were two 1.5-hour sessions on Friday and another one-hour session before qualifying on Saturday" - 1.5 hour should be reworded to 90-minute.
 * "as Valtteri Bottas saved wet weather tyres." - wet weather tyres needs hyphenating.
 * "Red Bull's Daniel Ricciardo was third," Red Bull's should be spelt as Red Bull driver.
 * "Behind Ricciardo, both Williams led the two Ferraris in a session marked by all drivers doing a lot of laps due to the limited running on Friday." - I feel this sentence should be rewritten.
 * ✅ Eagleash (talk) 12:07, 31 January 2016 (UTC)

Qualifying

 * Wikilink red flag to Racing flags#Red flag as the non-motor sport expert will not understand what it is.
 * Change Manor Marussias to either Manor Marussia cars or drivers.
 * ✅ Eagleash (talk) 12:08, 31 January 2016 (UTC)

Race

 * You start many sentences with On lap xxx. Consider revising. ✅
 * "Hamilton went into pit lane for a tyre change on lap 16." - You're missing the word "the" before pit lane.✅ Eagleash (talk) 12:10, 31 January 2016 (UTC)

Post-race

 * "with Williams in third an additional 129 points behind the Scuderia." - use a different word other than Scuderia.
 * ✅ Eagleash (talk) 12:10, 31 January 2016 (UTC)