Talk:2017 Mexico City ePrix/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MX (talk · contribs) 14:00, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

Review
Hello. I'll happily review this article. Just by doing a quick overview, I can tell the article is well-written, properly uses reliable sources, and conforms to the appropriate layout. My review will consist of 2 parts. On the first one, I will go over any grammatical/spelling mistakes. On the second part, I will go over each source individually and check that the text is supported by them. Should not take me more than a few days. I'm currently out of town (I get back home tomorrow), but I'll read through it tonight and get back to you soon. Please feel free to disagree with any of my suggestions. Thanks for writing this and I look forward to reviewing it. Big thanks, MX ( ✉  •  ✎  ) 14:00, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

Part 1
Hi, please check my copyedits. Below are a few things needed to be addressed. Please scratch off the bullets when you're done going thru each of them, that way I know which are completed and can double-check them. Feel free to disagree with any of them. Great job with the article! Part 2 coming up. MX ( ✉  •  ✎  ) 02:50, 22 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Background
 * – can you link chicane? It might be useful to readers who are not familiar with racing.
 * – Instead of saying how many points Buemi was ahead from the 2nd and 3rd place racers, would it be better to simply state the amount of points the 2nd and 3rd place had? We can let the readers do the math. Similar to what you did with Vergne and Rosenqvist.
 * – Same here with Mahindra.
 * – winning the season’s three previous races.
 * – I went through the source since I was a bit confused. Can you add that his car was underweight? I would also change it to “after being stripped of the victory …” since “losing” a “victory” is a bit confusing.
 * – “ in the event that they perform well and qualify”


 * Practice and qualifying
 * – I did not understand the last part. The track was cleaned up by the vehicles driving on it?
 * – needs a period after five and before the citation.
 * – comes off a bit like a run-on sentence; I would rephrase to “… in the first sector. Despite losing a small amount of time in the second took, he took provision pole …”
 * – Ouch!
 * – Question: was Sarrazin demoted too? Or was he just found guilty of changing his gearbox? I’m asking because I was thinking of putting “… when Engel and his teammate Sarrazin were demoted”
 * – just a question, what does “round the inside” mean? Is it an official terminology used in the sport, or is it mostly a description often used by insiders? I won’t ask you to change this, but I would highly encourage you to rephrase it to readers unfamiliar with the sport.


 * Race
 * – somewhat unecyclopedic. Simply state the driver or say “from him”.
 * – nose cone replacement?
 * – “… were faster than the minimum permitted time”?
 * – these kind of phrases may confuse readers with whom you are referring to. I would stick with the last names
 * Post-race
 * – ditto; it is somewhat difficult to remember what nationality they are
 * – ditto

Part 2

 * - Is this the former name or the official name (intro says former, while infobox says official)? This name needs a reference since it is not found anywhere else in the body paragraphs (per WP:LEADCITE and WP:INFOBOXUSE).


 * Nice job archiving each source! I do the same. I'm surprise more editors aren't doing it...

General comments
Excellent article; it is very detailed and does not get off topic. There were no copyright violations. Images are copyrighted correctly. This article is ripe for promotion! MX ( ✉  •  ✎  ) 03:07, 22 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you for taking the time in reviewing this article. I have implemented the suggestions you have made above but have also made some other changes in the article which I feel are also could be an improvement. MWright96 (talk) 06:36, 22 October 2017 (UTC)